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[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wanna-rock-so-get-ready-for-the-show-101119?page=2#comment-246075]TheJohn's Mordekaiser Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] This is a good Mordekaiser guide which covers all possible items Morde could ever get. [color=#ffff00]Edit:[/color] Wow, I am extremely impressed by the changes in your guide due to feedback. Thank you very much for listening. Your guide is very much more aesthetically pleasing, but I am sad that you have deleted so much of the gameplay content which made your guide more in-depth. I am close to recommending this guide as a vet. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] But that doesn't mean it's a great guide. It is a little messy in terms of organisation, and there isn't a gameplay section because the author is trying to write three guides in one, so it's not as in-depth as it should be. I'd suggest only listing the alternative builds, or if the author desperately wants to keep it, they should reorganise their guide so it's more comprehensive ^^ [color=#ffff00]Edit:[/color] The author has taken feedback very seriously and their guide has turned out tremendously improved. As such, I only have a few suggestions. Videos of gameplay would be great, some more tips and tricks, a more in-depth gameplay section. Otherwise, fantastic guide! Constructive Criticism: 1) I'm not sure about Quints of Regeneration? But I don't play Morde, so I wouldn't know how good they are on him. 2) Again with the Purchase order, no need to tell us every item before the major item. I would also definitely recommend perhaps, an eary [[heart of gold]] then [[randuin's omen]]. If I were to respec your build: [[doran's shield]] > [[giant's belt]] > [[boots of speed]] > [[warmog's armour]] > [[sorcerer's shoes]] > [[heart of gold]] > [[randuin's omen]] > [[force of nature]] > [[zhonya's hourglass]] > [[abyssal scepter]] 3) Also, I believe I saw a Morde with your build the other day. Solo top, first item Warmogs. He got a Quadra kill around the 30 minute mark. 4) You could merge your intro with your Updates section so that there isn't so much wasted space with a small section. 5) I really like how you've now set out your guide. It is very visually pleasing. 6) Your masteries section kinda confused me. It looks like you're going: 9/15/20. Maybe say something like, "If Specifying in the Offense Tree" as opposed to just "Offense". Maybe that'd make it more clear. 7) Your guide is really simple and easy to understand now. The improvements are amazing. I'm going to feature this in my first post. Good work! 8) Coding like: "[[randuin's omen]] is the epic item" will look nicer, and add more visual relief to an already very aesthetically pleasing guide. 9) You may want to put the "Other Items" in List Format to make it take up less space. I like how you've highlighted the most important aspects of each item. 10) You can merge your "Notes about the builds" section into the introduction instead of having it as a separate section.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][quote=jhoijhoi][center][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506][color=#ff0000]>>> BEFORE YOU REQUEST A REVIEW, PLEASE READ THIS. CLICK ME! <<<[/color][/url][/center] You[color=#ff0000] must[/color] use this format below for submitting a guide for review, otherwise I'll [color=#ff0000]ignore[/color] your request. People who just drop their links here will be [color=#ff0000]completely ignored[/color]. [indent][color=#0080ff][b]Guide For (champion): Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: What I'd like you to focus on: Guide Link: [/b][/color][/indent][/quote][/quote]

[quote=kin333x]ive already read that but i still need some help so heres the proper format guide for champion: pantheon Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: i just cant think of anything else to add to it i just need a few pointers What I'd like you to focus on: the guide itself (i did a horrible job and i think i need to start from scratch) Guide Link:[url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/pantheon-the-manamune-wielder-75083]pantheon the manamune weilder.[/url][/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Kin. Your guide. I almost have no words. Listen. 1) Please re-read [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]My Guide About Making a Guide[/url], and follow it. Your guide is extremely minimalistic and does not convey anything to the reader. I'm not sure if this even is classified as a guide. There is no coding, no formatting, no colour, no images, no explanations - your guide constitutes nothing of a good guide which is detailed in [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]My Guide About Making a Guide.[/url] 2) Your build is unrealistic and ridiculous. No one buys THREE Bloodthirsters. Ever. And no one ever gets [[clarity]] on [[pantheon]]. Please read [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]My Guide About Making a Guide[/url] to grasp the idea of what Summoner Spells/Items to choose. 3) You put absolutely no effort into your guide and it is extremely obvious to me and to every other single person out there who looked at it. You have silly spelling mistakes like "exsuast" which clearly show me that you haven't run your guide through a spell check like I suggested in [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]My Guide About Making a Guide.[/url] 4) There's no point starting from scratch, because this is scratch! This is the most bare bones guide I have ever seen in my life and does not utilise anything I and the community have suggested in [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]My Guide About Making a Guide.[/url]. tl;dr: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]Please Read This[/url] and ask again for a request when you have followed the tips provided. I know you have read the guide because you were one of the first commentors. But you really need to re-read it and implement everything I have suggested in it to make an adequate guide. Thank you.[/quote]

[quote=da_neo][color=#ff0080]+rep[/color]ed you for your great work and your fantastic help. Thanks.[/quote]

[quote=Searz][quote=jhoijhoi] [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wanna-rock-so-get-ready-for-the-show-101119?page=2#comment-246075]TheJohn's Mordekaiser Guide[/url][/quote] HP5>HP5/lvl HP5/lvl is pretty useless... 21def is very meh if you have great use of move speed and CDR (like Morde does). 9/0/21 should by far be the best for Morde. Please give up on Warmog. On Morde resists are worth more than double of what they're normally worth because [u]he has HP(a shield) that regenerates when he deals damage and an ultimate that damages and heals him[/u]. During a fight that can result in extreme amounts of "bonus HP". Boosting that with resistances is faaaaaar better than having a ton of bulk through just HP.[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed][quote=jhoijhoi] Constructive Criticism: 1) You have a lot of random space in your disclaimer. 2) You could merge your introduction and your disclaimer together. 3) You need to work on paragraphical space. When you make a new line in a new paragraph, add an enter above and below it. ie: [quote]Welcome fellow tank players to my guide. I will teach you all the true way of tanking by the end of this guide. Now I will not go into how to build each champion that is for other guides that you can find on this site. [color=red]ENTER[/color] Rather my goal is too teach you the general idea of tanking, and how to do it [b][s]sucessfully[/s][/b] successfully. [color=red]ENTER[/color] At the end of these guide you will have learned a valuable lesson, and be able to do your job as a tank to the best of your ability.[/quote] 4) Have a read of my Guide About Making a Guide (if you haven't already, I lose track of who has read it or not) and try to implement some of the coding in it. For example, your Commandments of Tanking could be a numerical list which would look nicer. 5) There are a lot of walls of text with no visual relief. Add some images/icons, anything. A lot of champion abilities look really nice as headers, ie: [quote]Protecting your comrades [center][icon=baleful strike size=50][/center] Now remember overall you ought to be doing very little damage (unless your [s][b]abillities[/b][/s] abilities have a high base damage), so you are not really a threat.[/quote] ^ this also shows me you still have a lot of spelling errors that I probably didn't notice :3 6) I'd suggest a separator between each skill, and also more enter spaces. (don't ask me what a separator is, I've already told about 20 people in my thread about it ^^) 7) Still nothing about jungling? [/quote] My response.....this guide is just gonna be my devil child isn't it? Although I did put a little bit about jungling. Did you not see it, or did I fail to hit the publish button?[/quote]

[quote=AngelPixe]Guide For (champion):Akali Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:Its my first ever guide,I asked some of my friends to look at it when it came out and I fixed a lot of the errors I did in the past.I also add two sections and im not sure if they are good or if my guide is good in general.Im still planning on adding some more sections,but I wanted to see what you will say first ^_^ What I'd like you to focus on:Anything please and thank you! Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/shadow-killer-on-duty-85584[/quote]

[quote=da_neo][quote=AngelPixe] Guide For (champion):Akali Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:Its my first ever guide,I asked some of my friends to look at it when it came out and I fixed a lot of the errors I did in the past.I also add two sections and im not sure if they are good or if my guide is good in general.Im still planning on adding some more sections,but I wanted to see what you will say first ^_^ What I'd like you to focus on:Anything please and thank you! Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/shadow-killer-on-duty-85584 [/quote] I looked a little into it. Try to center your Icons. [code][center][/center][/code] will do. Also try to redo some of your game Tips. [quote]Annie was buff even more for her late game advantages.Once she hits level 6. Summon: Tibbers stun combo will kill you or force you to back.If you are Mid against her.She has a nasty combo and just by dropping Summon: Tibbers on a Team Fight will kill your carries.You have to pray she misses with Summon: Tibbers or your done for.[/quote] Is not a viable Tip for new Akali players. "Instead try to be a little creative. Annie is very Squishy in terms of health early. So disturb her there. Gank her." I won't tell you all of Annie's weak points (as I play Annie myself) but YOUR description, well sucks. Or buy conter Items. I see it in every game. All of them have the "damage syndrome" (more damage more damage). Well yes, they have 500AD/ 1000 AP but will die instant as they only have 10 HP. Quicksilver Lash nullyfies her stun for example. Also leave a little more space between the Paragraphs. Especially in the Rune section. Try this " _______________________________________________________________________________________________ " This draws a Line in between two things. I use it myself in my guide. Sry, jhoi, I wanted to try reviewing a guide, too ;)[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed][quote=AngelPixe] Guide For (champion):Akali Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:Its my first ever guide,I asked some of my friends to look at it when it came out and I fixed a lot of the errors I did in the past.I also add two sections and im not sure if they are good or if my guide is good in general.Im still planning on adding some more sections,but I wanted to see what you will say first ^_^ What I'd like you to focus on:Anything please and thank you! Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/shadow-killer-on-duty-85584 [/quote] As a fellow Akali player I'm just gonna point a few things out. 1. No early [[doran blade]] for even more spell vamp/lifesteal? 2. Ignite for the squishes that try to run away? Akali is one of the best pursuers in the game. There should be no running away, they should be dead. Maybe grab an exhaust for the 1v1 encounters? I know ignite add extra damage, and I'm not sure if the 10 ap is worth the mastery point. 3. In your skills section there is probaly no need to list [[Twilight shroud]] twice. Acutally looking at it now, you do it a bit. There is really no need. 4. Rageblade does not gain stacks only off auto-attacks, but abilities as well. So your entire burst adds stacks to the rageblade. 5. No early [[hextech revolver]] for the extra spell vamp and AP? 6. You don't mention champions who might be able to see your through [[twlight shroud]]. For example [[Twisted Fate]]'s [[Destiny]], [[Warwick]]'s [[blood scent]], [[Nidalee]]'s and [[Caitlyn]]'s traps. An [[Akali]] revealed in a teamfight is a dead one.[/quote]