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July 30, 2012 7:37am
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Hey guys, im thinking about getting into an Epic Rap battles of history, League of Legends style project, with some of the other people on this forum. I've written my own rap, and plan to do a mix for it on FL9 later and do some recording, and was wondering if some of my more musically inclined peers could critique my work? would really appreciate it.

Rap Battle: Cho'Gath vs Fiddlesticks
Intro: Epic Rap Battles of LoL!!!! Chogath... VERSUS.... FIDDLESTIIIIIIIICKS BEGIN!
Cho:
Welcome to the void, fiddlesticks,
I'm about to snap you like a pile of twigs
Cause thats all you are, a scare-crow wannabe
That cant even do his job, they flock around like you're their mommy
If i had one thought in my head
That you would be a challenge for me
I might bother with
Maxing my stacks of Feast
But as it stands im already head and shoulders above you
Run along kid, isnt it past your curfew?
I AM the monster sitting, lurking under your bed,
Screw the boogey man, i already ate off his ugly head!
Fiddle, there are stains upon your soul
And i find that perfect
Cause im about to smoke a bowl
And use you for your side effects!
Fiddle:
Take a seat, Rex,
Before I wipe you out
Like a million ton comet!
They call you the terror of the void, what a joke,
Ive seen you made into plushy dolls,
Fear, that does not evoke!
You think im afraid of you? Here, lemme show you the meaning of fear!
You better look to the skies, because with me, the end is near!
Cause I'm the Harbinger of Doom,
That means I bring the pain
Into each and every room,
Your life will never be the same!
I make nightmares come true,
And heroes never come through,
Seeing images you can't undo,
Im not the kind of monster you're likely used to!
Cho:
What can you do? You're nothing more than a wic
On a powder keg of failure imminent!
Try to jungle but you're clear time's a joke
Gettin upstaged by this classy bloke!
Try to take on mid, ill meet you there,
Trust me on this, you're unprepared!
Ill crush you like a house of sticks,
Use your arm as my personal toothpick!
I dominate any lane, AP or on-hit,
Making the enemy team throw a burning rage-fit!
A tank with no tank items,
Heavy CC, knock-up and silence,
What chance do you have, you scrawny little *****
Go back to champ select, grab a real player, and SWITCH
Fiddle:
Oh, please, you stone-age *****,
What could you do to make me lose, see
I'm the scariest thing that ever hit the rift
As soon as Ez sees me, he hits Arcane Shift
Yeah, Im made of sticks, but I don't need stones to break your bones
And crush your face, what a waste of space, a flat out disgrace!
I'll drain your life away till you're nothing more than a sack of skin ran astray
My crowstorm changes games,
each of my birds kicks *** and takes a different name,
They call me the demented crow herder,
Think its a coincidence that a flock of them is called a Murder?
You can't beat me, you're nothing more than a wussified tyrannosaurus,
mixed with a ******ed walrus,
In fact I'm on the phone with John Hammond, he's a blast,
He's on his way right now to shove a frog up your ***!

Thanks for reading this through, advice, ciritcism, critiques, it would all be very much appreciated! thanks!
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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by Turbo Punz » July 30, 2012 2:45pm | Report
:D
Love it. Hope you follow through with it. I'm here if you need any help of any sort.

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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by Lugignaf » July 30, 2012 2:53pm | Report
If you need a voice for it, I could always lend a hand.

Fiddles' parts don't seem to mesh very well together though. At least the first one doesn't.
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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by Arkharan » July 30, 2012 2:58pm | Report
Man no lugi's voice is so annoying don't do eeet!
Was an awesome lecture btw.

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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by The Overmyynd » July 30, 2012 4:15pm | Report
Yeah, fiddle's first verse probably needs some work, i was still working on getting into my groove (i havent written rap or poetry in some time). While i was planning on doing the voices myself (thats kind of what i'm doing this for, its a bit of an interview for the position) i really don't have the patience to make a full beat on FL Studios 9, so if anyone wants to throw together a beat, i would def take that and make sure you get the creative credit! I would want something kind of dirty and creepy, if you know what im talking about. Thanks for the support and help guys!
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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by Crows foot » July 30, 2012 4:17pm | Report
I know you can write, but I'm not enough of a "rap nigga ganstah yo mama" dude to say something about it before it is voiced xD
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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by The Overmyynd » July 30, 2012 4:20pm | Report
And does everyone know what im talking about when i threw down John Hammond?
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no idea, but then again I'm from Sweden.
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LOL John Hammond was the geneticist that created all the dinosaurs on Jurasic Park by taking the bits and pieces of DNA from mosquitoes and filling in the gaps with Frog DNA
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Permalink | Quote | PM | +Rep | Commend by The LZ » July 31, 2012 5:12am | Report
Needs some work, as there's some bits
which don't rhyme, when I think they should.
Like, there were some dead ends. Could just be me.
"(Btw LZ, I read all of your posts like a poem because your paragraphs look like stanzas. It's rather amusing. :P)" - PsiGuard
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why you write like that" - wRAthoFVuLK
"Why DO you write like that?" - Amazing Monkey
"Why do you write like that LZ?" - iownedya
"no-one knows, but it is unique.
An artist originalising his work,
per say. Yet what have I done,
I have copied his work.
It's probably wrong too, but lolz. Keep at it LZ, since it makes reading your posts interesting." - ShiftyCake
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