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Finally, Chapter 1 is complete! A little late but better late than never. The name of the Light Novel is Harukaze which means Spring Wind or Spring Breeze. I personally like the name. I don't think it's the best but it's certainly not bad. It's good enough. Before I give you the link to the LN I'll answer some questions you guys might have for me:
Q: Why "Harukaze"?
A: It's a good fit for the Light Novel and the main character.
Q: Why are there only 4 characters excluding the protagonist's parents?
A: The rest of the characters will be introduced in Chapter 2.
Q: How long is this Light Novel gonna be?
A: Volume 1 should have 4 Chapters. 5, at most but probably 4.
Q: Are you gonna continue writing it after Volume 1?
A: We shall see. If most of the feedback I get isn't "This is garbage" I'll probably continue writing it.
Q: What about illustrations?
A: I have a friend who is gonna draw them for me. Once he completes the illustrations for Chapter 1 I'll share them in another post. I don't really need illustrations until I get it published or something but the guy who is gonna draw them really likes drawing and it'll be a good experience for him.
So that's about it. Once (and if) you guys read it I would VERY MUCH appreciate a review on it. I don't care if you thought it's trash or if you loved it. All I want is an honest review. I won't be offended at all even if you say "It's ****ing bad!" as long as you say why it's bad.
I want you to tell me your opinions on the pacing of the story, the characters and anything else you might think of. If you think it's lacking something don't hesitate to tell me what that something is. Also, if you don't understand something in the LN go ahead and ask me about it in the comments.
I'm really excited for the feedback and I'll look and reply to all of it tomorrow. It's 6 AM where I live. I stayed up so I could work on it. Sue me xD ...
https://drive.google.com/folderview?id=0B3YLHgjoAg1yQjJtelV0dGFvM00&usp=sharing
Q: Why "Harukaze"?
A: It's a good fit for the Light Novel and the main character.
Q: Why are there only 4 characters excluding the protagonist's parents?
A: The rest of the characters will be introduced in Chapter 2.
Q: How long is this Light Novel gonna be?
A: Volume 1 should have 4 Chapters. 5, at most but probably 4.
Q: Are you gonna continue writing it after Volume 1?
A: We shall see. If most of the feedback I get isn't "This is garbage" I'll probably continue writing it.
Q: What about illustrations?
A: I have a friend who is gonna draw them for me. Once he completes the illustrations for Chapter 1 I'll share them in another post. I don't really need illustrations until I get it published or something but the guy who is gonna draw them really likes drawing and it'll be a good experience for him.
So that's about it. Once (and if) you guys read it I would VERY MUCH appreciate a review on it. I don't care if you thought it's trash or if you loved it. All I want is an honest review. I won't be offended at all even if you say "It's ****ing bad!" as long as you say why it's bad.
I want you to tell me your opinions on the pacing of the story, the characters and anything else you might think of. If you think it's lacking something don't hesitate to tell me what that something is. Also, if you don't understand something in the LN go ahead and ask me about it in the comments.
I'm really excited for the feedback and I'll look and reply to all of it tomorrow. It's 6 AM where I live. I stayed up so I could work on it. Sue me xD ...
https://drive.google.com/folderview?id=0B3YLHgjoAg1yQjJtelV0dGFvM00&usp=sharing
Is this a slice of life Genre?
Even for this type of genre its still pretty bad.
This is a typical boy meets girl plot, boy falls in love, some problems come.....;..
i have seen this a million times. its very unorginal.
Mostly a slice-of-life with a little bit of romance and comedy here and there. I can assure you it's not gonna be a generic "boy meets girl and falls in love with her". It's gonna follow the everyday lives of the characters with the occasional romantic/comedic moments. Haru's relationship with Emi will be fairly important but it won't be what the story is about. Plus, he might not even get together with her. We shall see! :P
Awesome! Will read and get back to you :D
Edit: Just finished reading! I really liked it so far! A couple little nitpicky things you might want to work on, but they're more of a final revision type thing, so idk if you want to write the rest of it before worrying about little nitpicks, but either way:
Those are the three big (well, small) things i noticed so far. I really liked the main character, very relatable, for me anyway lol :D
Can't wait for Chapter 2!
Thank you for the review. Very helpful! Here's my response to each of the things you mentioned:
Repetition - I agree with this one. Sometimes it's hard not to overuse words though. I'm trying my best not to do that!
Flavor - Again, I agree. I'm still trying to learn the LN style of writing. I'm definitely improving and I think you can tell there's an improvement after Chapter 3.
Character description - In-general, I agree with this one but I don't fully agree on the Emi description. I think the description that was provided was just enough. It definitely could have been more detailed though. Obviously, since you mentioned it o.o
Anyways, thanks for the help. Even if the majority of the people don't like it at least I'll have 1 guy who liked it. That's something! =D
Is this a slice of life Genre?
Even for this type of genre its still pretty bad.
This is a typical boy meets girl plot boy falls in love some problems come.....;..
i have seen this a million times. its very unorginal.
OR IS IT....DUN DUN DUN! but seriously, I wouldn't base your opinion solely off the fact that the first chapter is a typical romantic plot
Even for this type of genre its still pretty bad.
This is a typical boy meets girl plot, boy falls in love, some problems come.....;..
i have seen this a million times. its very unorginal.
Edit: Just finished reading! I really liked it so far! A couple little nitpicky things you might want to work on, but they're more of a final revision type thing, so idk if you want to write the rest of it before worrying about little nitpicks, but either way:
Those are the three big (well, small) things i noticed so far. I really liked the main character, very relatable, for me anyway lol :D
Can't wait for Chapter 2!