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Creator: jhoijhoi June 29, 2011 5:44pm
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I would have no idea :3 I just ran with what I had and it works :P
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Devilesse's Teemo Guide
Verdict: A well-written Teemo guide, pretty short and to the point
Possible Improvements: Needs some coding, images and colour. Some screenshots of where to place Noxious Traps would be great for new Teemo players. Some general gameplay tips would be beneficial (like mentioning to target enemy carries in teamfights with Blinding Dart to completely shut down their DPS).

Constructive Criticism:

1) Banshee's Veil AND Guardian Angel really cut back your potential damage.

2) Your Mastery Tree set-up is really weird. You're also not utilising Awareness to get to level 6 faster than your opponents.

3) I don't think the first part of your Disclaimer is necessary ^^

4) Your "Iteming your little person" section isn't centred the way the other sections are. Also, you have no alternative item builds. You serious that you get those 6 items every single game?

5) You have some random enter spaces in your "Explaining the Item Order" section. Additionally, you may like to show in large icons the progression of items Early > Mid > Late game.

6) Not sure why you have a paragraph in italics in your "Master your Shrooms" section. It is also followed by a large section of empty space.

7) You need to add in some coding. Blinding Dart as opposed to Blinding Dart.
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I've tried VD before apparently, but you'll need codecs to mess with h264 and x264 :(
That's why I abandoned it last time.

It's a huge pain in the *** to go search h264 encoders up --.--
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Hey jhoijhoi!

I would greatly appreciate it if you reviewed my Hybrid Roaming Eve guide, I pumped a good number of hours into it :)

Guide For (champion): Evelynn

Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I believe I have found the perfect medium for Evelynn. Players either utilize her amazing skill set with bursty AP and lack sustain in combat or do the opposite as AD Eve. I truly believe my guide is how Eve is meant to be played, and I want other players to try it out. Just have to wait for her buff now! :D

What I'd like you to focus on: My Summoner Spells (in regards to Flash), the core build itself, and my explanation on GP/5 items, to see if I have proper justification.

Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/something-wicked-this-way-comes-hybrid-roaming-eve-90463
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Just a quick heads-up, Feather - Eve no longer stuns when coming out of stealth. You may need to rework your guide because of that.

I've still got like 5 requests before yours to do, so should I assume that by then you'll have fixed that up? Or would you like to withdraw your request pending changes? I can still review based upon other aspects of the guide, but the outdated content might throw me off :/
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General guide
I wants you to read it because I'm bored.
Focus on whatever catches your eye. It's a general guide so don't look scrutinize having no skill order or mastery tree because it changes from champion to champion. The set of runes is a very general set of runes, that also may change from champion to champion. Having Ashe set as the guide character is due to her being the most general ranged carry ever ever.

It's also extremely brief and outlines main ideas. Remember: EXTREMELY BRIEF.

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In my opinion it's useless to even bother with Eve guides atm. They are gonna rework her and she'll probably change drastically soonTM.
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I have to agree, forget my guide for now </3. Once they buff her I'll rework my guide and come back to you! :)

And Searz, your guide format was just awesome. +Rep.
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B-Wong wrote:
Remember: EXTREMELY BRIEF.


Well that was an understatement.....
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Guide For: Nidalee
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Flaws/opinions/suggestions
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/olympic-gold-medalist-javelin-toss-97712
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