xIPainIx's Orianna Guide
Verdict: This is actually a very well written and pleasing guide to read. The aesthetics are decent, the knowledge is sound, and the item selections are explained in a comprehensive manner.
Possible Improvements: The guide is pretty good as it is, especially the screenshots of gameplay, but I feel as if it lacks something. I'm not quite sure what. Alternative runes, mastery tree set up and more items would be beneficial. +1.
Constructive Criticism:
1) You are squishy as all hell at level one. I sincerely recommend either Quints of Fortitude, or a Doran's Ring.
2) Instead of that Lich Bane, I'd suggest some more survivability. Zhonya's or Banshee's.
3) o.O You get Spatial Accuracy when you don't get Teleport.
4) Masteries section also is explained weirdly.
5) Don't list useless summoner spells.
6) Doran's Ring only gives 2 less mana per 5. And it gives you health and AP too boot. It is a good idea to list alternative starting items.
7) Try using the float bbcode. Check out my guide about writing a guide to see it in action.
Verdict: This is actually a very well written and pleasing guide to read. The aesthetics are decent, the knowledge is sound, and the item selections are explained in a comprehensive manner.
Possible Improvements: The guide is pretty good as it is, especially the screenshots of gameplay, but I feel as if it lacks something. I'm not quite sure what. Alternative runes, mastery tree set up and more items would be beneficial. +1.
Constructive Criticism:
1) You are squishy as all hell at level one. I sincerely recommend either Quints of Fortitude, or a Doran's Ring.
2) Instead of that Lich Bane, I'd suggest some more survivability. Zhonya's or Banshee's.
3) o.O You get Spatial Accuracy when you don't get Teleport.
4) Masteries section also is explained weirdly.
5) Don't list useless summoner spells.
6) Doran's Ring only gives 2 less mana per 5. And it gives you health and AP too boot. It is a good idea to list alternative starting items.
7) Try using the float bbcode. Check out my guide about writing a guide to see it in action.
Whated#79092
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I fixed points:
3) Rempved rylai's to get atma's , increased AD dramatically and AP has been nerfed.
5) partly, i tried some grammar check programs. English is not my mother tongue and my word is chinese so no way to check my grammar. I can only check my spelling etc with my build in browser spell check. I also checked out my own build and yeah it was horrible O.o. I changed alot of phrases and i hope it should be fine now.
6)All important big icons centered
7)Added skill explanations and the way to use them
8)fixed the code , thanks
9)Got smaller icons
10)added missing stuff
13)Changed some lines , so partly.
I listened to your advice and i think i should thank you. So +rep and thank you very much for reviewing my guide on skarner.
3) Rempved rylai's to get atma's , increased AD dramatically and AP has been nerfed.
5) partly, i tried some grammar check programs. English is not my mother tongue and my word is chinese so no way to check my grammar. I can only check my spelling etc with my build in browser spell check. I also checked out my own build and yeah it was horrible O.o. I changed alot of phrases and i hope it should be fine now.
6)All important big icons centered
7)Added skill explanations and the way to use them
8)fixed the code , thanks
9)Got smaller icons
10)added missing stuff
13)Changed some lines , so partly.
I listened to your advice and i think i should thank you. So +rep and thank you very much for reviewing my guide on skarner.
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Check out my guide on Skarner, The Crystal Vanguard(press the sig)!
jhoijhoi wrote:
Xiron's Wukong Guide
1) Quints of Strength become useless at level 4 (when the 7 damage is negligible), so consider Quints of Fortitude, or Quints of Desolation which will always be useful, considering your only desolation item is Youmuu's.
3) As Wukong is a duelling champion, I feel Exhaust would be a better pick than Ignite.
6) 22/0/8? o.O :/ Try 9/0/21, or 0/9/21, or 0/15/15 or something. I just feel like you're trying to turn Wukong into a pure DPS champ when he's better as Tanky DPS.
1) AD quints are great, but in this case I'll have to say that ArP quints is way better.
Unless he's jungling, but I doubt that.
3) I agree.
6) I'd probably go with 0/9/21 or 0/21/9. 21/0/9 works, but is often sub par.
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jhoijhoi wrote:
xIPainIx's Orianna Guide
You are squishy as all hell at level one. I sincerely recommend either Quints of Fortitude, or a Doran's Ring.
Being squishy shouldn't be a problem. It's a caster we're talking about, after all.
Boots+3pots is the standard start. D ring is usually not as good.
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Early ROA is better for Ori than Tear.
ROA first, then build Tear, if you want it.
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Ooooooh, that means that I'm almost next! Seeing the points of critisism with the other guides, made me change a few things in my own guide since they kept coming back and I had made them too!
I just hope I don't piss jhoijhoi off with grammar/vocabulary mistakes! English isn't my native language, not even my second language! Went through some checks but yea, let's hope for the best ;)
I just hope I don't piss jhoijhoi off with grammar/vocabulary mistakes! English isn't my native language, not even my second language! Went through some checks but yea, let's hope for the best ;)
Whated: I don't think you understand how this works. I quote the original post and paste it into the list of reviews. Then I go from there. If there is no link to click on in the list of review, then that review is forfeit. That's how it works, that's why I ask for a link.
SirSpank: I'm glad you ran it through a spell check. You lied to me when you said a spell check had been used, and that pissed me off. So sorry if my review was mainly negative due to that, but honestly, it was really one of my only requirements :) If you would like a rereview (and I would certainly give you one, no worries), please submit a request in the same format - this allows me to keep track of what I'm up to :D
Searz: Being squishy is a problem. Current meta (or whatever) is Veigar and Soraka mid. Both have huge damage potential, and while Orianna has a faux shield with her ball, if either champion gets off their stun/silence, she could be in a world of hurt.
I wasn't going to mention the Tear of the Goddess, as many people do start with that over RoA. But yeah, I do agree with Searz. RoA is a much better item, especially as you start off with an early Catalyst.
Siveo: ;) You're a smart cookie for changing things when you see me rage about them :) You will only piss me off with spelling mistakes. It is NOT HARD to install/activate your spell check and download an English dictionary. I detail it all in my guide about writing a guide, and in fact, once you install it, you should be writing in perfect English in all your posts due to the wriggly red lines.
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I was happy and pissed off at the same time, as the house was a bit messy.
But yeah, what I'm trying to say, is that my parents and baby brother have travelled around 6-7 hours to visit me and we're going to the Southbank markets and maybe to the movies, so I may not get very many guides reviewed today or tonight.
I also have half of one assignment left to do, which is due on the 5th of September.
Hope everyone is doing well :)
SirSpank: I'm glad you ran it through a spell check. You lied to me when you said a spell check had been used, and that pissed me off. So sorry if my review was mainly negative due to that, but honestly, it was really one of my only requirements :) If you would like a rereview (and I would certainly give you one, no worries), please submit a request in the same format - this allows me to keep track of what I'm up to :D
Searz: Being squishy is a problem. Current meta (or whatever) is Veigar and Soraka mid. Both have huge damage potential, and while Orianna has a faux shield with her ball, if either champion gets off their stun/silence, she could be in a world of hurt.
I wasn't going to mention the
Tear of the Goddess, as many people do start with that over RoA. But yeah, I do agree with Searz. RoA is a much better item, especially as you start off with an early Catalyst.Siveo: ;) You're a smart cookie for changing things when you see me rage about them :) You will only piss me off with spelling mistakes. It is NOT HARD to install/activate your spell check and download an English dictionary. I detail it all in my guide about writing a guide, and in fact, once you install it, you should be writing in perfect English in all your posts due to the wriggly red lines.
EVERYONE: My parents drove 6 hours yesterday to surprise me. They literally knocked on my door and came inside after mum called me and said she wanted to send me a parcel so I had to confirm my address ^^
I was happy and pissed off at the same time, as the house was a bit messy.
But yeah, what I'm trying to say, is that my parents and baby brother have travelled around 6-7 hours to visit me and we're going to the Southbank markets and maybe to the movies, so I may not get very many guides reviewed today or tonight.
I also have half of one assignment left to do, which is due on the 5th of September.
Hope everyone is doing well :)
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