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Creator: jhoijhoi June 29, 2011 5:44pm
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@Lakapooty

Constructive Criticism:

1) No need to list your sources of information about Xin's abilities. You could just say "Credit to www.leagueoflegends.com" at the very end of your guide.

2) Separate your abilities with color and this ------------, ie:



3) Try centring your video :)

Regarding your glyphs, PM Searz, or have a look at his Runes Guide. Also, I'd suggest having a look at my guide about making a guide (in my signature), and having a go with some of the formatting and coding I have there.

Try and make your guide a little more aesthetically pleasing :) That's basically all you have to do now, you have the content, the build, the summoners/masteries/runes (almost) all down. All that's left is to add more depth to your guide and to make it more attractive to the generic reader.
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Piksel's Malzahar Guide
Verdict: A decent Malzahar guide that is heading in the right direction towards being highly rated. Edit: An extremely attractive and very in-depth guide about Malz. I highly recommend reading this guide.
Possible Improvements: This is a guide that will not only help you play Malz, but learn him as well. Concise and to the point, I enjoyed reading this, and I did learn quite a lot. Needs to work on colour allocation, and coding. Need some image, maybe some screenshots of the build working. Edit: A fantastic improvement from the last time I saw it. It is very visually pleasing and fun as hell to read. I absolutely loved this guide. The only suggestion I have to the author is to archive it and release a new version that doesn't have stupid and uncalled for troll votes.

Constructive Criticism:

1) "Tags: , 5v5, ap, caster, detailed, farmer, guide, in-depth, malz, malzahar, mid, nuke, pet, the cake is a lie, void" LAAAAWL.

2) For your Ability Sequence, I'd suggest maxing one ability first, then another, leaving the 3rd til last (less likely to confuse the average reader)

3) It's a personal thing, but I think you may have too much color. You don't want to scare people away.

4) In a Nutshell could go inside your Intro ^^

5) I'd suggest swapping Ghost with Ignite in your Summoner spells section so that the columns look more uniform. Basically with columns, the information/sentences for each column have to be the same length in words for them to look right.

6) I'd suggest chucking some seperators between your abilities. Also <3 for using Searz's template, but having a Skills section anyway <3 Also, maybe think of centring your icons.

7) You can also set QWER to automatically smart cast by changing the keybindings. Doing that is far easier than holding Shift ^^

8) Very aesthetically pleasing guide!
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If people are reading this, could you pretty please check the first page, second post and tell me if you are not in it? (like, if I've reviewed your work, but I haven't featured you on the front page) Somehow I think I accidentally copy+paste'd an old copy of the list, and I'm afraid I'm missing some of my reviews.

Thanks ^^

Pending Rework of Champion

Guide For (champion): Evelynn
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I believe I have found the perfect medium for Evelynn. Players either utilize her amazing skill set with bursty AP and lack sustain in combat or do the opposite as AD Eve. I truly believe my guide is how Eve is meant to be played, and I want other players to try it out. Just have to wait for her buff now! :D
What I'd like you to focus on: My Summoner Spells (in regards to Flash), the core build itself, and my explanation on GP/5 items, to see if I have proper justification.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/something-wicked-this-way-comes-hybrid-roaming-eve-90463


Guide For: Evelynn
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My guide has been mostly unnoticed and I'd like some criticism and an opinion or two about it
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think may be incorrect or poorly explained
Guide Link: Linky

Pending Remake of Guide

My guide for: Gangplank, the Saltwater Scourge
Why I'd like you to review it: Some criticism, to know was six hours making of it worthful, etc. =D

Reviewable Guides
I'm up to date! I will start reviewing the Evelynn guides, and then Chesswinner's guide, even though he hasn't posted back here. Then I'll wait patiently for more requests ^^ I've also updated the first post and my review post, and it'd be really great if you all reviewed and commented on each other's guides.

I shouldn't be the only one providing feedback, and it'd be fantastic if the people I've reviewed in this thread turned around and voted and commented on each other's guides.

Comments on my own guides would be lovely too :P <3

Keep the requests coming! ^^
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Thanks for the quick review and response! Took some more notes, just have one question...

jhoijhoi wrote:

6) I'd suggest chucking some seperators between your abilities.


how do I do that? *shy*

Also, in regards to that archiving and re-posting stuff, meh. Trolls come at all times, so I think I'll get over them... After all, they are all out of cake :P
Thanks to Alexanpt and wRAthoFVuLK for the AWESOME sigs!
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Also, I would totally rec your guide if you re-released it (I also featured it in my first post in this thread ^^)

I promise you if you archive and upload a copy of your guide, I'll vote on it immediately and get others to vote for it to replace the votes you'd lose from the original ^^
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Ok then, will get to it right away, and add some more fixes. Will write you when I am done, thank you so much ^_^
Thanks to Alexanpt and wRAthoFVuLK for the AWESOME sigs!
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jhoi, I love how that now you are a vet, if there is a guide you really like, not only can you post it on the front page but you can REC IT, resulting in more people wanting you to check out their guides for REC POTENTIAL, and for you to get the not-so-popular but very good guides that you review in this thread ACTUALLY SEEN :D

Thanks to TRUeLM, Plastictree, Scrax, Xiaowiriamu, foggy12, JahGFX, jhoijhoi, msrobinson, JEFFY40HANDS, Nyoike, MissMaw, and me :) for the sigs!
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Hey, I'm back with the other guide you reviewed. Now that I finally got off LoL, TF2, and global agenda, I made some changes. By the way its back because you needed more requests.

Guide For (champion): Tanks
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: To be further reviewed and criticsed
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything
Guide Link: Dia Link..Right here
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WAIT RUD YOU PLAY TF2?

WHAT'S YOUR STEAM ID?!?!??!?!??!?

Thanks to TRUeLM, Plastictree, Scrax, Xiaowiriamu, foggy12, JahGFX, jhoijhoi, msrobinson, JEFFY40HANDS, Nyoike, MissMaw, and me :) for the sigs!
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OK, changes done. Still have one thing or another do add, but the main part is ready.
Can you check it now, please? You don't need to give high priority to it, I can wait.

Guide For: Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to know if there's anything that I'm still doing wrong
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wanna-rock-so-get-ready-for-the-show-101119

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