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[quote=Pheyniex][quote=LaronX] Must resist to make witty comment about doing or rather not doing homework.... Let's try to help instead: jhoijhoi: For the first week you might want to add social and economy riot. Just think how people react when they hear that there town is gone get hit by a tornado. Everyone would run crazy to buy stuff like food and water. I know some words of week 2-6 but I would add the fact that you need to use the microorganisms to "form" your new world therefor you would need research while looking for a place if you can it the way you need it to be with the technology you have. In the case of Mars there are thoughts about smacking the fist settlements in biospheres and trying to cultivate highly resistive plants outside ( very unrealistic but the US has money to burn) Another option are bacteria . Cyanobacteria to be exact. They take less space then any other oxygen producing organism and can be used to produce large amounts of O2 over a the course of time. This is also being toyed with as oxygen source for long space travels. Other stuff to remember when doing a settlement on mars include: Water: The only visible source atm are polar caps. Rising the temperature of the planet ( along side with giving it an earth like atmosphere) is a very popular scenario but kind of unrealistic because the gravity of mares might not be big enough to hold an atmosphere like the earth has. The other hope is that water is all over the planted just frozen under the surface invisible as it is to deep for the rovers to dig. Mars storms: Those things are scary and you have to plane the location of your settlements so you don't get blowen away. Earth Mars coordination: You can't just set of and send all people at once. There has to be a "gray" phase after the first people landed and you start to make you move. The travel to the mars can vary in time from 8 months to way to long. So you need to coordination when stuff goes over and when you send the people etc. If you need pictures of the Mars you might want to check out both opportunity(still rolling around there) and Spirit( died 2010) they made some very impressive pictures of Mars. Hope this helps. [/quote] cyanobacteria have a serious problem related to them and that is what gives them the name. they produce cyanide derivates, heavilly poisonous and I really don't think you want such a start. Besides you have to provide preexisting organic material. Much better option is what is used in space as air recycling units, de-oxidizing Co2 (Mars is 96% rich in carbon Dioxide), turning it to breathable oxigen. Also wheat production is a very efficient way to get oxigen (and food, in case you are human and need to eat). the main problem will probably be water, but this is solvable if you resort your self to marcian poles. i hope jhoi sees this soon because cyanobacteria is a terrible idea. [url=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ISS_ECLSS] International Space Station Environmental Control and Life Support System (ECLSS)[/url][/quote]

[quote=DKitten]You can breed the cyanotoxic production out of bacteria with a little genetic splicing, considering only some cyanobacteria produce it in the first place.[/quote]

[quote=Hogopogo][quote=A Chubby Baby] I love how Google doesn't work properly every time in China... [/quote] :D For me it works it works it works then when I click a link I can't reach the server :P On topic: I won't be much help :P[/quote]

[quote=lifebaka][quote=Pølsemanden] English assignment about some black guy making a presentation about american black people to an english university - you're his assistant writing a manuscript, i'd like some help with the grammar and stuff like that since i think a lot of it might be wrong. The level is high-school(athink) https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NoNANraaDZ_vuLFCTd4I6txewB_Fa4minPubihV8XTk Thank you in advance to anyone who'd like to help. [/quote] Your Google doc is locked, Polse, so we can't even view it to comment. You might wanna' change that. I requested permission for access, regardless.[/quote]

[quote=LaronX]@Pheyniex: What DKitten said. The issu with recyling unites is that they are expensive and need quite some energy to work both things you don't want in a place that has no Infrastructure. It is not like you could simple erreact a power plante. For the first few years you would have to work on regentiv basis because you can't take tons of equipment with you and you can't expext to many supplys to come from the earth. @Jhoijhoi: Glad I could help. And yes. If we had like 4 weeks to pull this of we would be doomed even a year would be to less. I dunno what to tell you regarding the time. Estimates vary from 5-20 years. The main concern is what you can actully make stay and how much energy you can gerate that won't be used to survive as that seems to be very possible at this point but not worth it if you can't do anything besied being there.[/quote]

[quote=Pheyniex][quote=LaronX] @Pheyniex: What DKitten said. The issu with recyling unites is that they are expensive and need quite some energy to work both things you don't want in a place that has no Infrastructure. It is not like you could simple erreact a power plante. For the first few years you would have to work on regentiv basis because you can't take tons of equipment with you and you can't expext to many supplys to come from the earth. [/quote] therefore you think that cultivating a certain species of bacteria, is just simply going to throw out oxigen, besides nefarious subtances? your starting infrastructure is your landing vessel. you'll have to keep landing vessels until you are capable of mining resources and treat them to usable materials. Are you sure you want to introduce toxic bacteria when your vessels already carry equipment for it? for what, poison the water you drink so you expend more energy/processes on purifying it? i'd rather smoke cigarrettes. you can suggest other algi, but certainly not cyanobacteria. Besides, i'd dare you to eat them. otherwise, i expect you to have other food source.[/quote]

[quote=Pølsemanden][spoiler]Assignment A: Manuscript It is no secret that in the American society of today, black people are underprivileged. It doesn’t matter if you’re glancing through IQ-tests, economical listings or even amount of children given birth to per family: Black people are just the bottom of the bunch. Some people like James Watson come up with outrageous and quite frankly racist comments, such as the difference in IQ-tests are rooted in genes rather than environment and living conditions. I consider claims like that to be uneducated and obsolete, even if said by a College graduate with a Nobel Prize. I myself believe the problem exists due to the social behavior and everlasting social circle there is in the society of today. If black people from low-class families are only socializing with each other rather than getting to know the whole spectrum, they’ll never break their social inheritance. If low-class blacks only socialize with other low-class blacks, then being smart in school will become uncool. They’ll lose all incentive to learn since if they learn and become smart they’ll be punished by abolishment, rather than admired for their hard work which would set a foundation for future glory for the whole ethnic group. Without an incentive to study and work hard for accomplishments in school black people are doomed to never ever break their boundaries in society and never become equal to the white man. Another problem I see in the society of today is to glorify black people as to give them a fighting chance – ultimately treating us like handicapped individuals who need a ramp rather than a stairway because they can’t walk up the stairway of studying. We can walk up a stairway, we just need to lift ourselves from the ground before we can achieve anything even remotely as massive as a stairway and that can only be done through the help of society. We need to show these 5 year old black boys and girls that black successful individuals do exist, that studying will amount to success and most of all that you shouldn’t abolish studying kids from your social groups, rather than help these people with easier scholarships and reduce their required points for entry into a university, society as a whole would benefit much more from having actually educated people who have had the incentive to study all along, not to mention the economic pluses from lowered crime rate and increased financial growth. Crime rate brings me to another very important point in this presentation. In America 40% of all inmates are black, some of you might think well at least it’s under half so that’s no biggie. Well that is a biggie since only 12% of the American population is black, this means that blacks have 3 1/3 times more jail time than their part of the population would justify. The root of this problem is like the root of every other problem with blacks in The United States of America; the social heritage just has way too tough of a grip on the kids. You know that when people grow up and assume they’ll be dead or in jail by the time they’re thirty and what brought them into that situation was their color, something has to be changed. Especially if we assume that these babies, at their birth were born with the same chances as well as the same intellectual level as their white counterparts. Another issue I would like to address is how blacks look at their position in the American society. If we look on how blacks perceive their standing in society, one can tell that for every day that passes, blacks as well as whites feel that the increase of the social standing of blacks in the society is diminishing. We can from this conclude one of two things: 1: Blacks are now totally equal to whites and there is nothing to be done to increase equality. 2: The state as it is, is running out of methods to help these people. Assuming option nr. 1 is the right one would be naïve at best. We can from all kinds of charts tell that there is a considerable difference in living standards as well as income among other things. Until the living conditions for black people and white people are of somewhat equal standing, I consider the task undone. let us get real and move on to option 2; The state as it is has a hard time giving blacks a better future, the social offices simply don’t know what to do to help these people. I feel like we should try to put down some serious taskforces to get some serious reforms which can help the black kids right from the second they’re extracted from the womb of their mothers.[spoiler] did the spoiler thing.[/quote]

[quote=DillButt64]polse instead of saying "black people" change it to "African Americans" in every instance of that essay also i would put "the white man" in quotation marks in your essay " that black successful individuals" i would change that to "that successful black individuals" it looks better writing it that way[/quote]

[quote=lifebaka]I'll just annotate this. I'm going ahead and making Dill's suggestion to change "black people" to "African Americans", as well. Everything I add or change will be in [color=red]red[/color], and I'll put comments (also in red) {in curly braces}. I'm gonna' be [i]really[/i] nitpicky, so feel free to disregard anything you don't agree with or like. [spoiler]Assignment A: Manuscript It is no secret that in the American society of today [color=red]{unnecessarily wordy, consider using "in America today" instead}[/color], [color=red][s]black people[/s] African Americans[/color] are underprivileged. It doesn’t matter if you’re glancing through IQ-tests, economical listings or even [color=red][s]amount[/s] the number[/color] of children [color=red][s]given birth to[/s][/color] per family: [color=red][s]Black people[/s] African Americans[/color] are just the bottom of the bunch. Some people[color=red],[/color] like James Watson[color=red],[/color] come up with outrageous and quite frankly [color=red]{"quite frankly" isn't necessary, consider removing}[/color] racist comments, such as the difference in IQ-tests [color=red][s]are[/s] being[/color] rooted in [color=red][s]genes[/s] genetics[/color] rather than environment and living conditions. I consider claims like that to be uneducated and obsolete, even if [color=red][s]said[/s] made {claims are made, rather than said}[/color] by a College [color=red]{college isn't generally capitalized in English}[/color] graduate with a Nobel Prize. I [color=red][s]myself[/s] {unnecessary}[/color] believe [color=red][s]the problem exists[/s] these problems exist {I [i]think[/i] the disparity you're talking about is multiple problems; feel free to disregard this one}[/color] due to the social behavior and everlasting social circle [color=red]{I'm not sure what an "everlasting social circle" refers to; you might want to explain it or choose a different phrase}[/color] there is in the society of today. If [color=red][s]black people[/s] African Americans[/color] from low-class families are only socializing with each other rather than getting to know the whole spectrum, [color=red][s]they’ll[/s] they will {contractions are generally avoided in more formal English; if this is supposed to be an informal speech, ignore this and maybe use more contractions}[/color] never break their social inheritance. If low-class blacks only socialize with other low-class blacks [color=red]{I think the use of "blacks" here is okay, if the speaker is also black; otherwise replace with "African Americans" as well}[/color], then being smart in school will become uncool. They’ll [color=red]{see earlier note about contractions}[/color] lose all incentive to learn [color=red][s]since[/s] ; {you need punctuation here; I think it flows better if the statements are more separate, but you could also use a comma after "learn" and it'd be okay}[/color] if they learn and become smart they’ll [color=red]{see earlier note about contractions}[/color] be punished by abolishment [color=red]{I don't think this is the right word; perhaps "social exile"?}[/color], rather than admired for their hard work which would set a foundation for [color=red]the[/color] future glory [color=red][s]for[/s] of[/color] the whole [color=red][s]ethnic[/s] {African Americans aren't, strictly, all the same ethnicity; a black speaker is significantly more likely to make this distinction}[/color] group. Without an incentive to study and work hard for accomplishments in school[color=red], [s]black people[/s] African Americans[/color] are doomed to never [color=red][s]ever[/s][/color] break their boundaries in society and never become equal to the white man. Another problem I see in the society of today is to glorify [color=red][s]black people[/s] African Americans[/color] as to give [color=red][s]them[/s] us {for consistency with the rest of the paragraph}[/color] a fighting chance – ultimately treating us like handicapped individuals who need a ramp rather than a stairway because [color=red][s]they[/s] we[/color] can’t [color=red]{see earlier note about contractions}[/color] walk up the stairway of studying. We can walk up a stairway, we just need to lift ourselves [color=red][s]from[/s] off of {or "up from"}[/color] the ground before we can achieve anything [color=red][s]even remotely[/s] {this area is kinda' awkward, you might want to make this two sentences}[/color] as massive as a stairway[color=red],[/color] and that can only be done through the help of society. We need to show these 5 year old black boys and girls that [color=red][s]black[/s][/color] successful [color=red]black[/color] individuals do exist, that studying will amount to success and most of all that you shouldn’t [color=red]{see earlier note about contractions}[/color] abolish [color=red]{again, I think you should use another word instead of "abolish" here}[/color] studying kids from your social groups[color=red][s],[/s] . R[/color]ather [color=red]{this seems like the end of one thought and the start of another}[/color] than help these people with easier scholarships and reduce their required points for entry into a university, society as a whole would benefit much more from having actually educated people who have had the incentive to study all along, [color=red][s]not to mention[/s] as well as {more formal phrasing, feel free to ignore}[/color] the economic pluses from lowered crime rate and increased financial growth. Crime rate brings me to another very important point in this presentation. In America[color=red],[/color] 40% of all inmates are black[color=red][s],[/s] . S[/color]ome of you might think[color=red], "W[/color]ell[color=red],[/color] at least it’s under half[color=red],[/color] so that’s no biggie.[color=red]"[/color] Well[color=red],[/color] that is a biggie[color=red]. S[/color]ince only 12% of the American population is black, this means that blacks have 3 1/3 times more jail time than their part of the population would justify [color=red]{I think you want to say "blacks are 3 1/3 times more likely to go to jail"; you haven't mentioned conviction times}[/color]. The root of this problem is [color=red][s]like[/s] the same as[/color] the root of every other problem with blacks in The United States of America; the social heritage just has way too tough of a grip on the kids. You know that when people grow up and assume they’ll be dead or in jail by the time they’re thirty and what brought them into that situation was their color, something has to be changed. Especially if we assume that these babies[color=red][s], at their birth[/s] {this phrase isn't necessary}[/color] were born with the same chances [color=red][s]as well as the same[/s] and[/color] intellectual level as their white counterparts. Another issue I would like to address is how blacks look at their position in the American society. If we look on how blacks perceive their standing in society, one can tell that for every day that passes, blacks as well as whites feel that the increase [color=red]{I'm not sure what you mean by the "increase"; do you mean the rate of increase?}[/color] of the social standing of blacks in the society is diminishing. We can from this conclude one of two things[color=red], either[/color]: 1: Blacks are now totally equal to whites and there is nothing to be done to increase equality. 2: The state as it is, is running out of methods to help these people. [color=red]{this phrasing is awkward, with the double "is"; consider something more like "We are running out of ways to help African Americans."}[/color] Assuming [color=red]that[/color] option nr. 1 [color=red]{in America we usually use "no." to abbreviate number; you could also just say "the first option" which is equally correct and avoids having to worry about people recognizing the abbreviation}[/color] is the right one would be naïve at best. [color=red][s]We can[/s] F[/color]rom all kinds of charts[color=red], we can[/color] tell that there is a considerable difference in living standards [color=red][s]as well as[/s] and[/color] income [color=red]between blacks and whites,[/color] among other things. Until the living conditions for black[color=red]s [s]people[/s][/color] and white[color=red]s [s]people[/s][/color] are of somewhat equal standing, I consider the task undone. Let us get real and move on to option 2; The [color=red][s]state[/s] government {to avoid confusion between "state" as in nation and "state" as in the US's 50 states}[/color] as it is has a hard time giving blacks a better future, [color=red]and[/color] the social offices simply don’t know what to do to help these people. I feel like we should try to put down some serious [color=red][s]taskforces[/s] task forces {or "task-forces"; either way, this is generally two words}[/color] to get some serious reforms which can help [color=red][s]the[/s][/color] black kids right from the second they’re [color=red][s]extracted from the womb of their mothers[/s] born {the medical-ish terminology is really out of place}[/color].[/spoiler] I added linebreaks so I could see what I was doin' easier. I got tired of marking contractions part way through. I think, Polse, you'd be best served by getting rid of nearly all of them, but it's really your call. I'm also a big fan of the serial comma (where you say "one, two, and three" instead of "one, two and three"), so I highly suggest using it. I didn't mark these, though, because technically either way is right in Amuricah. Finally, I want to mention that the bit where you quote your theoretical audience and then mirror what the audience said is really, really good. Do not change that part. (Except for punctuation and such.)[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Hey guys, thanks for the discussion about bacteria. I think that's a great lesson to add in - students can research the most viable method of "converting" the atmosphere in a bio-dome; would cynobacteria be a feasible choice? If not, why? Polse, pretty much everything Baka said is right. I'd just like to make a few general sweeping statements about it, and I'd also love to see your speech when you've edited to reflect Baka's annotations. 1) What sort of language are you supposed to be using here? If it is an informal speech, given to a lecture hall of students, say, then colloquial words are fine. However, if this is a speech to congress or something similar, perhaps even addressing a news reporter, the language should be a tad more formal and scientific. 2) Even though this is a script, you need to have your references in there. Where did you get this information? Are you just generalising? Are you making it up? 3) You probably didn't intend for this to be racist-sounding, but it really, really, really is. Instead of approaching this as a "reform", instead of thinking via the deficit model, think of it through an ideology of hope. ALL of your wording is negative. It's extremely condescending. Listen to this: "It's not their fault that white kids are fat. They grow up in a society where fast food is readily available and their mom's and dad's are out working in high-paid jobs so have no time for family, let alone cooking a nutritious meal. But we can teach white kids to eat right. We can help them. If given a helping hand, they will climb the stairway of success! We only need to show them skinny white adults. If given proper role models (((((indicating they don't have proper role models at home))))), white kids can be JUST as athletic as black kids. It is scientifically proven that black kids can run faster, jump higher and go harder. All we need to do is make white kids more like black kids." Do you see how racist and condescending that paragraph is? It's pretty much snippets of your speech, but rewritten to "favour" black people. You need to try and avoid negative language. So for example, this is the above paragraph written to be "neutral"/positive: "There is a rising increase of obese Caucasian American children (REFERENCE). A plethora of factors have contributed to this epidemic: lack of nutritional education in school, availability of high-calorie, high-fat, low-cost fast food franchises, and the diminishing importance of exercise to children due to technological advances in social media, games and television. Awareness of this epidemic is necessary to halt the increase of obese children in America." Here I've set the scene, told you exactly what the speech will be about: white obese kids. I've then told you the three points I'll be covering during the speech. And lastly, I mentioned what I'll be talking about in the conclusion: awareness. I hope this has helped :)[/quote]