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[quote=Bryun]Is this "Edit:" thing you are doing to your front page new or something? o.o If you have I've altered my guides (at least my [[Akali]] one and some of my [[Jax]]) since I've first posted on this forum. If it isn't I would suggest making a constructive criticism and an end result type section on the front page to make it how much the guide has improved since then :P[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Sure thing, Byrun ^^ I'll get to that soon, after my walk to wake myself up from this dream *expects to lose vet status immediately when I wake up*[/quote]

[quote=FiniteParadox][quote=jhoijhoi] 1) Starting with a [[sapphire crystal]] is a bit iffy. [[cassiopeia]] is so squish, especially as you aren't running Quints of Fortitude. [/quote] Not sure how I'd fix this without really compromising my playing style, Doran's Ring doesn't give enough mp regen to offset the 200 mana while still keeping her less squishy. True, the Quintessence factor could make it work. [quote=jhoijhoi] 2) I'd refrain from only listing two completed items in your purchase oder. Just list the items you get in 90% of your games, and then list situational items in your actual guide. [/quote] Fixed. [quote=jhoijhoi] 4) Your introduction needs to be a bit longer. In it you could include the Pros and Cons to make it more interesting. [/quote] Added onto it and moved Pros/Cons to intro. [quote=jhoijhoi] 5) Try using some formatting to make your images stand out more. Centring the rune icons would make your guide look nicer. With regards to the alternative runes, use this coding: [[[greater seal of replenishment]]] = [[greater seal of replenishment]] [/quote] Fixed [quote=jhoijhoi] 6) You could cut down your Masteries section by only mentioning the important stuff (would Cass really get [[smite]]?). [/quote] Fixed [quote=jhoijhoi] 7) Your items section looks a bit weird. It'd suggest looking at some other people's item layout and trying something different. You could also check out this [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506]READ ME NOW PLEASE[/url] and have a go at trying the coding/formatting. [/quote] Not...entirely sure how I'll go about fixing this, but I'll find a way. [quote=jhoijhoi] 8) Your abilities section should be before the skill sequence, and the two sections should be merged. Also, the whole section in purple is really hard to read. [/quote] Mm...either this was a typo...of some sort, or you misread. I already had skill sequence after abilities, though in my mind it should be before. Will work on this. And really? The purple makes it harder for it to read? To me it makes it flow better and look more professional and my friends have told me it looks nice. [quote=jhoijhoi] 9) Try separating your abilities with [code]-----------[/code] which will yield: --------------------- [/quote] Will do, easy enough to fix. [quote=jhoijhoi] 10) The whole order of your guide is messed up. [quote=jhoijhoi] Introduction + Pros / Cons Masteries Runes Viable Summoner Spells + Less Viable Summoner Spells Ability Explanation + Ability Sequence + Ability Combos (anything about abilities) Items Gameplay + Farming + Jungling etc Summary Frequently Asked Questions Change Log [/quote] [/quote] Working on this right now, though...I currently don't have any questions people ask me about Cass. [quote=jhoijhoi] 11) Don't list useless summoner spells. [/quote] Fixed. [quote=jhoijhoi] 12) Pros/cons should be in your intro, seeing as your intro is really short. [/quote] Fixed. [quote=jhoijhoi] 13) Gameplay and Teamwork should be one section. [/quote] Working on. [quote=jhoijhoi] 14) Unique skills and Combos should be merged into your abilities section. [/quote] Working on. [quote=jhoijhoi] 15) Until you get some screenshots, I'd suggest either removing Hall of Fame, or combining it with your summary. [/quote] Fixed. EDIT: Currently archived until I get all the kinks out of it.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Thanks for the very quick response! Will upvote your guide once it's back up :)[/quote]

[quote=TheJohn]Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's the first guide I wrote, and it clearly needs many changes What I'd like you to focus on: Those walls of text and code Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wanna-rock-just-choose-your-build-101119[/quote]

[quote=Searz]@TheJohn One thing you're being very hardheaded about is Warmog's Armor. Why must you build this item on Morde? It's a TERRIBLE item for Morde. He does not benefit much from HP compared to resistances. There also the thing that noone at high elo builds Warmog unless they combine it with Atma for an offtanky build, but that doesn't work for Morde for obvious reasons.[/quote]

[quote=da_neo][quote=jhoijhoi] @da_Neo: That Annie video you have... that's my housemate, Warlemming. His K/D ratio is 3 kills to every death. That video was taken in a ranked 5v5. At the moment his ELO is 1370 in 5v5s, but we used to be 1450. Level: 30 Kills: 5593 Deaths: 1825 K/D Ratio: 3.06 Assists: 6212 [/quote] I know that you know him. But I´ve never seen him "in action". This is just an example that staying in fight is right, but you need to acknowledge that he wasn´t focused at all. Penta-Kill. Yes, he has skills, but well if no one focuses an Ashe who shoots one arrow after another he´ll make a penta too, doesn´t he ? I didn´t want to say it that way. I just wanted to show that this is an expample for what happens if you stay and noone focuses you. You´re right, after rereading it, I saw that it´s not something I wanted to say. I´ll rewrite it asap.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Yes, Warlemming has such a positive K/D because he is very good with positioning. If you watch it again, he is never close enough to get hurt, but he is close enough each time to do damage. An example of someone who does the opposite was me in that fight. Janna lol. Trying to save Alistar, trying to kill low health champs with my pathetic damage. They didn't target Annie in the back because I was so delicious in the front ^^[/quote]

[quote=Neymar77]http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/vladimir-the-crimson-reaper-102516 Check it and tell me if it was nice(rate and comment) my 1st guide following those steps![/quote]

[quote=da_neo]Well, if a Janna prostitutes herself to the enemy team in front, a decent team will start focusing you, as a Janna is supporting and can shield/CC. BUT, a good team, WILL focus the Annie. I think what makes me say that they are bad is, that they have a Kassadin, whose whole purpose should be to silence that Annie before she can Pedostun the team. 0:00-0:05 - Pedobear is out, but stun wasn´t ready. Though she has her W up she decides to stun with Q. Noone guards the Annie, if the Kassa would simply Riftwalk into her, he would have 3-4 seconds to wreck havoc until your team would, in such a clustered situation, notice. Also: The corki uses his gatling gun, but turns away from fight...oO. Amumu left, and from your scores I see that it wouldnt be that easy if your team were stunned for 2 secs. 0:06-0:28 - That went very fast. Kassadin finally decideds to jump in, but it´s too late(to apologies~~~) and he misses his slowing wave of destruction. Corki turned around and does damage again, kils the alistair (why is alistair dead and annie full hp). Then corki jumps in again, which is a suicide mission. It´s just that I see so many mistakes on both sides. But I´m not an Idiot. I know that you´ll see a lot of mistakes on others and noone on you. It´s the same with videos. You have all time in the world, but you aren´t ingame. You don´t feel the pressure. I myself would have probably done the same. I must say that english is not my native language so it may sounds different than I wanted to. Edit: I think I´ll use my explanation of the video in my guide, also if you want to i´ll mention warlemmings statistics.[/quote]