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Bryun wrote:
Pro doesn't mean perfect.
Considering that Jebus' Jungle mumu guide can help me carry teams and Xai lost a 1v5, I would say they're at least better than a lot of people here.
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Xaioli's Nidalee Guide:
Verdict: Great Nidalee resource!
Possible Improvements: Section about the Twisted Treeline, more colour/coding, more paragraph breaks!
Thanks for being my first customer! :3
Constructive Criticism:
1) Having so many different Runes at the beginning not only looks really weird, but makes you seem a tad unprofessional. It says to me, "I can't decide which runes are the best, so I'll put them all up." Basically it makes me feel unsure of what you're trying to convey, and if you actually know what you're doing. I'd feel the same way if in your Purchase Order you listed every possible item that'd suit Nidalee.
2) Perserverance < Good Hands. Why? Those 6-7 seconds of decreased respawn could save you an inhibitor. As opposed to basically 1 extra health and mana regeneration you gain from Perserverance. Those 3 Mastery Points spent in Perserverance are equal to the mana return you recieve from 1 point spent in Meditation.
3) I like how you've specified into the Defense Tree to utilise Nidalee's dodge chance in Cougar Form, but your direct item build doesn't specify and Magic Penetration despite the fact that you're building full AP.
4) I don't think all your text should be centered because it looks a tad messy. I won't mention this again, but everytime I look at a new section it is all centered :/
5) In your "What You Will Need" and "Pros / Cons" section, some colour would be beneficial.
6) In your "Abilities" section (you've spelt abilities wrong, btw), I believe some coding would be beneficial: Prowl to make it look prettier. I appreciate that your guide is up to date with the comment "Bushwack no longer reveals wards".
7) Perhaps mention that Bushwack can be set off by minions.
8) You should probably mention that your first skill sequence is meant for duo lanes and your second skill sequence is meant for solo top/mid. You should also expand the second skill sequence part because I believe Nidalee is so fantastic solo top and most people will play her up there.
9) I suggest separating the Runes. First state which runes you use on Nidalee, then list the alternatives. This will give the readers a better idea of how you play her. It will also explain your item choices more. (just read "What runes I usually use" - this should be first before the alternative runes, and split up to be under the appropriate runes)
10) In your Summoner Spells section mention when you get CV. "I get CV if I was allocated the role of Support for the game duration" or something.
11) In your "Backdooring as Nidalee" section, perhaps suggest a means of escape when enemies come after you. n8gYqqd1dWA
12) Your Item Sequence section is a huge block of text that I don't think anyone has read in a long time. You need to create some paragraphs and add some colour/coding. Doran's Ring etc. Make the viewer *want* to read it.
13) In your "Jumping Over Walls with Pounce" section you should include some walls that Nidalee CAN'T pounce over. It's always hilarious to see a first time Nidalee faceplant into the thick walls at base. It's less hilarious when she's trying to escape and gets eaten by enemies.
Also, you haven't mentioned much up the Twisted Treeline, so maybe a section on that would be a nice little project for you to undertake.
14) You should update your Screenshots section ^^
Yup, that's all I got. The main things that bugged me about your guide were:
a) The centered text.
b) The multitude of runes D:
Verdict: Great Nidalee resource!
Possible Improvements: Section about the Twisted Treeline, more colour/coding, more paragraph breaks!
Thanks for being my first customer! :3
Constructive Criticism:
1) Having so many different Runes at the beginning not only looks really weird, but makes you seem a tad unprofessional. It says to me, "I can't decide which runes are the best, so I'll put them all up." Basically it makes me feel unsure of what you're trying to convey, and if you actually know what you're doing. I'd feel the same way if in your Purchase Order you listed every possible item that'd suit
Nidalee.2) Perserverance < Good Hands. Why? Those 6-7 seconds of decreased respawn could save you an inhibitor. As opposed to basically 1 extra health and mana regeneration you gain from Perserverance. Those 3 Mastery Points spent in Perserverance are equal to the mana return you recieve from 1 point spent in Meditation.
3) I like how you've specified into the Defense Tree to utilise Nidalee's dodge chance in Cougar Form, but your direct item build doesn't specify and Magic Penetration despite the fact that you're building full AP.
4) I don't think all your text should be centered because it looks a tad messy. I won't mention this again, but everytime I look at a new section it is all centered :/
5) In your "What You Will Need" and "Pros / Cons" section, some colour would be beneficial.
6) In your "Abilities" section (you've spelt abilities wrong, btw), I believe some coding would be beneficial:
Prowl to make it look prettier. I appreciate that your guide is up to date with the comment "Bushwack no longer reveals wards".7) Perhaps mention that Bushwack can be set off by minions.
8) You should probably mention that your first skill sequence is meant for duo lanes and your second skill sequence is meant for solo top/mid. You should also expand the second skill sequence part because I believe Nidalee is so fantastic solo top and most people will play her up there.
9) I suggest separating the Runes. First state which runes you use on Nidalee, then list the alternatives. This will give the readers a better idea of how you play her. It will also explain your item choices more. (just read "What runes I usually use" - this should be first before the alternative runes, and split up to be under the appropriate runes)
10) In your Summoner Spells section mention when you get CV. "I get CV if I was allocated the role of Support for the game duration" or something.
11) In your "Backdooring as Nidalee" section, perhaps suggest a means of escape when enemies come after you. n8gYqqd1dWA
12) Your Item Sequence section is a huge block of text that I don't think anyone has read in a long time. You need to create some paragraphs and add some colour/coding.
Doran's Ring etc. Make the viewer *want* to read it.13) In your "Jumping Over Walls with Pounce" section you should include some walls that Nidalee CAN'T pounce over. It's always hilarious to see a first time Nidalee faceplant into the thick walls at base. It's less hilarious when she's trying to escape and gets eaten by enemies.
Also, you haven't mentioned much up the Twisted Treeline, so maybe a section on that would be a nice little project for you to undertake.
14) You should update your Screenshots section ^^
Yup, that's all I got. The main things that bugged me about your guide were:
a) The centered text.
b) The multitude of runes D:
Lugignaf wrote:
Never said they were perfect. Just better than most people here.
Lugignaf wrote:
I find it funny that the "pros" of the site are asking for criticism.
With this statement, you are basically implying they are just too good and don't need any criticism whatsoever. Anyone and everyone needs criticism no matter how godly they can be. I just found that statement redundant.
Any who I'll just stop here, I'm pretty sure jhoijhoi doesn't want an argument on her thread.
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Guide for: Twisted Fate and Tanks
Why I'd like to see this reviewed: For second opinions, and criticsm
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything...really anything.
Guides link: TF guide, Tank guide
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Guides link: TF guide, Tank guide
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Jebus McAzn's Amumu Guide
Verdict: Absolutely Fantastic Amumu Jungling Resource
Possible Improvements: More recent screenshots, adding colour/coding to walls of text, maybe a new section about Twisted Treeline?
Constructive Criticism:
1) A new Amumu jungler might just glance quickly at your Item Purchase and go off to jungle with only 1 pot. I know it's a pain looking at 5 Health Potions in your item purchase, but it might prevent Noob Mistakes.
2) We already have a Table of Contents, and while I realise you've put a lot of effort into goto tags, the extra table of contents seems like too much of a surplus.
3) Instead of having a list of abbreviated terms, perhaps at the first mention, just include the abbreviation. So, "Amumu has an AoE (Area of Effect) ability called etc etc etc". This will neaten up your beginning.
4) Wow! Your "Skill Explanations" section is absolutely fantastic! Very in-depth and it is extremely clear that you know what you're talking about.
5) When you list the reasons why Curse of the Sad Mummy is great, these three things are virtually buried under all the other text. Despite being Bold Font. You need to add some colour to the titles of all the abilities and everything else that you want to stand out. While you have a good grasp of when to produce paragraph points, you really need to add in colour and coding to keep the reader interested in your work.
6) With your section about "Rune Explanations" you should be using the Greater Mark of Magic Penetration coding to give the yellow colour to make it stand out.
7) Your "Mastery Explanations" are great, but again, colour! Some images! A screenshot of your mastery tree set up so people can see it straight up would be nice.
Your explanation of Perserverance is wrong. It runs off base health/mana regen, not off item regen. Unless Amumu gets a natural 100 hp/5... ? o.O
8) You definitely need colour for emphasis in your "Core Item Build Sequence" section. I nearly missed where you said "five Health Potions". I would have clearly seen it if you had "Start of with Cloth Armor and 5x Health Potions".
9) What about Sorcerer's Shoes, seeing as he's primarily magic damage?
10) "Did you hear that? IT GIVES YOU TEARS THAT SLOW PEOPLE." More humour like this would make your guide even more awesome ^^
11) Your screenshot of your jungle route is extremely difficult to understand :P
12) Not sure if intentional, but "Wraiths" in your "Step-by-Step Jungling" section is multi-coloured.
13) A video of Route One would be awesome, as your Route Two section is a bit more detailed because of Stonewall's video.
14) Perhaps some ranked game screenshots would be nice? As opposed to screenshots where you're still gaining XP?
Verdict: Absolutely Fantastic Amumu Jungling Resource
Possible Improvements: More recent screenshots, adding colour/coding to walls of text, maybe a new section about Twisted Treeline?
Constructive Criticism:
1) A new Amumu jungler might just glance quickly at your Item Purchase and go off to jungle with only 1 pot. I know it's a pain looking at 5 Health Potions in your item purchase, but it might prevent Noob Mistakes.
2) We already have a Table of Contents, and while I realise you've put a lot of effort into goto tags, the extra table of contents seems like too much of a surplus.
3) Instead of having a list of abbreviated terms, perhaps at the first mention, just include the abbreviation. So, "Amumu has an AoE (Area of Effect) ability called etc etc etc". This will neaten up your beginning.
4) Wow! Your "Skill Explanations" section is absolutely fantastic! Very in-depth and it is extremely clear that you know what you're talking about.
5) When you list the reasons why Curse of the Sad Mummy is great, these three things are virtually buried under all the other text. Despite being Bold Font. You need to add some colour to the titles of all the abilities and everything else that you want to stand out. While you have a good grasp of when to produce paragraph points, you really need to add in colour and coding to keep the reader interested in your work.
6) With your section about "Rune Explanations" you should be using the
Greater Mark of Magic Penetration coding to give the yellow colour to make it stand out.7) Your "Mastery Explanations" are great, but again, colour! Some images! A screenshot of your mastery tree set up so people can see it straight up would be nice.
Your explanation of Perserverance is wrong. It runs off base health/mana regen, not off item regen. Unless Amumu gets a natural 100 hp/5... ? o.O
8) You definitely need colour for emphasis in your "Core Item Build Sequence" section. I nearly missed where you said "five Health Potions". I would have clearly seen it if you had "Start of with
Cloth Armor and 5x Health Potions".9) What about
Sorcerer's Shoes, seeing as he's primarily magic damage?10) "Did you hear that? IT GIVES YOU TEARS THAT SLOW PEOPLE." More humour like this would make your guide even more awesome ^^
11) Your screenshot of your jungle route is extremely difficult to understand :P
12) Not sure if intentional, but "Wraiths" in your "Step-by-Step Jungling" section is multi-coloured.
13) A video of Route One would be awesome, as your Route Two section is a bit more detailed because of Stonewall's video.
14) Perhaps some ranked game screenshots would be nice? As opposed to screenshots where you're still gaining XP?
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