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[quote=Piksel4o]So, um, can I ask something? I hope I am not annoying with this, but is it possible to get a guide reviewed again? I already sent it to you once, and since then I have updated it having in mind what you suggested me, so now I think I am ready with it. Soo, yea, can it be done? :3 Here's the link : http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/malzahar-come-mortal-witness-your-demise-91835 If my request is possible, I would like you to focus more on the guide layout. Thank you in advance ^_^[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed]@Piksel40 Hey, looking at your guide I personally think your format looks pretty good and neat. Except the in a nutshell part, but I think its fine. Though I'm not a pro with asthetics like jhoijhoi. Items: If your looking for abillity power instead of an ROA (because you going ahead and getting a BV) Perhaps an AA Staff? I've played, and it has always been a good item on him imo. Plus it will eventually give you more AP then ROA. Runes: I would swap out your seals for [[seals of clarity]] they give you more mana regen at level 7. Also your CDR runes, I'm not postive it they are totally worth it because the most you maybe reducing is about a second off your cooldowns. So I'd swap them out with something else. Side notes: I'm not postive on this, but I think (if they are dumb enough not to get mr) It is possible for you to E>W>R some champions.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]If people are reading this, could you pretty please check the first page, second post and tell me if you are not in it? (like, if I've reviewed your work, but I haven't featured you on the front page) Somehow I think I accidentally copy+paste'd an old copy of the list, and I'm afraid I'm missing some of my reviews. Thanks ^^ [color=#ff0000][b]Pending Rework of Champion[/b][/color] [quote=A Red Feather] Guide For (champion): Evelynn Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I believe I have found the perfect medium for Evelynn. Players either utilize her amazing skill set with bursty AP and lack sustain in combat or do the opposite as AD Eve. I truly believe my guide is how Eve is meant to be played, and I want other players to try it out. Just have to wait for her buff now! :D What I'd like you to focus on: My Summoner Spells (in regards to Flash), the core build itself, and my explanation on GP/5 items, to see if I have proper justification. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/something-wicked-this-way-comes-hybrid-roaming-eve-90463 [/quote] [quote=DeadlyTricks] Guide For: [[Evelynn]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My guide has been mostly unnoticed and I'd like some criticism and an opinion or two about it What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think may be incorrect or poorly explained Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/evelynn-a-comprohensive-guide-ad-ap-and-hybrid-75731]Linky[/url] [/quote] [color=#ff0000][b]Pending Remake of Guide[/b][/color] [quote=Chesswinner] My guide for: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/gangplank-the-spooky-pirate-99448]Gangplank, the Saltwater Scourge[/url] Why I'd like you to review it: Some criticism, to know was six hours making of it worthful, etc. =D [/quote] [color=#008000][b]Reviewable Guides[/b][/color] [quote=palzm] Can you review my guide on [[leona]] No ones seems to notice my guides :/ http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/radiating-sunshine-101349 [color=#ff0000]NOTE FROM JHOIJHOI: [/color]I was going to ignore your request due to the fact that I have rules of submission for requests (the way I'm ignoring the above Garen guide, but I actually was already in the process of reviewing your guide for commenting on on of my guides, so lol. [/quote] [quote=Bryun] Is this "Edit:" thing you are doing to your front page new or something? o.o If you have I've altered my guides (at least my [[Akali]] one and some of my [[Jax]]) since I've first posted on this forum. If it isn't I would suggest making a constructive criticism and an end result type section on the front page to make it how much the guide has improved since then :P [/quote] [quote=TheJohn] Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's the first guide I wrote, and it clearly needs many changes What I'd like you to focus on: Those walls of text and code Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wanna-rock-just-choose-your-build-101119 [/quote] [quote=Lakapooty] Guide For: [[Xin Zhao]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm a perfectionist when it comes to stuff that I truly care about and I truly care about helping people become better at LoL. What I'd like you to focus on: PERFECTION. Give me everything you got. I want this guide to be as close as possible to perfect. I don't care if you review mine last, I just want it reviewed when you have time because I will keep coming back for more until you say, "This guide is perfect." Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/edit-build?edit=100550 [/quote] [quote=da_neo] I hope that [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/annie-hide-and-seek-101351]my guide[/url] is a little nicer now. [/quote] [quote=Piksel4o] Is it possible to get a guide reviewed again? I already sent it to you once, and since then I have updated it having in mind what you suggested me, so now I think I am ready with it. Soo, yea, can it be done? :3 Here's the link : http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/malzahar-come-mortal-witness-your-demise-91835 If my request is possible, I would like you to focus more on the guide layout. [/quote] I'll get to reviewing soon enough, lol ^^ Promise :)[/quote]

[quote=Bryun]I'm not exactly sure what that above post meant for the post I made. Could you explain? Do you want it in the correct format or something? :o Guide For (champion): Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: What I'd like you to focus on: Guide Link: ??[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed]^That is for future reference for those who want another review on their guide. Since you're on the list I think you are okay.[/quote]

[quote=Piksel4o]@Rudmed Thank you for vote, answer is in guide :3[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/radiating-sunshine-101349?page=2#lastcomment]Palzm's Leona Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] A solid Leona guide that focuses on an off-tank build. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] The guide is very aesthetically pleasing and pretty knowledgable. My only complaint to the author is that they have too many builds listed, and it's a better idea to have one main guide, and just list alternative items/builds in the guide itself. Good work so far and I'm glad the author can handle trolls well. That is a sign of a great guide writer :) Guys, I am raging really hard right now, so don't be offended if I am mean in my reviews. Constructive Criticism: 1) I understand there are many ways to play different champions. For the sake of ease of use and readability, make one guide for one build (or two), not for. Tell the reader what you get 90% of the time, not 25, 25, 25, 25% of the time. As such, I will be only reviewing the first cheat sheet and build. 2) I'd suggest Marks of Insight or Desolation. That 32 health isn't that great in comparison. 3) Good Hands > Perseverance. 4) AP&Attack Speed (Ardor) is better than less minion damage. Dodge is also fairly bad. 5) Center your images/icons etc for aesthetic reasons. Check out my guide about writing a guide (in signature) to read how. 6) No need to mention useless summoner spells. 7) Order the skills in order of maxing out (when explaining order)[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/akali-the-epitome-of-an-assassin-80578?page=3#lastcomment]Bryun's Akali Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict[/color]: A good start, has potential. [color=yellow]Edit:[/color] A very much improved Akali guide, which pleases the eye to read. The author shows knowledge of Akali, and the screenshots are a fantastic resource. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements[/color]: Needs to work on repetition, the too-abundant colours, maybe some more gameplay tips/a more extensive gameplay section. [color=yellow]Edit:[/color] Perhaps a more in-depth gameplay section. Other than that, guide is perfectly fine. Constructive Criticism: 1) The introduction is a tad messy. You might like to clean it up and remove some useless information, like: "build inspired etc" and the comment about the mastery pages. 2) I really like how you've set up your summoner spells etc and as you know, I've copied that layout ^^ 3) There's a white line in the picture of the top/bot brush. Not a big deal, but I'm nitpicking 4) You might like to clean up Mentos' screenshot. 5) I believe Tips and Tricks belongs above the Achievements section --------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/jax-the-dyrus-build-92762?page=2#lastcomment]Bryun's Jax Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict[/color]: A very simplistic Jax guide. [color=yellow]Edit:[/color] The aesthetics have been improved, and the guide is now very easy to read. It is still minimalistic. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements[/color]: Needs expansion, currently it is more of a bare bones, "this is Jax" guide, needs more depth. [color=yellow]Edit:[/color] While this guide certainly looks fantastic, it does need some more depth in terms of Jax gameplay and when to use his abilities... some quick tips about standing in a wave of creeps so they proc your dodge abilities... stuff like that ^^[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wanna-rock-just-choose-your-build-101119?page=2#lastcomment]TheJohn's Mordekaiser Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] This is a good Mordekaiser guide which covers all possible items Morde could ever get. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] But that doesn't mean it's a great guide. It is a little messy in terms of organisation, and there isn't a gameplay section because the author is trying to write three guides in one, so it's not as in-depth as it should be. I'd suggest only listing the alternative builds, or if the author desperately wants to keep it, they should reorganise their guide so it's more comprehensive ^^ Constructive Criticism: 1) Try not to over-complicate things. No need to state each individual item before the finished item in the item purchase order. Also, I would suggest only displaying one build and just listing alternative items in your actual guide. 2) No need to list useless Summoner Spells. 3) Trying centring your icons. 4) "In my opinion, this is the worst build because runs from the champion objective: offtank. But many players are feeding using it these days." Then why list it? In your guide, show the reader YOUR build and your build alone. If I want to read AP Morde, I'll go look for an AP Morde build. 5) Your guide is confusing because you list the three different builds and their gameplay when you should focus just on one. Or if you're adamant about keeping all three, then at least combine all the sections of the same build so that you don't have sections all over the place. ie: Section - MY BUILD: Early Game, Mid Game, Late Game 6) [[ignite]] is great on Morde. 7) I liked your story about how you created the build :)[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/annie-hide-and-seek-101351]da_neo's Annie Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] A very detailed and mathematically backed AP Annie guide with plenty of tips and tricks. The author certainly knows the in's and out's of Annie and her bear Tibbers ;) [color=yellow]Edit:[/color] Extremely visually and aesthetically pleasing, and absolutely the best resource for Annie players. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] Not very many as the guide is somewhat visually pleasing. Needs to work on formatting (centring icons), and possibly making the graphs more attractive (Microsoft Excel allows for fanciness). The videos are very entertaining, and the gameplay sections are extremely informative. [color=yellow]Edit:[/color] The amount of effort the author has put into this guide is outstanding. This guide can only improve with time, like an aged and very expensive wine ^^ Constructive Criticism: 1) I'd suggest at least one early level in [[molten shield]] (even if you get it at level 4). It's basically a free [[thornmail]] to those pesky [[ashe]]'s mid. 2) I LOVE your preface. Wait. Aw. It's not as funny as I thought it was. I read: You fed the enemy mid? GG You aren't fed? GG You didn't farm enough? GG You didn't help top/bot? GG Seriously there are only a few champions who can get away with this and still own. 3) You can copy and paste from Jebus' guide and have the link under it. That will save people from going to different guides to read. Just copy and paste the most useful information. ie: [quote=jebus mcazn]AP carries are sometimes called "mages" because they're incredibly spell reliant. Most spells scale off of ability power, hence the "AP". Now certain champions have better scaling than others, or just have better skills than others, and this is what designates them as powerful "mages" to have on a team.[/quote] [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/5-champs-you-should-know-how-to-play-aka-who-do-i-buy-next-70445#chapter4]Read more here.[/url] 4) Wow, your guide has had an incredible upgrade in aesthetics. Looks fantastic! 5) The only thing I can think of is to merge the graphs into one, so they don't take up so much space??? (for the comparing builds section)[/quote]