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[quote=NinjaNick95]I'd like to request a review, please :) My guide is brand new for Season 3 and can be reviewed whenever you get the chance. Name: NinjaNick95 =P Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/season-3-jungle-amumu-off-tank-ap-and-pure-ap-270317 Have I read your guide: You bet, used some separators and gave credit as well :) Have I spell-checked: Yep![/quote]

[quote=ShortyHUN]Hi there! Got a review for you, cant refuse, I'm really good at cooking ;) Name: ShortyHUN Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-insanity-season-3-269839 Have I read you guide: umm not sure if more than 10 or 20 times lol Have I spell-checked: Double checked, sorry if I overlooked something[/quote]

[quote=Roronoa EvrIs]Back for a re-review if you please. Summoner Name: Roronoa Evris Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (Time of Request): 176 Spell+Grammar check: Yes Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide?: YES! Guide for (champion): [[Shen]] Why I'd Like This Reviewed: I have updated it for S3 and kept your suggestions in mind. What I'd Like You to Focus on: Again almost everything I guess. :) Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/ap-tank-shen-ninja-gaiden-in-lol-196144]here it is[/url][/quote]

[quote=Patyfatycake]Name: Patyfatycake Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/season-3-time-to-play-the-league-of-draven-263963 Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES although grammar is not my strong suite.[/quote]

[quote=CounterSnipe]Name: CounterSnipe Link http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/support-leona-season-3-271286 I read your guide. You're in my credits section. I'll write you a poem and I'll draw you a picture. I have the best spell check in the world.[/quote]

[quote=Nemo]Name: Nemo Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/note-in-da-head-retribution-and-protection-sona-guide-s3-173940 Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? Yes Have you run your guide through a spell check? Yes, but have to make some more fixes tho :P. Best regards, Your Nemo.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Jesus, I let this go on for a little bit... I'll update the queue D:[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][color=#0080ff][h2][b]Current Requests[/b][/h2][/color] ------------------ Slowly plowing through the list. [spoiler=That Trev Person][quote=That Trev Person] Name: That Trev Person Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/jungle-amumu-a-guide-to-depressing-your-enemies-193252]Amumusosad[/url] Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES Forgot to post this when I first published my guide, and I'm curious to hear your opinion :D [/quote] [/spoiler] [spoiler=CounterSnipe][quote=CounterSnipe] Hello :D I'm Countersnipe on the N.A. Server! I wrote this guide on how to jungle Jarvan: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/i-jungle-jarvan-267605 I read your guide on how to make guides super awesome and put you in my credits section along with TheOddOne and Stonewall008 :D I also know how to spell and use spell check! I'm hoping you can give me criticism on this jungle guide for J4. It is my first guide, but I made it look nice and pretty and everything! It took me about 10 hours or so to accomplish XD [/quote] [/spoiler] [spoiler=Nytrite][quote=Nytrite] Name: Nytrite Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/updated-let-me-fizz-you-up-a-fizz-guide-245850 YES YES Hope you could check my guide, I really want to know on what other people think ^^ [/quote] [/spoiler] [spoiler=NinjaNick95][quote=NinjaNick95] I'd like to request a review, please :) My guide is brand new for Season 3 and can be reviewed whenever you get the chance. Name: NinjaNick95 =P Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/season-3-jungle-amumu-off-tank-ap-and-pure-ap-270317 Have I read your guide: You bet, used some separators and gave credit as well :) Have I spell-checked: Yep! [/quote][/spoiler] [spoiler=ShortyHUN][quote=ShortyHUN] Hi there! Got a review for you, cant refuse, I'm really good at cooking ;) Name: ShortyHUN Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-insanity-season-3-269839 Have I read you guide: umm not sure if more than 10 or 20 times lol Have I spell-checked: Double checked, sorry if I overlooked something [/quote][/spoiler] [spoiler=Roronoa EvrIs][quote=Roronoa EvrIs] Back for a re-review if you please. Summoner Name: Roronoa Evris Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (Time of Request): 176 Spell+Grammar check: Yes Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide?: YES! Guide for (champion): [[Shen]] Why I'd Like This Reviewed: I have updated it for S3 and kept your suggestions in mind. What I'd Like You to Focus on: Again almost everything I guess. :) Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/ap-tank-shen-ninja-gaiden-in-lol-196144]here it is[/url] [/quote][/spoiler] [spoiler=Patyfatycake][quote=Patyfatycake] Name: Patyfatycake Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/season-3-time-to-play-the-league-of-draven-263963 Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES although grammar is not my strong suite. [/quote][/spoiler] [spoiler][quote=CounterSnipe] Name: CounterSnipe Link http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/support-leona-season-3-271286 I read your guide. You're in my credits section. I'll write you a poem and I'll draw you a picture. I have the best spell check in the world. [/quote][/spoiler] [spoiler=Nemo][quote=Nemo] Name: Nemo Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/note-in-da-head-retribution-and-protection-sona-guide-s3-173940 Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? Yes Have you run your guide through a spell check? Yes, but have to make some more fixes tho :P. Best regards, Your Nemo. [/quote][/spoiler] [columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- [/columns][/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- That Trev Person [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/jungle-amumu-a-guide-to-depressing-your-enemies-193252]SR Jungle Amumu[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- [color=#008000]8/10[/color] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 09/12/12 [/columns] [spoiler=That Trev Person's SR Jungle Amumu Guide Review] [color=#0080ff][h2]Cheat Sheet[/h2][/color] ------------------ [b]Purchase Order[/b] > "Temporary placeholder"? =.= Also, I think a combination of both builds would be the best. I really think that jungle Amumu would benefit from an early [[philosopher's stone]] over Doran's, and of course the upgrade is fantastic for intitations. [b]Ability Sequence[/b] > I would suggest writing a note here that grabbing an early level of Q will allow better ganks. [b]Masteries[/b] > [[summoner's resolve]] for the extra [[smite]] gold? 4 Smites and that's a free Health potion. 8 Smites and that's a free [[sight ward]]. Smite cools down every 70 seconds without mastery reductions - that's almost 10 gold free per minute. For 4 mastery points, [[greed]] gives 12 gold per minute. [h2][color=#0080ff]Guide[/color][/h2] -------------------- [b]Introduction[/b] > I'd try to condense this chapter a bit. For example, using two columns, you could have that "Need a hug" image next to the text, significantly improving aesthetics and conserving space. Why the double enters, btw? [b]Masteries[/b] > Um... this is not updated for Season Three. [b]Runes[/b] > Don't list unused runes. No one really uses Fortitude Quints anymore. [b]Ability Explanation[/b] > "all champions in the surrounding area instantly have damage" rofl. Didn't know CotSM gave enemies a damage boost :P [b]Core Items[/b] > No mentions of Enchanments for boots, and to my knowledge, [[force of nature]] was removed from the game ;) [b]Enemy Junglers[/b] > "It is haunted by many monsters besides those mentioned above such as Clowns, Dragons, Werewolves, and Monks." You're amazing :P However, I don't understand the "Difficulty" scale you've got going. Do you mean, "difficult to kill", or "difficult to versus"? I think you need to rethink those values, as a Cho jungler > Mundo jungler in teamfights, however, Mundo jungle is faster than Cho (by a small amount). [b]Hall of Fame[/b] > I'd spoiler this section to cut down the length of your guide. [color=#0080ff][h2][b]Score[/b][/h2][/color] ---------------------- [b]Appearance[/b] > 2/3. I like the coding you do have in your guide, but I think that it can be improved. Your guide is extremely written word heavy and I believe adding in some more visual relief will help your readers. If you need some help with coding, send me a PM and we can discuss it over Skype or something. [b]Content[/b] > 2.5/3. Have I ever seen a more near-perfect guide in my life, content wise? Nope. That being said, you can always improve your content! Like in the summary chapter, you have several objectives you still wish to achieve, such as a warding section etc. I love every content chapter in your guide. I can already tell that thousands of people will have learnt loads from your guide. You are a huge contribution to the legitmance of good MobaFire guides, thank you! [b]Viability[/b] > 3.5/4. Dat [[force of nature]]. Dem [[vigor]] masteries :P Update your guide for Season Three, like you told me. Like I said in the cheat section, I think the Double Doran's is hoping too much. A new jungle Amumu would benefit more from buying a Philo Stone for the mana and health regen + the gold gen and upgrade for intitiation. Everything else is amazing, love it. [b]Total Score > 8 - Upvote (only receivable with a reply to this thread).[/b] Your guide is pretty amazing and definitely deserves the top spot. If you want to further improve your guide and earn this +Scout Point for reals, update the guide for S3 and make a few changes for guide aesthetics - reward your dedicated readers with a little bit of visual rest. You don't have to do much, but really, your guide is fantastic, and it can only get better with a graphic overhaul :) +1, +Scout, +rep... reply to receive. [/spoiler][/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- CounterSnipe [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/i-jungle-jarvan-season-3-267605]SR Jungle Jarvan[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- [color=#008000]6.5[/color] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 10/12/12 [/columns] [spoiler=CounterSnipe's Jungle Jarvan Guide Review] [color=#0080ff][h2]Cheat Sheet[/h2][/color] ------------------ [b]Runes[/b] > For a second I was confused about the Attack Speed runes, but then I realised it was a jungle guide, rofl. With this in mind, flat MR seems odd - whilst you will get in skirmishes early game, I don't see Jarvan dying to AP mid. I think scaling would serve you better. [b]Purchase Order[/b] > Not sure if I like the [[atma's impaler]] here when items such as [[iceborn gauntlet]] would give more damage and the same-ish armour. [b]Ability Sequence[/b] > I would suggest writing a note here that grabbing an early level of Q will allow better ganks. [b]Masteries[/b] > Why grab [[Butcher]] over [[Fury]]? [[jaggernaut]] > [[tenacious]] in my personal opinion. [h2][color=#0080ff]Guide[/color][/h2] -------------------- [b]Introduction[/b] > Initially I thought the pros/cons was about your guide. You should make it clear that you're talking about Jarvan here. [b]Runes[/b] > For the love of god, read over your work for grammatical/syntax errors. "You they also help"; read your words aloud to find poorly worded sentences. If you mention that the runes can be swapped out, you should have some alternatives listed. [b]Jungling and Routes[/b] > You could add a jungle route map in here for more clarification. [b]Match ups[/b] > You could add headings to each of these seperate types of junglers. [color=#0080ff][h2][b]Score[/b][/h2][/color] ---------------------- [b]Appearance[/b] > 1.5/3. You're on the right track, but there's still heaps of room for improvement. For example, it should be ICON | (space) | Text - that's three columns, otherwise the text touches the icon. Most of your coding can be "fixed"/upgraded to this formatting and it'll improve the aesthetic appeal of your guide. I really like the skill pictures, they're helpful, especially the image of dropping your flag over the wall. Additionally, if you use line dividers, you should add an extra space before and after it so the images don't touch the text. [b]Content[/b] > 2/3. I like your explainations of pretty much everything except the really short chapters about runes and masteries. You lose points because of these chapters; they're pretty important, but you spend no time to explain your choices here. I also think you could list a few more alternative items. What about [[iceborn gauntlet]]? [b]Viability[/b] > 3/4. Pretty darn viable, and very similar to what I'd build except the Atma's, which is why you lost points here. I'd recommend using the multiple purchase orders available in the new MobaFire builder so you can explain your choices better. [b]Total Score > 6.5 - Upvote (only receivable with a reply to this thread).[/b] Your guide REALLY doesn't deserve the low score it has, and I'd recommend archiving it and re-releasing it. The area that needs most improvement in your guide are aesthetics via formatting. Your content is great and I feel as if new Jarvan players would really benefit from reading your guide, well done :)[/spoiler][/quote]