Hey there,

Since you asked for someone to look at your guide, here’s a review.

I put comments on the presentation in a separate spoiler.

Click for review - presentation Writing Spelling: There are actually not that many spelling mistakes to be found in the text of your guide. However, there are a few high-impact ones in images/headers… Such as Summener Spells & Compos. There are also a few in the pros/cons of the keystones but I’ll come back to those images later. Grammar: Spelling’s bigger & meaner brother. There are quite some mistakes in this regard, such as conjugating verbs, word order and plurals. Most of the times these mistakes will just make your text awkward to read, in some cases they will make it impossible to understand what you’re trying to say. I’ll try to list the unreadable ones in the other spoiler. There are some programs that can correct grammar, although those are harder to get by than a spelling check. You can gain a lot by correcting these mistakes imo. Sentence length: Another key part to writing is the length of your sentences. The . at the end of the sentence is a break for the mind. Let’s say you do some sport – you need to take breaks in between or you’ll become to exhausted to continue. The same is true for sentences – if you make sentences too long it becomes extremely hard to understand what you’re trying to say. I recommend to make sentences no longer than 25 words just a rule of thumb. If you want to say more things, make a new sentence. So far the “record” is 73 words in a single sentence! Paragraphs: Still about writing! This goes pretty well, except for some spots: mythics and early/mid/late game. These are just walls of text, I don’t even want to read them. Only very dedicated readers will try to tackle these :( Either make them shorter or split them up into several paragraphs. Centered Text: Do not center text unless it is necessary. This concerns text in the following sections: Abilities, a part of Wave Control and roaming. TOC & Headers TOC: Your TOC serves its purpose of navigating you to a certain section in the guide. However, it is not very easy to read. I like what you tried (e.g. indent every “new” main topic”), but the design sadly is not really a “quick overview of guide content”. The side by side placement of the topics and the lack of capital letters (and space in the last line) makes it kind of hard to distinguish the topics. If you have too much time and don’t know what else to do – maybe you should try to change the design a bit. Sidebar TOC: It is not there. Do you have a single-chapter guide (as in, do you use only one text box in the guide editor?) a hell to edit. I recommend “making” a sidebar TOC by naming the chapters in the guide editor (and disabling headers so you don’t get those lines). If you put everything in a single box. Migrate the different chapters to different boxes, it’ll make editing life much easier. Banners: These are all good, however your pre-game banner has a really low resolution for some reason. Headers: Besides that I always feel like they should go from large to small, but this doesn’t always happen. I also feel like the tiny red boxes do not really “match” the sections they are supposed to represent. Take for examples the items, this HUGE section is represented by this smol cute red rectangle… I would make something like this: The gap is smaller in a guide, comment section things ._. ITEMS Code: [size=7][b][color=#a30400]ITEMS[/color][/b][/size][table height=2 bgcolor=#a30400][tr][td width=762px][/td][/tr][/table] And then use those rectangle boxes for subsections (e.g. starting items, mythics, etc). Those square red boxes are also quite inconsistent, some of them have different text sizes/distances between text/borders, different resolutions, different colors how :o, etc. I think you could easily make such a thing with code and not have to mess with images up to you, for example: STARTING ITEMS Code: [table border-spacing=0px][tr][td padding="6px 5px 5px 5px" border="4px solid #a30400"][size=5][b][color=#a30400]STARTING ITEMS[/color][/b][/size][/td][/tr][/table] Code Details/Other Pros/cons I would put the image below the column so that the box with negatives lines up with the text. Capitalize every new sentence/line in the boxes. It just makes things look cleaner. Runes Some of the boxes with the minor runes you pick have a bigger width than some other boxes with the minor runes you pick (take Taste of Blood vs Triumph for example). (And the Ingenious Hunter icon has the same size as the Ravenous Hunter icon for some reason). Try to make these widths the same. You got some images with pros/cons, however the text in these images is in different places, of different sizes etc. I suggest to just throw these images away and to make some kind of table to put these pros/cons in. You also got images of the different rune pages (more or less showcasing the different keystones). However this doesn’t give that much additional information since you take the same minor runes with every keystones. So I think you could remove these images as well and just save a lot of space at no cost… Summoner Spells: Capitalize the name of all the summoner names below the images (e.g. Exhaust). Abilities I'd put some space between the text and the red dividers, right now it looks quite cramped which makes it harder to read. This is also the case in a lot of other sections. Some of the ability numbers are cut off and put on the next line due to a lack of space. It might be a good idea to put the icons above the numbers & name instead of next to them. Remove the italics from the explanations. The passive explanation is slightly confusing because a part of the explanation is listed above the clip, rather than the description like with all other abilities. Items Increase the vertical space between items, there should be more space between the item name and the description of the previous item than between the item name and its description. The blue dividers are kinda random considering the rest of your guide has a red theme.

 
Now, for the content-specific part of the review:

Click for review Cheatsheet and build Summoner Spells: If you take unconventional summoner spells you better have a very good reason for it. Barrier is one of those and you don’t even take it, you just say that it is good for baits. There is no reason whatsoever to take Barrier on Yone. You are not a squishy control mage that needs extra protection. You also put Clarity in the summoner spells rather than Cleanse the former is pretty useless xd. Runes: They’re ok. I’m a bit skeptical of Press the Attack (I haven’t seen a single Yone run it, neither in my games or on stats sites). Items: I’d try to make some of the block titles a bit shorter (e.g. “Standard Start” & “Against Poke Start”, “Core Without Crit Mythic” or just “Standard”). You could also try splitting up the offensive items/defensive items blocks in tinier blocks. Items: Some of the items (both legendary & mythics) are unconventional… A list: Goredrinker Navori Flickerblade The Collector Black Cleaver It doesn’t look like they’re build a lot or at all. Looking forward to what you got to say about them in the items section. Pros/Cons The pros/cons are alright, there are a few awkward sentences, but also a few where I have a hard time understanding what you mean: ”You can be in the team-fights whenever you have your abilities on” ”With your two role character you can cover the lack in your team” ”Hard escape” (I’d call it “Conditional escape” or even “Lacks escape” – you can hardly call 3rd Q an escape) In the pros you use “Have” a lot, this should be “Has” (Google “**** rule” yeah it’s really called like that). Some of the pros could be phrased in a shorter way, however they do their job. It’s something you could consider changing though. It always feels bad when a single pros/cons occupies two lines. Perhaps you could change “Poor use of Soul Unbound can even kill you” to “ Soul Unbound is hard to use”. And mention the former in the text. Runes These descriptions of the different runes are long and wordy. I definitely see opportunities to make them shorter & therefore easier to read. For example at Legend: Alacrity you essentially say Yone needs attack speed because it reduces the cooldown & cast time of Mortal Steel and Spirit Cleave and because his main source of damage is AAs. Avoid wasting too many words on options you do not take, sometimes the explanations why you don’t take certain things are longer than the explanations why you do take certain things (the latter is more important). At Press the Attack you tell people to take it vs scaling champions, but somewhat later you tell to take it vs champions that like small trades or against squishies. At Bone Plating you mention that it is good vs assassins and champions that like short trades. However assassins are champions that like short trades… I also had trouble understanding what this sentence meant: “ You tilt because you kite them for a few attacks and deal them much less than the normal, this will happen and with you.” Summoner Spells I already said it, but I’ll do so again: throw away Barrier. Abilities I actually forgot to mention this at the cheatsheet. But I would refrain from matching Spirit Cleave second in ALL cases. Maxing Spirit Cleave 2nd gives you NOTHING aside from 40 more damage and 4% max health damage… The shield does not even increase with extra ranks so mentioning that as a reason is just wrong. This is vs halving the CD on Soul Unbound + 10% post mitigation damage, one of the most important parts of Yones kit At Way of the Hunter: Mortal Steel does not apply your passive... It’s always pure physical damage. Spirit Cleave shield does NOT increase when hitting multiple minions. It only increases when hitting champions. Even hitting 1 champion gives more shield than hitting 7 minions. I think Spirit Cleave + Mortal Steel is not an animation cancel. The animation just completes and you’re basically just buffering the abilities. It is extremely similar to Ice Shard + Ring of Frost in that regard. Items Mythics: The descriptions of the mythics are basically just walls of text. I continuously have to read why attack speed is good on Yone and it’s becoming quite… annoying If you want to talk about how valuable certain stats are, then you should make a separate section for it. I also feel like the order of the mythics does not make any sense as the most viable ones are in between less viable ones. I’d either put them in alphabetical order or in order of viability. I’m not sold on Goredrinker, it lacks the attack speed you desperately want and gives you nothing in return. Yes, you get a one-time nice heal but beyond that you are just going to get onetapped whilst being completely useless. As for Navori Flickerblade: Yone does not synergize that well with haste, yes it reduces the cd on his Soul Unbound. But besides that it doesn’t do that much for you. Extra CD reduction on Mortal Steel is just useless as its cooldown is 1.33s already. Of course, less CD on Spirit Cleave is nice but… All of it just doesn’t feel worth it compared to other items/stats (e.g. lifesteal, defensive stats, Infinity Edge). Also keep in mind that Mortal Steel and Spirit Cleave cds do not get lowered on URF (they still scale with atk speed), so mentioning its like playing URF Yone is kinda eh. Try to stick to just telling when an item is useful and a little bit of why an item is useful. In niche cases you can also explain what an item does, but keep it short. Do not spend too much time on explaining what exactly an item does, people can hover over the icons & simply read the description. Buying The Collector seems more like a meme-fun option to me. If you are really that ahead you can go Infinity Edge and you'll just murder everything on your path anyway. Keep in mind that a part of your damage is magic damage, which won't be affected by lethality. Mercurial Scimitar isn’t the counter of control mages… Champions like Orianna and Viktor do not care whatsoever if you QSS their CC ability. If you rush QSS vs those champions you do a good job of setting yourself behind whilst accomplishing absolutely nothing. The only case where an early QSS could be good is if you’re vs Malzahar and he’s getting camped by his jungler. Among all the items, the absence of Maw of Malmortius is notable. Why is don’t you consider it? Be careful with just stating that Lord Dominik's Regards is good because it gives bonus damage vs tanks. It only does that if they got more health than you, and if you buy something like Black Cleaver then this health difference becomes smaller and you’re losing out on bonus damage. You’re essentially countering yourself. Combo’s It surprises me that you listed the Flash mechanics, but do not have any combos that utilize it. Using 3rd Mortal Steel + Fate Sealed leaves a tiny time gap where the enemy can flash/dash away. It is not continuous CC. However using Fate Sealed into 3rd Mortal Steel will chain CC enemies. Counters/Gameplay I’d put the counter section somewhere else. It is basically a section with super-specific information and it just doesn’t deserve to be in the middle of more general gameplay information. It would be a better idea to put it at after the gameplay info (and before the general techniques chapter). Don’t take Quicksilver Sash vs Syndra to avoid her Scatter the Weak stun. Ahri doesn’t take Glacial Augment anymore. If she does, then she probably forgot that the items got reworked. The gameplay chapter consists of more walls of text. Try to split it up in paragraphs/make it easier to read. Also, what do you do when your jungle does not gank you? some junglers avoid your lane like the plague General Techniques It is not entirely clear to me what role your guide is on. It looks like it is mainly mid, but also contains several references to top. In this chapter there are also some references to jungle. I recommend removing those references as they are quite confusing. Only splitpush without Teleport if you intend to give up the objective on the other side of the map. Numbers advantage is everything, unless your team is massively ahead they won’t be able to win a 4v5. This is very dangerous to do in low elo, you have to get a LOT in return because your team will probably just fight and die on top of losing the objective. You CANNOT Teleport on Farsight Alteration. Another reader already pointed it out to you. Always test mechanics in practice tool/games before adding them to your guide. There is NO excuse for listing nonexistent mechanics like this! You should probably resize the warding images as they’re very large at the moment (you can put width=500 height=auto in the [img] tag) The images on jungle warding and botlane warding are not necessary considering the topic of your guide. Also, one of the images in warding tips/tricks doesn’t work. ”ROAM” isn’t an abbreviation, you can safely use “roam” without capitalizing all the letters.

Phew, that's it. I think the main point of improvement of your guide is making it more readable (e.g. making explanations less wordy, fixing grammar, TOC, headers). The information is there, but it needs some polishing.


I hope you are able to do something with the feedback, feel free to reply if you have any questions/remarks.
Anyways, good luck with updating & upgrading your guide and have a nice day!