Agreed ^^ If you really want to go Crit Udyr, I would advise maxing phoenix instead of Turtle. Turtle really cripples the whole reason behind this build. Grab a lifesteal item like Bloodthirster or Stark's Fervor. Phoenix also increases your attack by 24 for 5 seconds, which is great for offense. For dps udyr, i would go EWWRWQQQREQREQRERE. You want that mana steal life steal early, and you really dont have any crit to begin with. Tiger is your main DPS skill, so max that first, then evenly add into bear and phoenix. Don't underestimate phoenix. It is a great tool. Think about the auto attack passive. every 4th attack does bonus? its almost like jax! Udyr is a great character. I personally prefer playing as an offtank, but DPS is entirely viable. You might wanna work on your crit udyr tho. Other than that nice job. And if you are going to take nimbleness, max out dodge in the mastery tree.

EDIT: I strongly advise you make a description. Otherwise no one will want to vote your guide.

Why focus on crits when you can't crit in turtle stance, I'd say pure AD is better for you tiger, and pure AD works better with turtle than crits.