I think what has been said above is just about what I was going to say. It needs more images of abilities etc. There are sections that actually look good.

Also, it's probably a good idea to add more information, like in the Items section.

Not voting yet, I'm going to check back on this guide later on.

This is more like a cooking instruction:
Do this, do that and you will get a delicious dinner.

What this guide misses is explanation why it will be a delicious dinner.
Is it because the early Doran's Blade or the late game Guardian Angel?

For some people it is obvious, but you are supposed to explain it for the people for who it is not obvious :P

Hold their hands and tell them everything they want to know.

So what do I advice? Tell the readers more about the reason of your choices.

No vote for now, I believe you can do this correctly ;D

PM me if you want my vote after the update, or if you have questions
-Meiyjhe

^ Basically that...
Especially try to work on improving your mastery explanations and spelling and capitalization...sort of painful to read...

Hello Calyrith!

To be honest your guide is not bad at all for a first timer =3 I personally just started on making guides too, and this helped me a lot: How to make a guide

My comments for your guides:
you need quite a lot more explanation for a lot of things. For example, the summoner spells do not have enough explanation, a little too brief perhaps. Columns are a good idea, too

Also, to utilize more graphics, like pictures and colors would help make the people read it. So far, I do not want to read all of it. =S But as long as you put some more pictures, it will be fine. You can take mine as an example, it still lacks pictures, but it does help a lot with just a few pictures. Unfortunately i cannot put my link here, as it might break the MobaFire rules.

Finally, I've found some typo in your guide. Eg: in Intro there is a comma followed immediately but a full stop; you spell last whisper "last wishper'. These are minor things, but it helps give the person reading it a better idea of your guide. (rather attitude?)

And one thing about your build, I thought maybe Marks with Attack speed and Seals with attack damage may be a better choice? Just suggesting. Also, adding a part for her ultimate usage would be great as well. Needs a little more explanation for each section other than intro and conclusion.

I must say it's a good job for the first guide! For now, I can't give you a voting, because i really don't want to give you a down vote. I'll check back soon and see if there are any improvements, if there are, I'll definitely give u an up vote. Work hard!

Conanap