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So why exactly are people going to want you to review their guide?
It's very possible that no one will want me to review their guides. As of now no one has, however, I feel that I have a strong grasp of guide making, and a strong knowledge of the game and I am simply offering my help to those who do want it. If you would like to form your own opinions about my knowledge of guide making or League of Legends feel free to check out my
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might aswell be the first one
EDIT: I think this should be in the build & guide subforum
might aswell be the first one
EDIT: I think this should be in the build & guide subforum
I just finished reviewing your guide Janitsu. As always, my review is filled with my recommendations, so don't feel like I am telling you how to make your guide. Hope it helps you!
Peace
-Cdr. Sheperd
Peace
-Cdr. Sheperd
Yes, I am Finnish and I don't really speak too fluent English :p
You shouldn't be maxing Move Quick before Blinding Dart, the extra movement speed just isn't as useful or impactful
I max Move Quick over Blinding Dart because Move Quick allows you to escape and chase enemies down whilst if I maxed Blinding Dart first it didn't really have much impact due to the fact that the duration doesn't increase too much even if you maxed it first. I do remember mentioning this in the guide, but I think I also said something like: "If enemies are X and X you should consider maxing Blinding Dart over Move Quick.
Nice artwork, consider changing "Thanks to:" section to "Special Thanks", "Credits", or simply "Thanks".
Might do that
Your section banners are very nice. Grammatically, you forgot period at the end of your "About Me" paragraph and you forgot an "a" in "Teemo is actually (a) pretty strong champion after all."
Editing those out after posting this reply.
You might want to consider not having the bullet points centered, I just think it looks better. You should write a little bit more to let us know why blinding dart is a pro. What is "fast CC"? I know you are from Finland so maybe it is just called something else in America, but the only CCs I know of are hard and soft. I believe you meant to say "can be hard to farm with" (forgot the "with").
When I made the code to that, I realised that I can't really tell much in those and I wanted to keep them as short as possible. Maybe they are bit too short.
Just a few grammatical errors, wrote "abd" instead of "and". In your defense masteries explanation, you say, "The cheatsheet tree is the tree I use most often with little changes like two points in Hardiness and zero in Resistance." This confused me because no where in you guide do you show a tree with said masteries, and you shouldn't be recommending something you don't show in your guide.
Fixing the grammatical errors and explaining is fixed soon, too :)
Your recommended runes on your cheatsheet don't match up with the recommended runes in your explanation; this is a must-fix. Consider writing the name of the rune before the explanation so reader's don't have tot hover over the icon to see the name. When suggesting greater marks of armor pen. as an alternative, change the wording from "I think that you should think about (the marks)" to "(the marks) are a great alternative." I would recommend greater seals of armor for Teemo and although you mentioned them you should put them as your primary recommended seals, for the early game defensive boost they provide. I would recommend greater glyphs of scaling magic resist, for the reason that most champions' ability power spike comes in the late game, so that early fame boost is not necessary. For quints I would recommend movement speed or lifesteal for the extra sustain.
This is something I probably did just after I published and probably forgot to edit it. I do have the Greater Seal of Armor as the primary ones, probably forgot to change the image though. Greater Glyph of Scaling Magic Resist because of the fact that the spike is in the late game. With the build I use, late game spike doesn't really do that much. Early game is Teemo's worst part of Teemo unless you can get a kill or two early.
Reread the third tip for Move Quick, it doesn't make sense. In this section you should restate when to max each ability and explain why, or you could put that in a new section "Ability Sequence".
Might do the ability sequence. And I forgot some commas and "read" from the third tip :p
And C2V was on but it doesn't have any effect after 20th vote.
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You shouldn't be maxing Move Quick before Blinding Dart, the extra movement speed just isn't as useful or impactful
I max
Move Quick over Blinding Dart because Move Quick allows you to escape and chase enemies down whilst if I maxed Blinding Dart first it didn't really have much impact due to the fact that the duration doesn't increase too much even if you maxed it first. I do remember mentioning this in the guide, but I think I also said something like: "If enemies are X and X you should consider maxing Blinding Dart over Move Quick.Quoted:
Nice artwork, consider changing "Thanks to:" section to "Special Thanks", "Credits", or simply "Thanks".
Might do that
Quoted:
Your section banners are very nice. Grammatically, you forgot period at the end of your "About Me" paragraph and you forgot an "a" in "Teemo is actually (a) pretty strong champion after all."
Editing those out after posting this reply.
Quoted:
You might want to consider not having the bullet points centered, I just think it looks better. You should write a little bit more to let us know why blinding dart is a pro. What is "fast CC"? I know you are from Finland so maybe it is just called something else in America, but the only CCs I know of are hard and soft. I believe you meant to say "can be hard to farm with" (forgot the "with").
When I made the code to that, I realised that I can't really tell much in those and I wanted to keep them as short as possible. Maybe they are bit too short.
Quoted:
Just a few grammatical errors, wrote "abd" instead of "and". In your defense masteries explanation, you say, "The cheatsheet tree is the tree I use most often with little changes like two points in Hardiness and zero in Resistance." This confused me because no where in you guide do you show a tree with said masteries, and you shouldn't be recommending something you don't show in your guide.
Fixing the grammatical errors and explaining is fixed soon, too :)
Quoted:
Your recommended runes on your cheatsheet don't match up with the recommended runes in your explanation; this is a must-fix. Consider writing the name of the rune before the explanation so reader's don't have tot hover over the icon to see the name. When suggesting greater marks of armor pen. as an alternative, change the wording from "I think that you should think about (the marks)" to "(the marks) are a great alternative." I would recommend greater seals of armor for Teemo and although you mentioned them you should put them as your primary recommended seals, for the early game defensive boost they provide. I would recommend greater glyphs of scaling magic resist, for the reason that most champions' ability power spike comes in the late game, so that early fame boost is not necessary. For quints I would recommend movement speed or lifesteal for the extra sustain.
This is something I probably did just after I published and probably forgot to edit it. I do have the
Greater Seal of Armor as the primary ones, probably forgot to change the image though. Greater Glyph of Scaling Magic Resist because of the fact that the spike is in the late game. With the build I use, late game spike doesn't really do that much. Early game is Teemo's worst part of Teemo unless you can get a kill or two early.Quoted:
Reread the third tip for Move Quick, it doesn't make sense. In this section you should restate when to max each ability and explain why, or you could put that in a new section "Ability Sequence".
Might do the ability sequence. And I forgot some commas and "read" from the third tip :p
And C2V was on but it doesn't have any effect after 20th vote.
I hate to bring up elo, but the truth is you're a Bronze 2 player with the equivalent of basically 1000 elo. That's a very subpar level of play. I don't discredit your 'guide making' knowledge whatever that may be, but I do question your skill and how much knowledge you really have.
It seems like not that many people are going to know who you are, and when some guy who is Bronze 2 comes up telling them what's wrong with their guide, I can't imagine most people taking it that serious.
It seems like not that many people are going to know who you are, and when some guy who is Bronze 2 comes up telling them what's wrong with their guide, I can't imagine most people taking it that serious.
Thanks for the Signature MissMaw!
Mooninites wrote:
I hate to bring up elo, but the truth is you're a Bronze 2 player with the equivalent of basically 1000 elo. That's a very subpar level of play. I don't discredit your 'guide making' knowledge whatever that may be, but I do question your skill and how much knowledge you really have.
It seems like not that many people are going to know who you are, and when some guy who is Bronze 2 comes up telling them what's wrong with their guide, I can't imagine most people taking it that serious.
You can't really take their elo level into account. The current system is extremely flawed, don't deny it. Also, perhaps he finished his 5 initial placement matches, got placed in bronze, and never played ranked again. Or maybe he has multiple accounts of different elo levels, and this one just happens to be in bronze. If someone knows how to write a guide, then the polite thing is to listen their advice respectfully. No one is forcing people to actually take that advice, but it still is courteous to be respectful.
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