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Kesu wrote:

Guide For (champion): Vladimir
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: First guide, I would like some constructive criticism
What I'd like you to focus on: The clarity in my language, and whether or not it's both noob and pro friendly.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/vladimir-the-universal-recipient-109137


1. First of all centering item/ summoner spells will help clairty. You can also use columns in order to help clean up your pictures. Also use it for your skills as well.

2. Thank you Thank you Thank you for not being like RUSH WARMOGS!

3. Maybe use seprators to help keep your information seperated.

4. Maybe increase the size of the champion portraits when you list those you have trouble with. I'm not a master of aesthetics, but thats why you came here for jhoi.
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I didn't do much, but I'll try to help the load.

Edit: Gonna try and jump on some of the other stuff, so maybe I'll get to it before you do.
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Rudmed wrote:



1. First of all centering item/ summoner spells will help clairty. You can also use columns in order to help clean up your pictures. Also use it for your skills as well.

2. Thank you Thank you Thank you for not being like RUSH WARMOGS!

3. Maybe use seprators to help keep your information seperated.

4. Maybe increase the size of the champion portraits when you list those you have trouble with. I'm not a master of aesthetics, but thats why you came here for jhoi.


1. Is there a shortcut to centering items? In word it's CTRL + E. Or do I have to type in
for everything? (is that even the right code?

2. People who rush warmogs should not play Vladimir. ;)

3. How do I add seperators?

4. I'll get onto that, as soon as I finish up my mastery section, and the prior 3 points.

Also, how do you change font size? Wait, you don't have to answer that, I think I'll be able to find it.

There also seems to be a gap after the usage of a header, is there anyway to get rid of that gap?
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>>> I will review 3 Guides Per Day <<<




ATTENTION: Due to a huge influx of requests, I have now implemented some requirements. This is so I don't end up reviewing a guide who's author doesn't care, or reviewing a guide that is really bad, or reviewing a guide that has not clicked on the link above. If you want me to spend over half an hour reading your guide and writing a reply, you can very well return the favour!

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- Author must comment on my Ashe guide with their opinion.


If you are LUCKY, your guide will be reviewed by other members, such as: Searz, da_Neo, Rudmed, Bloofyre, Bryun, and Nighthawk. They drop in from time to time to help with my workload. <3

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Nighthawk has opened his own Review Thread Here. Go ahead and check it out ^^


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Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 125
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Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I am interested in getting a possible veteran recommendation, and the publicity that comes with that to help get my guide out there.
What I'd like you to focus on: I don't want to waste too much of your time on my guide, look through it, there's nothing specific I want you to focus on.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/stranger-dangers-master-of-metal-100056

(I know I've asked you to review this before, but I'm submitting another request under the new format for you. :D)

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Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 59
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For (champion): Twisted Fate
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Final check, on organziation, and neatness.
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything
Guide Link: Lady Luck
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Summoner Level:30
Post Count(at time of request):490
Spell and Grammar Check:Yes
Guide For:Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:Because this is my first guide and i have no comments or votes:(
What I'd like you to focus on: Pretty much everything.
Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-see-my-huge-stick-106428
BTW thanks Wrath for the sig Pro Wukong Guide :D
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Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 23
Spell & Grammar check completed: NO (I don't have word or anything else, But i checked over it multiple times.)
Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to get better... and i just want to know what my mistakes are
What I'd like you to focus on: I personally think the build is good... but i want to know if i did a good job on writing (I'm not that good writing over long periods.) the guide.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-the-tanky-dps-106043



By the way, This build is just a summer project to help prepare me for school
Thanks to jhoijhoi MoonEdge For the sigs!
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Bellator wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 125
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I am interested in getting a possible veteran recommendation, and the publicity that comes with that to help get my guide out there.
What I'd like you to focus on: I don't want to waste too much of your time on my guide, look through it, there's nothing specific I want you to focus on.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/stranger-dangers-master-of-metal-100056

It's bad. Go look at the featured guides at solo mid, play more Morde, remake your guide, then come back.
It's up to Jhoi whether she wants to review it or not though.
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Bellator's Mordekaiser Guide
Verdit: A decent Mordekaiser guide that revolves too much around the snowballing item, Mejai's Soulstealer (which suggests average elo gameplay?).
Possible Improvements: Reorganisation of chapters, merging of some chapters for coherency, possible reconsideration of mastery tree set up. The guide is well written, and I was impressed at the beginning of the guide. The visual aesthetics of the guide falls flat in the items section, which looks lopsided. Some images to break up the text would do nicely. With regards to a possible recommendation, please take a look at the 6+ recommended Mordekaiser guide ^^ While I recommend guides that deserve it, I try to make sure that there are no other similar/detailed guides already rec'd.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Mejai's? :/ No high-elo players buy this item. LoL Statistics - look for Mordekaiser.

2) Is 15 in Utility really necessary? ?/?/8 is enough to grab Good Hands and Awareness , leaving you with 7 points to put in defense.

3) Clean up your screenshots :)

4) Add some colour to your guide to make it more visually pleasing.

5) I'd move your Warmog's Armor section to the end of your guide, as it's not really doing anything where it is :) I'd also consider looking around and reading why people don't buy Mejai's.

6) Why would you have two separate sections that talk about the same thing? "Build #1 and Build #2" and "Core Items Builds" - merge these sections.

7) ... *SIGH* From my Guide about Making a Guide (which is a requirement to read when you request a review):
jhoijhoi wrote:
It is very easy to structure your guide in a way that will maximise the potential of the information you are trying to convey.

The structure that works best is one that starts the guide with all the aspects that can be selected before the game, and then the aspects that occur in the game.

This is the structure I use:

Introduction
Pros / Cons
Masteries
Runes
Viable Summoner Spells + Less Viable Summoner Spells
Ability Explanation + Ability Sequence
Core Items
Items - Damage
Items - Survivability
Gameplay
Summary
Frequently Asked Questions
Change Log


This structure allows for continuity and ease of reading

8) Don't list useless summoner spells.

9) Don't colour entire paragraphs of text:
jhoijhoi wrote:
Colour is good. Too much colour is bad. Find the correct balance.

10) "Defense 0 Points Drop all points in Resistance and Hardiness" - Error here? ^^ Also, embed the new BBCode for masteries, runes, items. As detailed in my Guide about Making a Guide.

11) When using separator lines:

[enter]
[enter]
--- --- ---
[enter]
[enter]

12) Reverse your changelog. Have your recent additions at the top.

13) When making links, try using the url coding. And thanks for the shout-out ^^

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