I think you skipped mine jhoijhoi, I was on page 68. Anyway, here it is:
Hey jhoi it's me again. I just finished my first draft of a Nocturne guide and was hoping you could give it a look before I publish.
Summoner Level: 30
Post count: 242 (at time of this edit)
Spelling and Grammar check completed: Yes, but let me know if you notice anything I missed.
Guide for:
Nocturne
Why I'd like this guide to be reviewed: I really appreciated the thoroughness of your review of my Alistar guide and I want your opinion before I publish, if possible.
What I'd like you to focus on: Your usual wealth of advice and criticism. Also a basic proofread as this one's a little more fresh than the last (Proofread as in, comprehension. You don't have to spellcheck for me). You don't have to watch the videos if you don't want (I have quite a few).
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/haunting-the-jungle-nightmare-style-109358
P.S. (In case you ask) I included a lot of videos because:
1. Stonewall and TheOddOne have more credibility than me.
2. They explain their concepts as well as I could.
3. It's easier to learn jungling by watching it, rather than reading a lot of text.
I look forward to hearing from you.
PsiGuard wrote:
Hey jhoi it's me again. I just finished my first draft of a Nocturne guide and was hoping you could give it a look before I publish.
Summoner Level: 30
Post count: 242 (at time of this edit)
Spelling and Grammar check completed: Yes, but let me know if you notice anything I missed.
Guide for:
NocturneWhy I'd like this guide to be reviewed: I really appreciated the thoroughness of your review of my Alistar guide and I want your opinion before I publish, if possible.
What I'd like you to focus on: Your usual wealth of advice and criticism. Also a basic proofread as this one's a little more fresh than the last (Proofread as in, comprehension. You don't have to spellcheck for me). You don't have to watch the videos if you don't want (I have quite a few).
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/haunting-the-jungle-nightmare-style-109358
P.S. (In case you ask) I included a lot of videos because:
1. Stonewall and TheOddOne have more credibility than me.
2. They explain their concepts as well as I could.
3. It's easier to learn jungling by watching it, rather than reading a lot of text.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Thanks to Nyoike for the sig!
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Searz wrote:
Summoner Level: HURR
Post Count: 4000-5000 or so.
Spell & Grammar check completed: I don't misspell. >:3
Guide For (champion): None.
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I basically want to hear your opinion on the guide and what I could improve. because I'm currently (almost) lost on what I could change.
What I'd like you to focus on: That^.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/rune-tips-what-secondary-and-primary-means-and-more-24255
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kin333x wrote:
Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 23
Spell & Grammar check completed: NO (I don't have word or anything else, But i checked over it multiple times.)
Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to get better... and i just want to know what my mistakes are
What I'd like you to focus on: I personally think the build is good... but i want to know if i did a good job on writing (I'm not that good writing over long periods.) the guide.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-the-tanky-dps-106043
No spell/grammar check. I will update my Guide about Writing a Guide with a section on how to install automatic text-box spell check, and once you've run it through that, PM me, or re-request, and I'll get right to it! (don't be angry/sad, I have rules for a reason, and if I let people I know slip through, it wouldn't be fair to everyone else)
D: I'm so sorry, Guard! I don't know how I missed it D: D: D: Gosh, I hope I haven't missed any more requests =.= EDIT: Wait. What? Oh. You edited it with the new format, but I didn't see the edit. Sorry ^^
PsiGuard's Jungle Nocturne Guide
Verdict: A very detailed and well-written Jungle Nocturne guide. It is aesthetically pleasing and only occasionally deviates towards walls of text.
Possible Improvements: There isn't much to improve with this guide, besides the addition of colour and the possible reformatting of the Viable Items section. Jungle Route maps would be beneficial for the casual reader. A summary/tl;dr section at the beginning of the guide could be beneficial. Additionally, the chapters feel a tad out of order, if nothing else, move Abilities, Skill Sequence and Tips and Tricks together somewhere in the guide so one doesn't have to scroll up or down the guide to remember what was previously written about the skills.
Constructive Criticism:
1) I really liked the idea of Quints of Strength. Used them on Vayne for quite a while. Until someone mentioned to me, "That 7 extra damage is pretty useless by level 4, when you'd be benefiting more from 25+ flat armour penetration." I can see why it'd be useful in the jungle, but jungle creeps have armour too. And of course Shroud of Darkness gives you attack speed, so AtkSp Quints may not appeal.
2) What about chucking in the catalyst of the protector before Atma's Impaler? It'd give you more damage, in a round-about way. Also... Atmogs.
3) You can use the new embedding system. [masteries]
4) I think the order of your guide is a bit all over the place. You have Skill Explanation up the top, then Skill Sequence way down about 1/4th through your guide.
5) With regards to your Other Viable Items Section, I'd suggest placing the icons in one column, and the text in the other. So it'd like up neatly without a whole lot of black space.
6) I realise there are two videos, but add in a jungle route image for quick reference.
7) Your Tips and Tricks section *could* be broken up into the individual skill explanations. Or, you could move it up under there, at least. I also wouldn't have the skill abilities that far up the chapter order, either.
Verdict: A very detailed and well-written Jungle Nocturne guide. It is aesthetically pleasing and only occasionally deviates towards walls of text.
Possible Improvements: There isn't much to improve with this guide, besides the addition of colour and the possible reformatting of the Viable Items section. Jungle Route maps would be beneficial for the casual reader. A summary/tl;dr section at the beginning of the guide could be beneficial. Additionally, the chapters feel a tad out of order, if nothing else, move Abilities, Skill Sequence and Tips and Tricks together somewhere in the guide so one doesn't have to scroll up or down the guide to remember what was previously written about the skills.
Constructive Criticism:
1) I really liked the idea of Quints of Strength. Used them on Vayne for quite a while. Until someone mentioned to me, "That 7 extra damage is pretty useless by level 4, when you'd be benefiting more from 25+ flat armour penetration." I can see why it'd be useful in the jungle, but jungle creeps have armour too. And of course
Shroud of Darkness gives you attack speed, so AtkSp Quints may not appeal.2) What about chucking in the catalyst of the protector before
Atma's Impaler? It'd give you more damage, in a round-about way. Also... Atmogs.3) You can use the new embedding system. [masteries]
4) I think the order of your guide is a bit all over the place. You have Skill Explanation up the top, then Skill Sequence way down about 1/4th through your guide.
5) With regards to your Other Viable Items Section, I'd suggest placing the icons in one column, and the text in the other. So it'd like up neatly without a whole lot of black space.
6) I realise there are two videos, but add in a jungle route image for quick reference.
7) Your Tips and Tricks section *could* be broken up into the individual skill explanations. Or, you could move it up under there, at least. I also wouldn't have the skill abilities that far up the chapter order, either.
ShadowNet's Mordekaiser Guide
Verdict: A well-written and amusing Mordekaiser guide.
Possible Improvements: The author's attempt at videos is admirable, but they need to be fine-tuned. I think the lack of spell vampirism is a bad idea. I found nothing else wrong with this guide, and it was a good, enlightening read :)
Constructive Criticism:
1) Quint of Swiftness? :/
2) No need to list sight ward in your Purchase Order.
3) No spell vamp?
4) When using separators:
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[masteries]?
5) Exhaust?
6) lol lol, Love your "Champ Ghost" section. I'd definitely cut it down though, no need to list all the champions, just the top ten, perhaps, of each column (Ashe > Eve - not sure if it's in order).
7) The "I eat pain" image may be a tad too much... You don't want this to be too gory.
8) Your videos aren't done that well... I'd consider redoing them, having camera lock on Morde at all times, so the screen doesn't slip to where your mouse is. But kudos for the videos!
9) Your tips and tricks section could be put under your skill explanation section, like in my Ashe guide.
Verdict: A well-written and amusing Mordekaiser guide.
Possible Improvements: The author's attempt at videos is admirable, but they need to be fine-tuned. I think the lack of spell vampirism is a bad idea. I found nothing else wrong with this guide, and it was a good, enlightening read :)
Constructive Criticism:
1) Quint of Swiftness? :/
2) No need to list sight ward in your Purchase Order.
3) No spell vamp?
4) When using separators:
[enter]
[enter]
--- ---
[enter]
[enter]
[masteries]?
5)
Exhaust?6) lol lol, Love your "Champ Ghost" section. I'd definitely cut it down though, no need to list all the champions, just the top ten, perhaps, of each column (Ashe > Eve - not sure if it's in order).
7) The "I eat pain" image may be a tad too much... You don't want this to be too gory.
8) Your videos aren't done that well... I'd consider redoing them, having camera lock on Morde at all times, so the screen doesn't slip to where your mouse is. But kudos for the videos!
9) Your tips and tricks section could be put under your skill explanation section, like in my Ashe guide.
Searz wrote:
Are the featured ones that bad?
I'm pretty sure they're good except for the fact that Dyrus uses HP5/lvl seals.
They WERE Good... Now they should be archived and/or redone.
My guide is constantly being fine tuned... Doesn't just happen overnight. Don't be mean. </3
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ShadowNet's Mordekaiser Guide
Verdict: A well-written and amusing Mordekaiser guide.
Possible Improvements: The author's attempt at videos is admirable, but they need to be fine-tuned. I think the lack of spell vampirism is a bad idea. I found nothing else wrong with this guide, and it was a good, enlightening read :)
Constructive Criticism:
1) Quint of Swiftness? :/
2) No need to list sight ward in your Purchase Order.
3) No spell vamp?
4) When using separators:
[enter]
[enter]
--- ---
[enter]
[enter]
[masteries]?
5)
Exhaust?6) lol lol, Love your "Champ Ghost" section. I'd definitely cut it down though, no need to list all the champions, just the top ten, perhaps, of each column (Ashe > Eve - not sure if it's in order).
7) The "I eat pain" image may be a tad too much... You don't want this to be too gory.
8) Your videos aren't done that well... I'd consider redoing them, having camera lock on Morde at all times, so the screen doesn't slip to where your mouse is. But kudos for the videos!
9) Your tips and tricks section could be put under your skill explanation section, like in my Ashe guide.
1) You're faster than your opponents, you'll have easier time harassing them and if they try to strike back, you can back off quickly, making them give up. I find them very viable, they help you throughout the whole game.
2) Yeah, should add another chapter about wards. Felt like adding one in the build, to remind people that wards exist.
3) It will take too much room to Quote it, http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/carry-me-morde-108278?page=5 Check out Dufftime's post (third from top). I'll eventually make "The path of the Sparkling Spell Vampire".
4) I'm using --- ,colored in black :)
And what about masteries? Should I add pictures of the Mastery tree?
5)
Ignite out weights Exhaust, because it synergises with Children of the Grave. It adds another DoT and without Ignite your ultimate can be countered easily. (support champs, pots) Ghost is important for initiating battles, escaping ganks, going back to your lane, chasing etc. Removing your mobility spell will cripple you.6) I'll see to it. It's not in order, I added them randomly. :d
7) I'm thinking about removing the sword from his arm, not sure about chest wounds and arrows. They aren't that noticeable.
8) I've made the mistake to have Num+ as "Start recording" button, LoLreplay uses the same button to skip forward -.- . Also should I record them at normal speed (each video can be 6-10 mins or more, not sure that people will stick that long to watch them) or combine normal,3x,4x like now?
9) I felt like adding them at the end, as a reward for reading the guide. :) I'll move them up.
Thanks for the criticism!
+Rep to seal the deal :P
Type in [masteries] into your guide, and you'll see what I mean. I meant, why no mention of Exhaust as a viable summoner spell? With regards to your videos, they aren't that bad, but they are a bit disjointed. I'd keep them at the same speed throughout, so if you choose 2x, 3x or 4x, keep it at that speed, don't change speeds halfway, unless something awesome happens, and even then, it's hard to control with LoLReplay.
Still don't agree with Movement Speed Quints - compared to Quints of Fortitude they aren't that great. Also I saw that many other people thought that your guide needed some spell vamp. Just chuck an early Hextech Revolver into the purchase order, and don't show it upgraded - let the reader pick which item they want.
haha, no worries! It was a good guide to read :)
Exhaust as a viable summoner spell? With regards to your videos, they aren't that bad, but they are a bit disjointed. I'd keep them at the same speed throughout, so if you choose 2x, 3x or 4x, keep it at that speed, don't change speeds halfway, unless something awesome happens, and even then, it's hard to control with LoLReplay.Still don't agree with Movement Speed Quints - compared to Quints of Fortitude they aren't that great. Also I saw that many other people thought that your guide needed some spell vamp. Just chuck an early
Hextech Revolver into the purchase order, and don't show it upgraded - let the reader pick which item they want.haha, no worries! It was a good guide to read :)
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Are the featured ones that bad?
I'm pretty sure they're good except for the fact that Dyrus uses HP5/lvl seals.
Well, his hp5/level DOES make me cry ;(
But it's mainly that all the guides there are the approved ones from like... 6+ months ago.
Dyrus made one like a few weeks ago or something and it's pretty good, cheap and effective, but other than that they are all pretty much ancient.
There is a week old one that takes Teleport/Ghost :s
I got a kick out of that one.