jhoijhoi's review & discussion service

[quote=Searz]I recommend adding a rule about not reviewing guides for new champions until 2 weeks after the release. If you come back that is.[/quote]

[quote=Sacull_Kinslayer]A little late on the response but I have been working on it. It took me longer than I expected due to family issues, time restraints, work, and a few other issues. And it is still a work in progress. But I addressed many of the issues. [quote=jhoijhoi] Constructive Criticism: 1) Your summoner spells are not ideal. Considering that [[cataclysm]] is such a great cc ability, you'd want to utilise [[flash]] to pull it off in case you don't combo [[demacian standard]] and [[dragon strike]] right.[/quote] Having done some more thinking on it due to your suggestion I have changed my summoner spells to reflect that. Flash is better than I thought it was. I think part of my previous problem with it was that I was not good at using it. But I have worked on that and definitely see it is possibly the best summoner spell. [quote]2) Your "Skills" section could use some colour to emphasise the different abilities. Like Searz said, you need some differentiation between ideas.[/quote] Added some color here. [quote]3) [[unstoppable force]] can only get into [[cataclysm]], not out of it.[/quote] fixed [quote]4) ? This isn't a jungle Jarvan guide? o.O[/quote] Added some info on jungling. [quote]5) Your "Core Build"s made me confused. Maybe coz I'm tired, but a lot of it seemed like repeated information... why not just have all the items listed as: Early Game Mid Game Late Game for better organisation?[/quote] done [quote]6) I think the problem I'm having is how you've formatted the guide. I think these sections need to be merged: "A Note on Jarvan's DPS with Tank Items. And some low level tips" + "General Tips for Tank Builds"[/quote] fixed [quote]7) "WARMOG'S ARMOR vs MADRED'S BLOODRAZOR. The Math." should be at the end of the guide (is it really imperitive to have it in the middle?). It doesn't really do anything to your guide - like, what are you trying to say with it? "Resistances are only good with health" - that basically sums up the entire section.[/quote] moved [quote]8) "The Tank: Your Place in Things" should be somewhere before the gameplay section. If I were to reorganise your guide, it'd look like this: Introduction Operation Human Shield My @$$! (aka A Warning) Masteries Summoner Spells Runes Skills Golden Aegis E+Q: A Knock Up Combo. Cataclysm. Jarvan's ultimate, an expanded explanation. Counters to Cataclysm and Tips on Countering the Counters. Weird Bugs with Cataclysm and the Knock Up Combo. A Note on Jarvan's DPS with Tank Items. And some low level tips + General Tips for Tank Builds General Items Builds (the items you get most of the time) Alternative Items Discussed (the items you get rarely) Creepin 'n Crawlin: Laning and Jungling The Tank: Your Place in Things + Team Fights WARMOG'S ARMOR vs MADRED'S BLOODRAZOR. The Math.[/quote] done [quote]9) I do think you need to do a little bit of rearranging. I also think your "countering" sections need some columns or something to make the space used smaller. So, for example: [colums]Ignite: Your shield can save your life against a ticking ignite. Ashe's Enchanted Crystal Arrow: Better to avoid this but if the impact might kill you then your shield should be used. Caitlyn's Ace in the Hole Dr. Mundo's Infected Cleaver: Better to avoid but if you can't... Ezreal's Trueshot Barrage: Better to avoid as well... Heimerdinger's Hextech Micro-Rockets and CH-1 Concussion Grenade Karthus's Requiem [nextcol][color=black]space[/color] [nextcol]LeBlanc and about anything she does if you are low on health. Lux's Lucent Singularity and Finales Funkeln. Miss Fortune's Make it Rain and Bullet Time. Mordekaiser and anything he does when you are low health. Your shield is especially useful during the ticks of Children of the Grave. Nidalee's Javelin Toss / Takedown. The Javelin Toss part you can shield against. Nunu's Ice Blast and Absolute Zero. Preferably you will interrupt AZ... but if not... Olaf's Undertow.[/columns] [/quote] fixed. Though it took me a while to figure out how to do columns. They are not my favorite but it does organize it better. [quote]10) A jungling section would be good. There's a reason why Jarvan was the best performing tank at dreamhack. [/quote] I added several videos dealing with Jungling from Stonewall. They offer more information than I ever could. [quote=Searz] You'll want one point in Nimbleness or no dodge at all. [/quote] fixed as well. 2% dodge wasn't really all that the more I thought about it. Again I appreciate you guys help in doing all this. I had been wanting to reorganize and condense my Jarvan guide for a while I just didn't know how to do it. Thank you again. I do think it looks much better now. If you have any other suggestions by all means let me know.[/quote]

[quote=NicknameMy]You also looked at my Garen-Guide. Then you can also write something about it here^^.[/quote]

[quote=da_neo]Guide For (champion): [[Annie]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I´m not sure about my english skills. Maybe it can be made look nicer here and there What I'd like you to focus on: Proof-Read it. /everything ;) Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/annie-hide-and-seek-101351]Annie guide[/url] It´s archieved, because I´d like to publish it when it´s really finished and not with tons of grammar mistakes in it :P[/quote]

[quote=wRAthoFVuLK]can we get a temp lock or something so the requests stop coming in?[/quote]

[quote=Jebus McAzn]I asked Jhoi on facebook if she wants a temp lock and I haven't gotten a response yet.[/quote]

[quote=Summoner]Honestly, if all it took for her to leave was for me to be a part of the community, I would have become super active [i]ages[/i] ago. Oh well. Btw, wouldn't mind my newest guide reviewed :D[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]haha Jet. Can't wait for you to be banned again. You're such a troll you couldn't help yourself. All you had to do was lay low. Be normal. But you just couldn't help yourself. The mods/admin will ban you for circumventing your IP ban. So enjoy your posting privileges while you still have them. [color=pink]:)[/color][/quote]

[quote=Jebus McAzn]locking this now brb[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][quote=NicknameMy] You also looked at my Garen-Guide. Then you can also write something about it here^^. [/quote] Please read the rules. [color=#ff0000][b]Pending Rework of Champion[/b][/color] [quote=A Red Feather] Guide For (champion): Evelynn Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I believe I have found the perfect medium for Evelynn. Players either utilize her amazing skill set with bursty AP and lack sustain in combat or do the opposite as AD Eve. I truly believe my guide is how Eve is meant to be played, and I want other players to try it out. Just have to wait for her buff now! :D What I'd like you to focus on: My Summoner Spells (in regards to Flash), the core build itself, and my explanation on GP/5 items, to see if I have proper justification. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/something-wicked-this-way-comes-hybrid-roaming-eve-90463 [/quote] [quote=DeadlyTricks] Guide For: [[Evelynn]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My guide has been mostly unnoticed and I'd like some criticism and an opinion or two about it What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think may be incorrect or poorly explained Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/evelynn-a-comprohensive-guide-ad-ap-and-hybrid-75731]Linky[/url] [/quote] [color=#ff0000][b]Pending Remake of Guide[/b][/color] [quote=Chesswinner] My guide for: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/gangplank-the-spooky-pirate-99448]Gangplank, the Saltwater Scourge[/url] Why I'd like you to review it: Some criticism, to know was six hours making of it worthful, etc. =D [/quote] [color=#008000][b]Reviewable Guides[/b][/color] [quote=Lakapooty] Sorry to be a nussience but can you review my guide again? I changed A LOT of things since last time you viewed it. The like is right here: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/the-tankish-lifestealing-aproach-to-xin-zhao-100550 Also how do I put "Xin Zhao" instead of that link and it would still take you to my guide? I've seen that a lot and it looks way better. Thanks for helping!!! [/quote] [quote=FiniteParadox] Guide for: Cassiopeia Why I'd like this to be improved: Flaws, criticism, general things needed to be improved upon. What I'd like you to focus on: Well, anything and nothing. Don't want you to focus on anything specific and have more of a broad review to give me the best idea of what is needed to make it better. Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/cassiopeia-snake-in-the-bush-101074]Cassiopeia[/url] [/quote] [quote=da_neo] Guide For (champion): [[Annie]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I´m not sure about my english skills. Maybe it can be made look nicer here and there What I'd like you to focus on: Proof-Read it. /everything ;) Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/annie-hide-and-seek-101351]Annie guide[/url] It´s archieved, because I´d like to publish it when it´s really finished and not with tons of grammar mistakes in it :P [/quote] [quote=palzm] Can you review my guide on [[leona]] No ones seems to notice my guides :/ http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/radiating-sunshine-101349 [color=#ff0000]NOTE FROM JHOIJHOI: [/color]I was going to ignore your request due to the fact that I have rules of submission for requests (the way I'm ignoring the above Garen guide, but I actually was already in the process of reviewing your guide for commenting on on of my guides, so lol. [/quote] Am going to watch Transformers now, so I'll review sometime later tonight/tomorrow. Thanks for your patience.[/quote]