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Creator: Totallynotn00b June 28, 2012 2:30am
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Blllllargh.

The main thing holding this back is spelling and grammer.

Other issues:

Let's take the skills section - it basically looks like everything belongs to one idea. I.e, theres no clear-cut boundaries between skills.

Items:

You actually mean buying order, which to me comes after the discussion of items...

But ok. Moving on:

Um. Frozen Mallet on Riven to me just seems bizzare. But the worst offender is the Aegis. I presume the items are in order of buying, of which buying aegis at the very end makes no sense whatsoever.

You mention a build for CDR riven. Fine. You don't then spell out when/why you would use this...




Teamfights: offensive. I don't know if you deliberately put act like a brick wall in grey, but if you did, it's not obvious to the reader that it's meant to be standing out.


Champion match ups:

I can honestly tell you that giving 7/10 to vlad as riven is a joke. As a now pretty avid Vlad player, going and sticking on Vlad's face from level 3->9 will always end badly for Vlad. You out damage him so much it isn't even funny. Seriously. Try commiting all your abilities and passive to him one time and see how it goes.

You have several champions with no images... as well as items. But it might be to do with this PC, i don't know.


Conclusions: Get back to work D=
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^ Was your PC, UHH act liek a brick wall i'll fix that, no items not in order, i'll fix that, I play vlad a lot too, I will go in more depth though about the match ups. I also like frozen mallet because a slow plus rivens high mobility=nearly impossible escapes. Well thanks again will work on it more! Also about vlad yeah I saw what I said only at the end do I truly mention lv 9 is where he actually gets really good sustains ect. i'll fix it! Thanks!
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You should totally have a pic of Mordekaiser saying "Time to shred".

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Your name (Prefered way of addressing you, within reason.): Anastasios
Link to your guide : Here
Any specific points that I should look at?: I would say everything.
Why should i review your guide?: I have dedicated quite some time on it, and i believe it is at a level good enough to be shredded.
Why do you want your guide reviewed? : I published it a few days ago, and i haven't got a sufficient amount of feedback.
Are you wasting my time? I certainly hope not.
Have you read the reviews i give? Yes.
Are you prepared for the same level of response? I want the same level of response.

P.S.: Please include a Rage Level Meter

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RAGE LEVEL: Sorry kids. No fireworks.

What can I say about this guide?
It looks appealing, makes sense... but it's criminally lacking in explanations.

What I liked about it is that you clearly have experience with the champion - you explain the nuances and bits which would take time and knowledge to know. But then you falter pretty hard on explaining...


The easy stuff. - I.e: You state your skill order. You don't state why that's your skill order.

Another example is under null zone: Even i know you don't use it to farm... but still, you don't explain why you don't.

Under items:

Let#'s take Rod of Ages. You state what it does... and waht to look out for. But you don't give your opinion on whether to get or not, let alone why you do/don't. (I presume the latter, since it's not in your build order)

LEt's take this a bit further. No sod it, back to basics. You have a item order, but absolutely zero axplanation as to why that is the case.



Stuff i just don't get .

Why you love CDR so much. You have it under blues, and state under ionian boots that they're not bad. But I don't see anywhere in the guide that would explain to me why CDR would benefit you instead of raw power.

Stuff i think is just wrong .

Your Flash->kill combo.

In fact, i can tell you your kill combo just isn't going to work against competent players.
You Flash... and then use 2 abilities of which do not lock down your opponnent. They have agggggges to make an escape maneouvre of their own no?

URgh.

Conclusions:... It's Ok.

Bare minimum ok. It lacks explanation in key areas. Why X over Y. Why Y over Z... etc.
I also disagree with Banshee's Veil rush, as although you yourself won't die, as an AP carry that's not the point. Abyssal Mask would probably serve you better in most cases.
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Thank you very much for your review :)
I will try to fix all those points either later today or tomorrow...

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lol sorry kids no fire works XD
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Awaiting next victim <.<
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Your name (Prefered way of addressing you, within reason.): OTGBionicArm
Link to your guide : My Darius guide
Any specific points that I should look at?: Everything but the jungling section, it's short, ugly and I'm debating removing it entirely.
Why should i review your guide?: It's somewhat popular I guess. I get a lot of emails with great scores and even some "fans" I guess you'd call them.
Why do you want your guide reviewed? : Some constructive criticism is always good. Plus I like your reviews.
Are you wasting my time? Absolutely not.
Have you read the reviews i give? yes.
Are you prepared for the same level of response? Yes. Shred my guide!
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Ooooooh dear.

Just from the title I'm already expecting great things.

But already i have quibbles. Like the fact his ult uses two hands. Not one. Tsk tsk. Ahem. (I;m sorry, i can make bad jokes too)

Major quibbles:

Lack of opinion



You've gone the reverse of what i normally criticise. You've explained what summoner spells you could take, but then you don't talk about what you take. It's basically arguing the pros and cons about a subject, yet not concluding.

Of which if you wanted to be picky, you haven't stated why you don't take others, but I'll let that slide. The previous point is more important.

This rears its head again in item builds: you state why, but not exactly when. Why X over Y, A over B, etc. Or i'll put this another way. You are going around stating "Why you would buy it" as opposed to "why you should by it". To further prove my point, you haven't listed any con's to the items you've stated.


Your jungling section...



Erm. This... is perhaps the weakest part of the guide.
I don't get this fascination with numbers /10. But in this case it's hair-rippingly pointless. You've got nothing else to compare it to! what does 6/10 mean? 7/10? Theres nothing that explains what this scale means, and what point it serves.


But some minor quibbles:


You've got some illogical stuff going on.



Optional runes: You start off with a quint, then go into others, and end with quints. - Eh?

I feel you might be better served by listing them under seperate sub-headings. (I.e, alternate marks, alternate quints, etc)

Spelling errors



Ahem. Hypocritical I know. Relatively minor and forgivable. I work by %'s. Of which yours is fine.

Lack of examples



Wut? Minor? Well, yeah. You mention interesting moves to make like dragging blue over from its spot to steal it, and have images of it. Would it be too hard to show how you can try this on red, but it doesn't work?


if you shut him down and deny him stacks, he's actually kinda cute. :3

*facepalm* I hate you for putting this image and idea in my head. Oh dear god.




Conclusions: For the most part it's pretty good.
But i'm still not going to vote on it. ********. Cute chogath. WHYYYYYYYY
ARRGGHHH
NOOOOO
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