jhoijhoi's review & discussion service

[quote=Hargis2010]Guide for:[[Xin Zhao]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: opinions/criticism, to improve What I'd like you to focus on: no real focus, just the guide as a whole Guide link:http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/xin-zhao-ranked-jungler-98109[/quote]

[quote=chosmochou]Hi there! If you wouldn't mind, could you please take a look at my [[Rumble]] guide? I am trying to polish it up to make it easier to read and I could use some outside opinions as to what would help it deliver the information better. The link is http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/a-comprehensive-guide-to-rumble-the-mechanized-menace-96616 ! Thank you! ^_^[/quote]

[quote=tinolas]I'm going to go on a trip and come back next Saturday so I won't be able to respond you.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Sorry Tinolas D: I've just been busy with visiting my relatives :/ Will review your guide tonight after my 6 hour drive home ^^ @everyone else: will add you all to the list :3[/quote]

[quote=Bloofyre]Guide For (champion): [[kayle]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Get constructive criticism about what is good and what I need to work on. (an extra set of eyes) Also, you'd be my first comment on my first guide, so i'd be stoked What I'd like you to focus on: nothing in particular, just the good, bad and the ugly, all from a readers standpoint, as well as a fellow guide creator Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/early-game-kayle-wins-98140[/quote]

[quote=DeadlyTricks]Guide For: [[Evelynn]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My guide has been mostly unnoticed and I'd like some criticism and an opinion or two about it What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think may be incorrect or poorly explained Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/evelynn-a-comprohensive-guide-ad-ap-and-hybrid-75731]Linky[/url][/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]K, soooooo. I'm a bit behind, people who have requested reviews recently: I might not get to them until next week (possibly Wednesday?). On the upside, people who have been waiting for me to get home from visiting my sister for her 17th will get their guides reviewed pretty soon. I just drove 6 hours home, so I'm a bit tired, but I'll try and get lots of them done to catch up. For reference, this is what I have to go through ^^ And you can check out where you are on the list ^^ --- [quote=Devilesse] Guide For: Teemo: Durable AD/AS Teemo Made Quick and Easy. Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Constructive Criticism if it's needed? What I'd like you to focus on: Everything in the guide. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/teemo-durable-ad-as-quick-and-easy-96615 [/quote] [quote=tinolas] Guide For: Me. Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Unarchived and reworked Xin Zhao guide ^^ What I'd like you to focus on: Build, Content Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/xin-zhao-melee-dps-burst-49525 [/quote] [quote=Summoner] Guide For: Me. Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: [s]I want publicity[/s] Just to get an idea if you understand everything by just reading it or if I need to add more information in certain areas. What I'd like you to focus on: The actual content and explanations, and how I could add more information with pictures / text (i.e if I need to make the items section more detailed). [b]I will not[/b] be including videos of gameplay - it's not needed :p Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/soraka-the-babysitting-queen-96689]Is it this link? Maybe..[/url] [/quote] [quote=PsiGuard] Guide for: Me (Unless you mean which champion, in that case: Alistar) Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's my first guide and I expect to have made mistakes. I've already responded to the questions and suggestions I've received so far and would love to hear what a more prominent forum member thinks of it. What I'd like you to focus on: Any mistakes I've made. Any suggestions for viable items I may have overlooked. Any suggestions to improve formatting and readability. Any criticism or encouragement at all, really. I'd like to hear anything you have to say, and I will certainly respond to your comment as quickly as I can. Guide Link: Just click the stamp in my signature. Thanks for doing this by the way. It always amazes me to see people being nice on the internet. [/quote] [quote=Chesswinner] Here's some guide I made. =) Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Suggestions & honest criticism. ^^ What I'd like you to focus on: Total of guide ^^ Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/jax-playing-u-like-a-sax-98351]Jax guide. [/url][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sion-the-restless-zombie-98867]Sion guide.[/url] [/quote] [quote=KoH_pHresh] JHOIJHOI :D Here is my [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/akali-the-squishies-nightmare-77680]Reworked[/url] guide :D P.S +1 for taking a look at my guide and giving criticism ;) [/quote] [quote=A Red Feather] Hey jhoijhoi! I would greatly appreciate it if you reviewed my Hybrid Roaming Eve guide, I pumped a good number of hours into it :) Guide For (champion): Evelynn Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I believe I have found the perfect medium for Evelynn. Players either utilize her amazing skill set with bursty AP and lack sustain in combat or do the opposite as AD Eve. I truly believe my guide is how Eve is meant to be played, and I want other players to try it out. Just have to wait for her buff now! :D What I'd like you to focus on: My Summoner Spells (in regards to Flash), the core build itself, and my explanation on GP/5 items, to see if I have proper justification. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/something-wicked-this-way-comes-hybrid-roaming-eve-90463 [/quote] [quote=B-Wong] General guide I wants you to read it because I'm bored. Focus on whatever catches your eye. It's a general guide so don't look scrutinize having no skill order or mastery tree because it changes from champion to champion. The set of runes is a very general set of runes, that also may change from champion to champion. Having Ashe set as the guide character is due to her being the most general ranged carry ever ever. It's also extremely brief and outlines main ideas. Remember: EXTREMELY BRIEF. [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/general-ranged-carry-98865]Es Standard[/url] <3 [/quote] [quote=th3BlackAngel] Guide For: [[Nidalee]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Flaws/opinions/suggestions What I'd like you to focus on: Anything Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/olympic-gold-medalist-javelin-toss-97712 [/quote] [quote=Hargis2010] Guide for:[[Xin Zhao]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: opinions/criticism, to improve What I'd like you to focus on: no real focus, just the guide as a whole Guide link:http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/xin-zhao-ranked-jungler-98109 [/quote] [quote=chosmochou] Hi there! If you wouldn't mind, could you please take a look at my [[Rumble]] guide? I am trying to polish it up to make it easier to read and I could use some outside opinions as to what would help it deliver the information better. The link is http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/a-comprehensive-guide-to-rumble-the-mechanized-menace-96616 ! Thank you! ^_^ [/quote] [quote=Bloofyre] Guide For (champion): [[kayle]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Get constructive criticism about what is good and what I need to work on. (an extra set of eyes) Also, you'd be my first comment on my first guide, so i'd be stoked What I'd like you to focus on: nothing in particular, just the good, bad and the ugly, all from a readers standpoint, as well as a fellow guide creator Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/early-game-kayle-wins-98140 [/quote] [quote=DeadlyTricks] Guide For: [[Evelynn]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My guide has been mostly unnoticed and I'd like some criticism and an opinion or two about it What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think may be incorrect or poorly explained Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/evelynn-a-comprohensive-guide-ad-ap-and-hybrid-75731]Linky[/url] [/quote] - - - Sorry if you're out of order, opening the quote function in new tabs seems to have randomised the order o.O[/quote]

[quote=wRAthoFVuLK]holy shit. so many...[/quote]

[quote=Bloofyre]wow. what a list you got going on there. thank you very much for all the time you are donating to helping us new guide writers.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/bobs-xin-zhao-49525?page=7#lastcomment]Tinolas' Xin Zhao Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] Extremely attractive, very succint and informative guide! The aesthetics of the guide are amazing, and the guide is so short the reader never has a chance to grow bored. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] What is a positive is also a negative. While short guides are nice, I feel as if the author's guide is a tad too short. Sure, it's pretty - but does he know what he's talking about? Does he *know* Xin? I would like some more gameplay, more tips, screenshots, video gameplay - anything to show that the author can play Xin as much as he can make an attractive guide. Also, no mention of Jungle Xin (completely viable, and absolutely scary), where Xin sits in a team composition - there are a lot of "general" information packages missing. Whilst the guide is incredibly aesthetically pleasing, it doesn't convey much knowledge to the reader. Constructive Criticism: 1) That's a really interesting build. I don't think I've ever seen TriForce on Xin before. 2) I LOVE your summary image. Absolutely fantastic, and possibly the best idea I've ever seen :3 If I was proficient with Photoshop (or whatever program you used), I'd totally make my own. The only thing I find wrong with it is the text in the gameplay section. The text elsewhere is fine because there isn't much of it, but when there is a large block like that, it is hard to read. 3) With the columns, I'd suggest adding in an extra column between your main ones. So (nextcol)space. This forces the information apart from each other so that the words don't touch. 4) While I'm enjoying your short but very good guide, I really believe there should be a Skill Explanation section detailing when to use each skill and why and what it does etc. 5) Again the column thing, your columns are starting to run into each other D: 6) I love the set up of your Optional Items section. It fits perfectly! *in awe* 7) No comments at all about Jungle Xin? Xin in the jungle with Red Buff coming to gank is a thing of nightmares. 8) I'm noticing some small grammar and spelling mistakes, "When you get ganked, decide wether to fight or not. If you will able to escape, you should do it." 9) You have no summary D:[/quote]