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[quote=Rudmed][quote=Kesu] Guide For (champion): Vladimir Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: First guide, I would like some constructive criticism What I'd like you to focus on: The clarity in my language, and whether or not it's both noob and pro friendly. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/vladimir-the-universal-recipient-109137 [/quote] 1. First of all centering item/ summoner spells will help clairty. You can also use columns in order to help clean up your pictures. Also use it for your skills as well. 2. Thank you Thank you Thank you for not being like RUSH WARMOGS! 3. Maybe use seprators to help keep your information seperated. 4. Maybe increase the size of the champion portraits when you list those you have trouble with. I'm not a master of aesthetics, but thats why you came here for jhoi.[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed]I didn't do much, but I'll try to help the load. Edit: Gonna try and jump on some of the other stuff, so maybe I'll get to it before you do.[/quote]

[quote=Kesu][quote=Rudmed] [quote=Kesu] Guide For (champion): Vladimir Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: First guide, I would like some constructive criticism What I'd like you to focus on: The clarity in my language, and whether or not it's both noob and pro friendly. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/vladimir-the-universal-recipient-109137 [/quote] 1. First of all centering item/ summoner spells will help clairty. You can also use columns in order to help clean up your pictures. Also use it for your skills as well. 2. Thank you Thank you Thank you for not being like RUSH WARMOGS! 3. Maybe use seprators to help keep your information seperated. 4. Maybe increase the size of the champion portraits when you list those you have trouble with. I'm not a master of aesthetics, but thats why you came here for jhoi. [/quote] 1. Is there a shortcut to centering items? In word it's CTRL + E. Or do I have to type in [center][/center] for everything? (is that even the right code? 2. People who rush warmogs should not play Vladimir. ;) 3. How do I add seperators? 4. I'll get onto that, as soon as I finish up my mastery section, and the prior 3 points. Also, how do you change font size? Wait, you don't have to answer that, I think I'll be able to find it. There also seems to be a gap after the usage of a header, is there anyway to get rid of that gap?[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]------- [center][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506][h1][color=#ff0000]>>> BEFORE YOU REQUEST A REVIEW, PLEASE READ THIS. CLICK ME! <<<[/color][/h1][/url][/center] ---------- [center][b][color=#0080ff]!!! University > Reviewing !!![/color][/b][/center] ------------------- [center][b][color=red]>>> I will review [b][u]3[/u][/b] Guides Per Day <<<[/color][/b][/center] ------------------- [color=#ff0000][b]ATTENTION:[/b][/color] Due to a huge influx of requests, I have now implemented some requirements. This is so I don't end up reviewing a guide who's author doesn't care, or reviewing a guide that is really bad, or reviewing a guide that has not clicked on the link above. If you want me to spend over half an hour reading your guide and writing a reply, you can very well return the favour! [indent][color=#008000][b]REQUIREMENTS:[/b][/color] [color=#008000]- [/color]Author must have +100 Posts [color=#008000]- [/color]Guide must have been run through a spell and grammar check [color=#008000]- [/color]Author must be over Summoner Level 25 [color=#008000]- [/color]Author must comment on my [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/ashes-to-ashes-67331]Ashe guide[/url] with their opinion.[/indent] If you are LUCKY, your guide will be reviewed by other members, such as: [color=#00ff00]Searz[/color], da_Neo, Rudmed, Bloofyre, Bryun, and Nighthawk. They drop in from time to time to help with my workload. <3 In this thread I am aiming to draw publicity to new guides that deserve it, and help those that need it. In this thread I am asking you to show me your best, and in doing so, be rewarded with a Recommendation if your guide and your progress impresses me. [indent][b][color=orange]* I will be completely honest in my opinion[/color] [color=yellow]* I will not downvote or upvote until I have received a response from my review, and I see you have dropped your opinion of my [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/ashes-to-ashes-67331]Ashe guide[/url] in the comment section[/color] [color=orange]* I will review your request as soon as physically and mentally possible[/color][/b] [b][color=yellow]* At the completion of my Review, I will post my verdict of your guide here, along with my review (verdicts are featured in the below post)[/color][/b][/indent] You[color=#ff0000] must[/color] use this format below for submitting a guide for review, otherwise I'll [color=#ff0000]ignore[/color] your request. People who just drop their links here will be [color=#ff0000]completely ignored[/color]. [indent][color=#0080ff][b]Summoner Level: Post Count (at time of request): Spell & Grammar check completed: YES/NO Guide For (champion): Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: What I'd like you to focus on: Guide Link: [/b][/color][/indent] What do I expect in return? Read/vote on my [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/ashes-to-ashes-67331][b][color=#0080ff]>> Complete & Comprehensive Compiled Catalogue of Ashe Knowledge <<[/color][/b][/url], [color=#ff0080]+rep[/color] me, and a simple [color=#ff0000]thank you[/color] would be lovely ^^ [indent][color=#ff8000][b]OTHER RULES/NOTES:[/b][/color] [color=#ff8000]-[/color] Please only submit [color=#008000]one guide per request[/color]. [color=#ff8000]- [/color]Please do not request a review on a champion who has not been released. I would also prefer to read only guides published on MobaFire. [color=#ff8000]-[/color] If you are [color=#ff0000]rude[/color] to me in your response to my review, I will consider [color=#ff0000]not featuring you[/color] in the below post. [color=#ff8000]-[/color] If I read your guide. And you have not read the links I have supplied in this post. I will literally asplode. And you will be charged with my death. [/indent] ----------------------------- [center][color=#ff0000][b]Common Things I Repeat In Most Of My Reviews[/b][/color][/center] ------------------------------------------ [indent][list] [*] ONE BUILD. Show me one build, the one you use 90% of the time, in your cheat sheet. NO NEED, EVER, to display more than one cheat sheet. All alternative items can be explained in your Situational/Alternative Items section. [*] Good Hands IS FUCKING BETTER THAN PERSEVERANCE. Jesus Christ. [*] Colour is good. Too much colour is bad. Find the correct balance. [*] Paragraphical space. Walls of text = bad. Sparse text = bad. Find the correct balance. [/list][/indent] -------------- [center]Nighthawk has opened his own [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/forum/build-and-guide-discussion/reviews-rus-will-read-your-guide-6949]Review Thread Here[/url]. Go ahead and check it out ^^[/center] ------------------------------------------[/quote]

[quote=Bellator]Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 125 Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For (champion): [[Mordekaiser]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I am interested in getting a possible veteran recommendation, and the publicity that comes with that to help get my guide out there. What I'd like you to focus on: I don't want to waste too much of your time on my guide, look through it, there's nothing specific I want you to focus on. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/stranger-dangers-master-of-metal-100056 [i][h3](I know I've asked you to review this before, but I'm submitting another request under the new format for you. :D)[h3][/i][/quote]

[quote=Rudmed]Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 59 Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes Guide For (champion): [[Twisted Fate]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Final check, on organziation, and neatness. What I'd like you to focus on: Anything Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/twisted-fate-royal-flush-revamped-54744]Lady Luck[/url][/quote]

[quote=shamwoww]Summoner Level:30 Post Count(at time of request):490 Spell and Grammar Check:Yes Guide For:Wukong Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:Because this is my first guide and i have no comments or votes:( What I'd like you to focus on: Pretty much everything. Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-see-my-huge-stick-106428[/quote]

[quote=kin333x]Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 23 Spell & Grammar check completed: NO (I don't have word or anything else, But i checked over it multiple times.) Guide For (champion): Wukong Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to get better... and i just want to know what my mistakes are What I'd like you to focus on: I personally think the build is good... but i want to know if i did a good job on writing (I'm not that good writing over long periods.) the guide. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-the-tanky-dps-106043 By the way, This build is just a summer project to help prepare me for school[/quote]

[quote=Searz][quote=Bellator] Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 125 Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For (champion): [[Mordekaiser]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I am interested in getting a possible veteran recommendation, and the publicity that comes with that to help get my guide out there. What I'd like you to focus on: I don't want to waste too much of your time on my guide, look through it, there's nothing specific I want you to focus on. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/stranger-dangers-master-of-metal-100056[/quote] It's bad. Go look at the featured guides at solo mid, play more Morde, remake your guide, then come back. It's up to Jhoi whether she wants to review it or not though.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/stranger-dangers-master-of-metal-100056?page=5#lastcomment]Bellator's Mordekaiser Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdit:[/color] A decent Mordekaiser guide that revolves too much around the snowballing item, Mejai's Soulstealer (which suggests average elo gameplay?). [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] Reorganisation of chapters, merging of some chapters for coherency, possible reconsideration of mastery tree set up. The guide is well written, and I was impressed at the beginning of the guide. The visual aesthetics of the guide falls flat in the items section, which looks lopsided. Some images to break up the text would do nicely. With regards to a possible recommendation, please take a look at the 6+ recommended Mordekaiser guide ^^ While I recommend guides that deserve it, I try to make sure that there are no other similar/detailed guides already rec'd. Constructive Criticism: 1) Mejai's? :/ No high-elo players buy this item. [url=http://www.lolstatistics.com/champions/na/3/08-09-2011]LoL Statistics[/url] - look for Mordekaiser. 2) Is 15 in Utility really necessary? ?/?/8 is enough to grab [[good hands]] and [[awareness]], leaving you with 7 points to put in defense. 3) Clean up your screenshots :) 4) Add some colour to your guide to make it more visually pleasing. 5) I'd move your Warmog's Armor section to the end of your guide, as it's not really doing anything where it is :) I'd also consider looking around and reading why people don't buy Mejai's. 6) Why would you have two separate sections that talk about the same thing? "Build #1 and Build #2" and "Core Items Builds" - merge these sections. 7) ... *SIGH* From my Guide about Making a Guide (which is a requirement to read when you request a review): [quote=jhoijhoi]It is very easy to structure your guide in a way that will maximise the potential of the information you are trying to convey. The structure that works best is one that starts the guide with all the aspects that can be selected before the game, and then the aspects that occur in the game. This is the structure I use: [indent]Introduction Pros / Cons Masteries Runes Viable Summoner Spells + Less Viable Summoner Spells Ability Explanation + Ability Sequence Core Items Items - Damage Items - Survivability Gameplay Summary Frequently Asked Questions Change Log[/indent] This structure allows for continuity and ease of reading[/quote] 8) Don't list useless summoner spells. 9) Don't colour entire paragraphs of text: [quote=jhoijhoi]Colour is good. Too much colour is bad. Find the correct balance.[/quote] 10) "Defense 0 Points Drop all points in Resistance and Hardiness" - Error here? ^^ Also, embed the [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506#chapter7]new BBCode for masteries, runes, items[/url]. As detailed in my Guide about Making a Guide. 11) When using separator lines: [enter] [enter] --- --- --- [enter] [enter] 12) Reverse your changelog. Have your recent additions at the top. 13) When making links, try using the url coding. And thanks for the shout-out ^^[/quote]