jhoijhoi's review & discussion service

[quote=jhoijhoi][color=#ff0000][b]Pending Rework of Champion[/b][/color] [quote=A Red Feather] Guide For (champion): Evelynn Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I believe I have found the perfect medium for Evelynn. Players either utilize her amazing skill set with bursty AP and lack sustain in combat or do the opposite as AD Eve. I truly believe my guide is how Eve is meant to be played, and I want other players to try it out. Just have to wait for her buff now! :D What I'd like you to focus on: My Summoner Spells (in regards to Flash), the core build itself, and my explanation on GP/5 items, to see if I have proper justification. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/something-wicked-this-way-comes-hybrid-roaming-eve-90463 [/quote] [quote=DeadlyTricks] Guide For: [[Evelynn]] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My guide has been mostly unnoticed and I'd like some criticism and an opinion or two about it What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think may be incorrect or poorly explained Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/evelynn-a-comprohensive-guide-ad-ap-and-hybrid-75731]Linky[/url] [/quote] [color=#ff0000][b]Pending Remake of Guide[/b][/color] [quote=Chesswinner] My guide for: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/gangplank-the-spooky-pirate-99448]Gangplank, the Saltwater Scourge[/url] Why I'd like you to review it: Some criticism, to know was six hours making of it worthful, etc. =D [/quote] [color=#008000][b]Reviewable Guides[/b][/color] [quote=Flubadoo] Guide For (champion): Xin Zhao Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I've played him for an extremely long time and I think I've found the "right way" to play him. I haven't gone negative since I've adopted this build. I believe the guide is pretty good, but I would like to know what someone else thinks, and if there are any logical flaws. What I'd like you to focus on: Structure and order, and especially the item build section. Suggestions on other items would be nice as well :D. I'm slightly confused on this, since my explanation on my item build is ridiculously long, and I might be repeating myself sometimes. I'm also afraid my walls of texts may be too big, so help to shorten them somehow would be great. Guide Link: http://filesmelt.com/dl/Xin_Zhao_Guide.docx [/quote] [quote=Lakapooty] Sorry to be a nussience but can you review my guide again? I changed A LOT of things since last time you viewed it. The like is right here: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/the-tankish-lifestealing-aproach-to-xin-zhao-100550 Also how do I put "Xin Zhao" instead of that link and it would still take you to my guide? I've seen that a lot and it looks way better. Thanks for helping!!! [/quote] [quote=FiniteParadox] Guide for: Cassiopeia Why I'd like this to be improved: Flaws, criticism, general things needed to be improved upon. What I'd like you to focus on: Well, anything and nothing. Don't want you to focus on anything specific and have more of a broad review to give me the best idea of what is needed to make it better. Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/cassiopeia-snake-in-the-bush-101074]Cassiopeia[/url] [/quote][/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]btw, I made a [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506][color=#ffff00][b]Guide about Writing Guides[/b][/color][/url] that the people in this list may want to have a look at.[/quote]

[quote=Temzilla][quote=jhoijhoi]I made a [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506][color=#ffff00][b]Guide about Writing Guides[/b][/color][/url].[/quote] We have to go deeper...[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Flubadoo's Xin Zhao Guide [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] A well-written and mathematically backed Tanky DPS Xin Zhao guide. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements: [/color] Break up walls of text into paragraphs. (read first point and last comment) Constructive Criticism 1) I won't put my verdict of your guide on the front page until you release an actual guide. I cannot, for example, comment on any aesthetics, as your guide is written in Microsoft Word. I also cannot comment about Layout (really) because Microsoft Word makes everything look pretty good. I also cannot comment about colour, so I will try to find something to comment on ^^ 2) You should have an introduction first. 3) No need to copy+paste things from the data base. Only explain abilities in your own words. 4) Typo? "Greater Marks of Shielding" 5) "The Black Cleaver. Xin Zhao only truly scales off of AS , Armor Penetration, [color=red]and to a lesser extent, AD[/color]. This item contains both of those goodies. His passive scales off of AS. His Three Talon Strike scales off of mainly AS [color=red]and to a lesser extent, AD[/color]." Avoid Repetition. 6) :/ I would never sell [[the black cleaver]] for a [[phantom dancer]] 7) [[teleport]] seems like an odd choice. Also. Believe me. I've had to deal with people saying "y u get teleport?!". Jebus wrote a whole thing about why getting [[teleport]] on an ad carry is bad. Consider [[exhaust]] and [[ignite]]. 8) Break up your walls of text into paragraphs ^^ Sorry I couldn't come up with much. The last thing I'd like to say is that there are a lot of Xin Zhao guides out there, and I've already reviewed like, 3 or 4 in this thread, so don't get your hopes up about it doing really well. I'm not being mean, but you need some real luck to get anywhere on the ladders.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]@Temzilla: :P Impossible, the world will become unstable and we may never return. How will we be able to tell which world is real?[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed][quote=jhoijhoi] @Temzilla: :P Impossible, the world will become unstable and we may never return. How will we be able to tell which world is real? [/quote] WE MUST OPEN KINGDOM HEARTS! Okay sorry that just sounded like a RPG thing. "Good to see you again, Cloud" I'm done I promise. Pre-look at Laka's guide. I like the item changes that you made, and I imagine that build ought to work quite well. To make things clearer, you can center some pictures in order to make it easier to read. If I am thinking of it correctly the coding for it is [[center]] Stuff here [[/center]] Also bigger images will draw more attention, and allow you to single out the information instead of just fishing for it.[/quote]

[quote=palzm]Can you review my guide on [[leona]] No ones seems to notice my guides :/ http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/radiating-sunshine-101349[/quote]

[quote=wRAthoFVuLK][quote=Rudmed] If I am thinking of it correctly the coding for it is [[[center]]] Stuff here [[[/center]]] Also bigger images will draw more attention, and allow you to single out the information instead of just fishing for it. [/quote] Fix'd the center. you always add 2 more brackets to the end to show the coding, not one. and what do you mean "Also bigger images will draw more attention, and allow you to single out the information instead of just fishing for it."[/quote]

[quote=Rudmed]This is what I mean. [icon=Battle Cry size=64] I max out battle cry now, for these reasons. Its upfront, and gets the reader to what they want to know and why you do that. Though try not to over do it, but that is somewhat easier to tell.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]btw I'm taking a break from MobaFire because I'm pissed off at the site ^^ I'm sorry I'm leaving some threads untied, but if anyone else requests a review, or anything, please just direct them to my guides about writing guides (which are all in my signature below). I'll probably be back later. Maybe.[/quote]