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[quote=jhoijhoi]Backdooring normally insinuates you're doing it yourself, which is why I found it questionable. Mowen's guide: *shrugs* If you wrote a guide for a champion with an already highly-rated guide, you have to do all you can to try and beat it! :)[/quote]

[quote=PsychShade]Name: PsychShade Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/zed-the-true-ninja-in-depth-zed-guide-264466]Have a cookie![/url] Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? Yes Have you run your guide through a spell check? Yes[/quote]

[quote=Rainfall]Name: Rainfall Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/they-will-fear-the-wild-a-competitive-nidalee-guide-264553]Clicksie[/url]. Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES Requesting a re-review in hopes for a scout point; I've improved it a lot since the last review, even though that was like... 3 days ago.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- PsychShade [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/zed-the-true-ninja-in-depth-zed-guide-264466]SR AD Zed[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- 6/10 [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 22/11/2012[/columns] [spoiler=PsychShade's Assassin Zed Guide Review] [color=#0080ff][h2]Cheat Sheet[/h2][/color] ------------------ [b]Purchase Order[/b] > The only problem I have with this build is that it is straight up ADC and very squish. You have no defensive abilities, you only have one defensive summoner spell - you need some survivability in your build. Zed is not an ADC, he's an assassin. You have to be realistic with your build. Do you buy Infinity Edge on [[Talon]] or [[pantheon]]? You want AD items, so Bloodthirster is fine, but Youmuu's upgrade can seem unnecessary, as is the Inf Edge. Your abilities don't crit, and you're not about auto-attacks. [b]Ability Sequence[/b] > I haven't actually played Zed at all, so this is just theory right now. I personally always grab all three abilities by level 3, for "just in case" scenarios. [[shadow slash]] gives you a slow, which would be beneficial pre-level 4. [b]Masteries[/b] > [[arcane knowledge]] is better than [[havoc]], especially as Zed's passive does magic damage, not to mention his other abilities that do magic damage. [h2][color=#0080ff]Guide[/color][/h2] -------------------- [b]Runes[/b] > Your explanations are lacking, and I especially don't like the explanation of Glyphs of Shielding. [b]Summoner Spells[/b] > I understand that English isn't your native language, but you have to ensure you read over what you're writing. Your explanation for Flash is a bit convoluted, and whilst I understood what you were trying to say, the more you make your readers work, the less they will want to keep on working to decipher your writing. Teleport isn't really a viable spell. [color=#0080ff][h2][b]Score[/b][/h2][/color] ---------------------- [b]Appearance[/b] > 2/3. The coding in your guide is pretty decent, I appreciate the effort you've taken to add in aesthetic qualities. However, I think this area can be improved. For instance, all the centred text looks really messy, especially with icons. A lot of the coding itself can look neater, I would reread my Guide Making Guide and see if you can grasp a few more ideas about how to make your guide more visually pleasing. [b]Content[/b] > 1.5/3. I felt like I learnt a fair bit from your guide, but it is not "in-depth" like your title claims. If you want your guide to be in-depth, you would include ability combos, opponent match-ups (who does Zed perform best against? Who counters him mid lane?), more information about runes and masteries... you don't even mention why you send Zed mid, why is his best lane mid lane? You mention jungling, but don't have a jungling section. I feel like there is a lot of room for improvement in this section. Things I did like were the gameplay and "which ability to max first" sections, as these inform the reader about things they need to know. [b]Viability[/b] > 2.5/4. I don't believe the build is viable. It's completely glass cannon and whilst it may work on unsuspecting opponents pre30, it is unlikely your build will be viable for competitive play (which is what your guide should be geared towards). Your runes are fine, masteries are good (I recommend Arcane Knowledge), but the items leave a lot to be desired. There's no survivability, which renders the build completely non-viable. [b]Total Score > 6 - Upvote (only receivable with a reply to this thread).[/b] Turn on comment to vote, so you get more feedback on your guide. For now I would work on making your guide more "in-depth" if you are running with that title. I would play test some more with the build; do you really need Infinity Edge and Youmuu's? Wouldn't Bloodthirster + Last Whisper work better? etc etc. Really think about your build and whether it's viable for ranked play. [/spoiler] --------------------------- Rain, I noticed the guide cuts off at the GamePlay section. I won't review it until the full guide is there, don't want to waste my time with half a guide - I can't give unfinished guides scout points, fyi :) Just comment here again when the guide is totally done, and I'll give it a full review. Don't forget to add in a "Thanks" section too ;)[/quote]

[quote=PsychShade][quote=jhoijhoi] [columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- PsychShade [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/zed-the-true-ninja-in-depth-zed-guide-264466]SR AD Zed[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- 6/10 [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 22/11/2012[/columns] [spoiler=PsychShade's Assassin Zed Guide Review] [color=#0080ff][h2]Cheat Sheet[/h2][/color] ------------------ [b]Purchase Order[/b] > The only problem I have with this build is that it is straight up ADC and very squish. You have no defensive abilities, you only have one defensive summoner spell - you need some survivability in your build. Zed is not an ADC, he's an assassin. You have to be realistic with your build. Do you buy Infinity Edge on [[Talon]] or [[pantheon]]? You want AD items, so Bloodthirster is fine, but Youmuu's upgrade can seem unnecessary, as is the Inf Edge. Your abilities don't crit, and you're not about auto-attacks. [b]Ability Sequence[/b] > I haven't actually played Zed at all, so this is just theory right now. I personally always grab all three abilities by level 3, for "just in case" scenarios. [[shadow slash]] gives you a slow, which would be beneficial pre-level 4. [b]Masteries[/b] > [[arcane knowledge]] is better than [[havoc]], especially as Zed's passive does magic damage, not to mention his other abilities that do magic damage. [h2][color=#0080ff]Guide[/color][/h2] -------------------- [b]Runes[/b] > Your explanations are lacking, and I especially don't like the explanation of Glyphs of Shielding. [b]Summoner Spells[/b] > I understand that English isn't your native language, but you have to ensure you read over what you're writing. Your explanation for Flash is a bit convoluted, and whilst I understood what you were trying to say, the more you make your readers work, the less they will want to keep on working to decipher your writing. Teleport isn't really a viable spell. [color=#0080ff][h2][b]Score[/b][/h2][/color] ---------------------- [b]Appearance[/b] > 2/3. The coding in your guide is pretty decent, I appreciate the effort you've taken to add in aesthetic qualities. However, I think this area can be improved. For instance, all the centred text looks really messy, especially with icons. A lot of the coding itself can look neater, I would reread my Guide Making Guide and see if you can grasp a few more ideas about how to make your guide more visually pleasing. [b]Content[/b] > 1.5/3. I felt like I learnt a fair bit from your guide, but it is not "in-depth" like your title claims. If you want your guide to be in-depth, you would include ability combos, opponent match-ups (who does Zed perform best against? Who counters him mid lane?), more information about runes and masteries... you don't even mention why you send Zed mid, why is his best lane mid lane? You mention jungling, but don't have a jungling section. I feel like there is a lot of room for improvement in this section. Things I did like were the gameplay and "which ability to max first" sections, as these inform the reader about things they need to know. [b]Viability[/b] > 2.5/4. I don't believe the build is viable. It's completely glass cannon and whilst it may work on unsuspecting opponents pre30, it is unlikely your build will be viable for competitive play (which is what your guide should be geared towards). Your runes are fine, masteries are good (I recommend Arcane Knowledge), but the items leave a lot to be desired. There's no survivability, which renders the build completely non-viable. [b]Total Score > 6 - Upvote (only receivable with a reply to this thread).[/b] Turn on comment to vote, so you get more feedback on your guide. For now I would work on making your guide more "in-depth" if you are running with that title. I would play test some more with the build; do you really need Infinity Edge and Youmuu's? Wouldn't Bloodthirster + Last Whisper work better? etc etc. Really think about your build and whether it's viable for ranked play. [/spoiler][/quote] Thanks for the review ^^ I'm right now studying arts, don't know if it's because of that, but I need tons of feedback/criticism on my work in order to improve it, and I was lacking some opinions, so I'll get my hands on it this weekend :) 1. Yup, I think I just closed my mind to this: "Zed mid must beat the crap out of his lane, and then go and murder everyone, so I'll build him full AD", and I totally missed the survivability, while most AP mids get at least 1 survivability item, Zhonya's, Rylai's, Abyssal, etc... I think I'll move the Frozen Mallet into the main build instead of a situational item. Maybe GA would be good, I'll test both asap. Anyways, I don't want to focus on items right now, because S3 is about to come, and the new items could make their way into the guide. 2. From what I've played right now, Zed's skill order is really situational except for [[Living Shadow]] and [[Death Mark]], as it really depends on how are you doing in lane, your lane opponent, junglers, etc... I also must do further testing on this, because I still have some doubts about generally maxing out first E instead of Q. 3. Never thought about putting a point in [[Arcane Knowledge]], but now that you mention it, looks really tempting, but afaik only his passive deals magic dmg. I put the point in [[Havoc]] mostly to fill. 4. Yeah, I don't manage really well explaining how some runes benefit Zed, I'll read some guides to see how they explain them, maybe I can find some inspiration. 5. Now that I read it slowly, you're right, I'll fix it right now. As for teleport, some people told me it's good for Zed but I haven't tried it yet, so I didn't know if it was really viable, my fault. 6. Sure I'll do, this is probably the part of the guide which I'm trying to improve the most, I still have to make some explanation images, looking for additional artwork for some more pics, coloring some words and stuff to make paragraphs more clear, and I totally forgot about indents >.< 7. I'm working almost every day in content, but monday-thursday can't do much because of studies and stuff, I made this guide practically in a day, past saturday to be more precise, and I want to add more in-depth skill explanation, jungling section (with routes, ganking guide, counter-jungling and recovering, etc...) maybe some vids, tho I'm lame at making vids, I need to look for some guides :c I have a to-do list at the end of the post that I'm trying to deal with whenever I can, still some things (like combos, as you mentioned) that totally forgot about :x 8. Somehow it has worked for me, probably because I mostly play blind picks, but yeah, totally missed the survivability and blindly added some items, maybe because they seemed nice to me and I didn't try others like [[Last Whisper]] or [[Guardian Angel]] Thanks a lot for everything, this weekend I'll make another massive update to the build and I'd like to show you again when it's complete with all the S3 items and masteries too, mostly to see my progress and what I can keep improving. Hope I can someday make cool guides like yours :)[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]+1 (to your guide), +rep PsychShade, I really appreciate the response! I could see you were still writing the guide and it's best to ask for reviews when you're done so there is more to write about :) I am really glad you're thinking about adding some survivability into the build, that will make the guide straight away more viable. I'm sure with a bit more practice your Zed guide will be fantastic, just got to play test some of those items and think more about why you chose some of those runes :) Good luck with your guide, and don't hesitate to come back for a re-review once you've addressed some issues (preferably after S3 release so I can check out the new items you said you were going to add). ^^[/quote]

[quote=morrkevi]Name: morrkevi Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sona-the-accomplished-etwahlist-aggressive-support-guide-265876 Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES[/quote]

[quote=Roronoa EvrIs]Summoner Name: Roronoa Evris Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (Time of Request): 176 Spell+Grammar check: Yes Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide?: YES! Guide for (champion): [[Shen]] Why I'd Like This Reviewed: I have received no comments on how I can improve my build for a long time now. I also believe it brings out a new perspective to how you can play this champ. What I'd Like You to Focus on: Almost everything I guess. :) Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/ap-tank-shen-ninja-gaiden-in-lol-196144]here it is[/url][/quote]

[quote=utopus]Name: utopus Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/twitch-facerolling-over-the-enemy-188596]LINK :) :)[/url] Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES[/quote]

[quote=That Trev Person]Name: That Trev Person Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/jungle-amumu-a-guide-to-depressing-your-enemies-193252]Amumusosad[/url] Have you read my Guide to Making a Guide? YES Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES Forgot to post this when I first published my guide, and I'm curious to hear your opinion :D[/quote]