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Creator: Joxuu October 23, 2014 12:18pm
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I'd do it on my own but the spellcheck doesn't fix the sentence's construction.
Dunno how to explain it. Like my grammar may be OK but the sentence sounds funny.

Guide is: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/how-to-thresh-in-a-few-minutes-400194

Big amount of work but cheers if anyone out there is able to help out :3

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I'm reading it right now, but I'm not a native speaker so it would be appreciated if someone could jump in.
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Don't get scared and run away please, it takes time writing these things up. I always begin by writing **** and at the end I get tired and it's mostly objective, so consider this if you feel like "WTF I don't care what you think I just want it to be correct". Good luck :P

It takes quite some time to throw someone else's guide through a spell check, since we don't have access to the source. I would advise you to write your drafts in a text editor with a spell checker, or get a browser with a spell checker. Some simple text editor choices would be notepad++(Windows) and gedit. I did write down spelling mistakes I noticed but I didn't throw it through checker completely.

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ORDER WITH +800G

I would say >800G or maybe 800G+. It gets really weird when you say
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If you have -800G to spend on your first recall, [...]


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NORMAL FOLLOW UP
Should be "normally, follow up with" or "normal follow-up". TL;DR: put a - in there.

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The only problem is if leona manages to get stun on your ADC
First of all, I don't know if it's allowed to put coding in these match-up boxes but if it is I guess you could put those double brackets around Leona. If it's not allowed, I suggest "Leona".

Also, I would write "[...] problem is Leona managing to get a stun on your ADC". Also, hipsters these days say "marksman".

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You can get away with Thresh pick against/with any team composition and it's a great pick for both soloQ and teamranked.
I would say "a Thresh pick".
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The build, masteries and runes are the most efficient ones in my opinion and I will try to explain why these picks are the most viable ones in my opinion.
#somanyopinions Suggestion: "The build, masteries and runes are the most efficient in my opinion and I will try to explain why I think these picks are the most viable ones." "(In this guide) I will explain why I think these item, mastery and rune choices are the most efficient." might be enough though.

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I will also try to cover as much information as I simply can
Do you mean "as simply as I can" or do you mean "as much as I can"? You can leave "simply" there in that case but I don't think it's necessary.

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while making this guide so that it can benefit most of the readers.
I would put a comma after "guide"

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I want to discuss a little of the support role's playing style, why would you want to play support and some generic thoughts on the role.
Should be "why you would". "why would you" would be correct in active questions, or whatever that construction is called.

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The most common mistake I see is when support's who forget that.
Suggestion: "The most common mistake I see is forgetting this (fact)." "when" isn't correct AFAIK. EDIT: It is, never mind. Also, the ' is practically only used for indicating ownership and for omission, hardly(or not) for plural forms as in, for example, Dutch.

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One of the worst things you can do is go blaming your teammates
What's "go" doing there?

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because every damage you take is out of your ADC.
I would say "all" instead of "every". I would say "away from your ADC", though I can't come up with something really nice.

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You don't have to think yourself of worthless and only think of the ADC however
"To think of yourself as worthless". I would put a comma before "however".

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You should avoid dieng and just leaving the ADC in some situations where you have no tools to help the ADC at all.
"dieing". Yeah I do have to look that up every time too. This sentence reads weird though. Do you mean I shouldn't leave the ADC(to go away from), or shouldn't I get him stuck in those situations? I would make "situations" singular by the way, if you don't the sentence gets even weirder. Do you want me to leave them in only some of those situations, or in all of them?

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You are much more valueable asset in the early game than the ADC.
Should be "valuable". "You are a much more valuable asset" or "You are more valuable".

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Always remember that.
I would say "this". It's minor though.

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especially in earlier elos.
"lower". Also "Elos".

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Thresh has really good kit due high amounts of CC and they all allow alies to catch the enemy easily.
I think it needs to be "due to", for basically every time you want to use "due" in this way. You can make do with one misuse of "due", but in due time it will be too much and it irritates the reader.

What does "they" refer to? It can only refer to "amounts", while I think you want it to refer to either "kit" or "CC"(Crowd Control). I would say "and this allows"(referring to "kit" for simplicity). You could say "and all this CC" too, but then you would use "CC" twice. Just "all this" makes it too weird IMHO. My spell checker actually approves of IMHO.

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Thresh also gives a escape and re-positioning tool for ADC without escape.
Should be "an escape and repositioning tool". Also "ADC" should be plural in this case, this is also one of those situations where you might get away with throwing an apostrophe in there but I don't think you should. "ADCs".

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besides short ranged auto attacks
"short-ranged"

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Prefers aggresive lane and synergies well with strong early game ADC
Should be "aggressive lanes" or "an aggressive lane" and "ADCs".

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Attack dmg marks
You wrote all the other rune headers without abbreviations.

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I take 9x of these marks
Why the "x"?

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due to Flay passive.
"his Flay passive" or " Flay's passive".

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I prefer having full 9 AD marks so it's easier to use Relic Shield and deal great damage with AA.
Either take "full" or "9". I honestly don't know whether you are allowed to omit "to" but I guess this is alright. Also "AAs".

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I feel I won't need to extra armor too much
"I feel I won't need the extra armor that much", "I feel I don't need too much extra armor". Pick your meaning.

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You situationally can take armor seals too by all means tough.
Can I take it by all means(in all situations) or in certain situations?

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Some supports build AP heavy items and we could include enemy jungler there and there is always the mid laner too so really basic value glyphs to take.
"AP-heavy", "the enemy jungler". Also, what's "value" doing there? Also, since you're already using "there" twice, I suggest going for "there's".

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I don't like hp quints value.
"HP"(Health Points). "I don't like the value of HP quints", "I don't like HP quints' value.

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your preferication
"preference".

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obvious picks from tier 1 as there is no better choices.
"are".

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in the earlier elos
"lower Elos". It's not like Silver existed before Diamond. Unless you're Master-tier then it's alright. Well I don't think so but I'm trying to be funny here, alright?

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Throw a ':' in there.

Put a "are" after "Next", optionally with "up" in front of it.

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you use summoners at the same with top lane
"at the same time as top lane"

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Alchemist gives nice amount of extra sustain.
"a nice amount".

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and gold regen mastery is nobrainer out of the picks left.
"the gold generation mastery is a no brainer".

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It's especially good on Thresh due giving the chance to make awesome plays with it.
I still think you should throw a "to" in there. Also "giving" and "with it" seem a bit too much to me. Suggestion: "due to giving the chance to make awesome plays" or "because he can make awesome plays with it".

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Exhaust is really good pick
"a". Use those "a"s more.

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to pretty much completly shutdown enemy ADC damage
"completely". Also, a shutdown is what happens when I cut the cable of my computer. The verb is "to shut down". "To shut down the enemy ADC's damage".

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It's not a ideal pick
"an".

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Relic Shield + potions/wards is pretty standard starting
"is a pretty standard starting choice" or "are pretty standard starting items".

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The very core items of Thresh or basically any supports
I would say "for Thresh". "any support". Also I never buy Mikael's QQ

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Frozen Heart is good against AA reliant team
"against an AA-reliant team" or "against AA-reliant teams". Nobody will hurt you for not using '-' by the way.

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I feel like randuin's helps overall and is a better general item.
I guess you could write "Randuin's". Also I would throw a "more" in there and change some other stuff: "I feel like "Randuin's helps more overall and is generally a better item."

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because Ancient Coin is really bad item
"is really bad" or "is a really bad item".

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It's active is sometimes better
"Its". You don't mean "It is" but you mean "(the item) of it".

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I'd recommend Ancient Coin start only for beginners.
"I'd recommend an Ancient Coin start".

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Ruby Sightstone is situational item
"a". It's only one, sometimes two letters. Please use it. - My inner grammar extremist.

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when you just have enough gold laying around after full build
I'd write "after your full build" "after getting your full build", thought I think this is correct. Also you might want to add it's good if you have a lot of vision wars because of the extra charge in case people don't get it.

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it does give more shield as it's leveled up.
"as it levels up".

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Flay is maxed as last
I suggest "is maxed lastly".

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build focuses on utility so offensive ability is maxed last.
"so the offensive ability is maxed last" or "so offensive abilities are maxed last". Your native language is French, right? If I say there's no English form of "des", but there is an English version of "un(e)", does that make any sense?

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due it's the ultimate and benefits greatly from levels.
"due to it being the ultimate (ability) and because it benefits greatly from levels".

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also great ability to throw at
"a".

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It's also great ability
"a".

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especially if against melee one.
"a".

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when you want to pull enemy towards you
"b".

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you have to aim behind you.
I would write "yourself" since you have used "you" a few times already.

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Every ADC above that list has good synergy
"In that list above" or "listed above".

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Everything out of this list are still OK.
"is".

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so you cna make plays


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lot's of damage
"lots".

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have lot's of damage, burst, long range, poke or just lane dominant
"to have lane dominance". "to be dominant in lane"

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Everything out of the list
This could mean "everything listed", while you mean "everything not in the list".

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These are just examples and everything out of that list can certainly work better than those above of it.
I don't understand what you're trying to say.

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I put this section in 3 different sections
"I divided this sections in 3 different parts" or "subsections" or whatever. Using "section" twice isn't nice.

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Otherwise you propably just want
"probably".

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want to help ADC
"your ADC", "the ADC".

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for fast level 2
"for a fast level 2"

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Level 2 is really srong
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Cheers! I'll take a look at the fixes for the next update.

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Welp, I screwed up. I said the correct spelling was "dieing" but it's "dying". My bad.
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I can look it over, if you want. Could you possibly copy and paste the content of the guide into a word document? That would make it easier to do so.
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That would be super awesome :3

I have saved the guide as text only in my wordpad so there shouldn't be any coding in it.
I've made some changes according to spellchecks/Latest Legend but I barely got started.

Whole guide in the spoiler below

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I'm currently somewhat OK with the current grammar/spellchecks but if you want to do it, I would be really grateful. There is no urgent need cus it's really pain in the *** to do.

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Here you are:
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This is what I've fixed/changed so far. It should be void of grammatical and spelling errors, I've also reworded some awkward sentences for clarity's sake. If you want me to go ahead and keep doing the latter, I can go through it with a bit more scrutiny.
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Thanks! Gave ya +rep for the work.

I think I'll manage now. I'm happy as long as the guide is
understandable so no need for really troughout search.

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You're welcome. There was no need to +rep me for it, but thanks.

If you need anything else proofread, don't hesitate to ask.

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