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Quite useful advice. Hmm... I had stated that I don't recommend using dodge without changing the masteries, but now I'm thinking about removing it. It draws the most negative statements of anything in my guide. As for cdr, it's mostly taste. Sometimes I feel like I could use more cdr, and I figure others would have the same feeling sometimes. Obviously, this is even more true when you lose your blue earlier to peeps like anivia and whatnot.

can't find the code for the centering in your post... ? Didn't notice the spacing stuff though. thanks for that! :]

EDIT: Found it! (thanks to jhoijhoi's epic Karthus guide) ;D
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Alright I think I got it now.
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haha all good! Found it :]

Thank ya!
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ChefoSLR wrote:



It's ok, I understand why you ignored my first post and I've made changes in the second. My fault for not reading the rules first. :(
I understand you're sick? Hope you feel better. =) My guide can wait.


DUDE WTF WHY DID YOU TAKE MY SIG! LOL WTF

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I edited my entire guide, if you want to take a look again, Rudmed. :]

@wRathoFVuLK imitation is the highest form of flattery. ;D
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lefze wrote:

Guide For (champion): Garen
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: My first guide. Dont know how well the items willwork, as havent really tried the build yet. the reason for this is that im not at home, and i dont have a proper computer with me.
What I'd like you to focus on: The items primary. Ill rework formatting when i get my hands on a proper computer
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/garen-the-healthy-killer-updated-101717

L1LShadow wrote:

Guide For: General Tanking (no specific champion)
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Criticism and publicity(I know I need attention :3).
What I'd like you to focus on: Explaination, Format, or your criterion.
Guide Link: General Tanking Guide

ChefoSLR wrote:

Guide for: Leona
Reasons why I'd like you review it: I put a lot of effort into this guide, I think it follows the standard format with a pinch of creativity. I've gone into detail about a lot of the strategy needed for a proper Leona play. Overall, I think you'll enjoy the work put into this guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: The style of the guide, my take on the masteries and item paths.
Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/leona-a-new-dawn-for-tanks-104374

Aharan wrote:

Guide for: Corki
Reasons why I'd like you to review it: Well, you already did, and in the matter of 5 hours, I've retooled it, adding more color, coding, and cleaning it up.
What I'd like you to focus on: Same thing as last time.
Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/corki-insert-creative-name-here-90103

Rudmed wrote:

Guide for: Tanks
Reason why I'd like you to review it: So I finish polishing it up, and a second pair of eyes will always be welcome. I think I need a break from it.
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything, but hey atleast you went through it twice.
Link:Lookin Good

Goffterdom wrote:

Guide For (champion): Jungle Master Yi
Before you think "GOD NOT AGAIN" please read what follows :P
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I think there are too many "OMG ONLY FULL DAMAGES GOGO PENTAKILL" Yi guides. And I'm tired of this. I wanted to make a more viable Yi Guide. Also I never read a Yi guide that fully fill my expectations so I wanted to make my own one. I'd like to know what you think about it, what people think about it.
What I'd like you to focus on: Did I miss something ? A crucial section / question / in-depth analysis ? Are there too many english mistakes ? I'd also like to know how the presentation is, if it needs rework, what parts and so on... I would also like that people actually read it :P
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/master-yi-the-wuju-jungle-style-99823


Guide For (champion): AMMUUUMMMMUUUUUUU the sad mummy. :]
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: it's my first guide, so I kinda wondered if I was on the right track.
What I'd like you to focus on: the format of the guide and the logical reasoning of it all. Also, a quick question. I haven't done a "normal" guide yet, because I feel like my play-style is pretty similar to guides that have already been posted. Is this a valid reason not to, or should I make a guide just for the sake of having a different explanation an reasoning behind stuff, and very small variations?
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/op-ap-mumu-killing-from-the-jungle-101509

Did I miss anyone?

And, just so you guys know, I'll be at my partner's father's 50th this weekend, so I don't know if I'll be able to get any done on the weekend ^^

I'll try and get a lot done today, as I know I've been slacking a bit and falling behind :/ I blame it on being sick, going to bed at midnight and waking up the next day at midday o.O Must need my sleep, eh?

ALSO - Thanks to Rudmed and Searz for their continued help with reviewing guides :)
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lol. I like rudmed's link. Addin' text. Whatta boss.
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lefze's Garen Guide
Verdict: Not a bad Garen guide, but not the best either.
Possible Improvments: I strongly recommend reading over my guide about making a guide. I grow weary of repeating myself a thousand times, so from now on, if the author has clearly not read that guide, I will just copy and paste this statement.

Constructive Criticism:

1) First of all, I'd suggest only displaying one cheatsheet build and just listing the other build in your guide through alternative items.

2) I would suggest removing all three boots you have there, and put only the one you'd actually get.

3) Warmog's is a really silly first item.

4) Quint of Fortitude would be better than Desolation, just for the early game assurance.

5) I wouldn't know if Garen would benefit from Flash, but know that you only have Ghost to run away.

6) Run your guide through a grammar and spell check. I hate reading so many mistakes.

7) Order your guide in terms of pregame stuff to in-game stuff. If you read the links I told you to read before requesting a review, you'd know this and I wouldn't have to repeat it 50 thousand times.

8) All the sections you have that are like one sentence each should be combined because they look stupid standing alone.
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L1LShadow's General Tanking Guide
Verdict: A great general tanking guide that explains almost every single thing one would like to know about tanking.
Possible Improvements: The formatting, coding, colouring and other visual aesthetics of this guide astound me. I'm very pleased by how fun this guide was to read. In terms of improvements: a general jungle section would be good. With a route drawn up, and some quick tips about it. A section on initiation would be very good too, as it is normally the tanks who initiate a fight. Otherwise, fantastic guide!

Constructive Criticism:

1) As this is a general tanking guide, I won't review the builds unless you come back and ask me to.

2) You've really improved my mood. Immediately I can see you've worked hard on your guide, and I really appreciate the effort you have put in.

3) When using separators, try and add an extra enter before and after so that the line doesn't touch the text. Looks neater that way too.

4) When you use parenthesis (), always have a space before and after (unless there is a full stop directly after, in which case you don't add a space). ie: He was dead (like, really dead, stiff as a door dead).

5) "Concerning Kills" maybe should be retitled "K/D/A" or "Kill Securing". You should also mention that a tank should have a lot of assists.

6) Glyph's of Focus are good on tanks too. Marks of Alacrity (ie on Warwick Jungle) are decent.

7) You forgot to add an "a" between Glyphs and Quintessences.

8) You could always use the new embedding system of mastery/runes/items. Just go (masteries), but replace with [ ] and you'll see what I mean.

9) Icons/wikis have been made for masteries now. So Hardiness .

10) Watch out for silly grammatical/spelling errors, like "Your a tank, you don't" (in the description of Cleanse).

11) You should add in some extra enter spaces between headings of columns.

12) Great mathematical explanations :)
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jhoijhoi wrote:

L1LShadow's General Tanking Guide
Verdict: A great general tanking guide that explains almost every single thing one would like to know about tanking.
Possible Improvements: The formatting, coding, colouring and other visual aesthetics of this guide astound me. I'm very pleased by how fun this guide was to read. In terms of improvements: a general jungle section would be good. With a route drawn up, and some quick tips about it. A section on initiation would be very good too, as it is normally the tanks who initiate a fight. Otherwise, fantastic guide!

Constructive Criticism:

1) As this is a general tanking guide, I won't review the builds unless you come back and ask me to.

2) You've really improved my mood. Immediately I can see you've worked hard on your guide, and I really appreciate the effort you have put in.

3) When using separators, try and add an extra enter before and after so that the line doesn't touch the text. Looks neater that way too.

4) When you use parenthesis (), always have a space before and after (unless there is a full stop directly after, in which case you don't add a space). ie: He was dead (like, really dead, stiff as a door dead).

5) "Concerning Kills" maybe should be retitled "K/D/A" or "Kill Securing". You should also mention that a tank should have a lot of assists.

6) Glyph's of Focus are good on tanks too. Marks of Alacrity (ie on Warwick Jungle) are decent.

7) You forgot to add an "a" between Glyphs and Quintessences.

8) You could always use the new embedding system of mastery/runes/items. Just go (masteries), but replace with [ ] and you'll see what I mean.

9) Icons/wikis have been made for masteries now. So Hardiness .

10) Watch out for silly grammatical/spelling errors, like "Your a tank, you don't" (in the description of Cleanse).

11) You should add in some extra enter spaces between headings of columns.

12) Great mathematical explanations :)


Thank you for reviewing my guide, I appreciate it. Will add a jungle section soon. I already have a general explanation for initiating a battle right under the "Team Fights" section.

1) I don't want it reviewed, it's just there to make it look nice. =]

2) I appreciate you appreciating me just like the way Dr. Feel feels Dr. Phil feeling Dr. Feel.

3) Oh, I thought doing one space already spaces it out, thanks.

4) Will fix.

5) Switched to K/D/A

6) I tried to show the runes that improved tanking, each champions have different specific runes that are good for them.

7) FFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

8) Kay.

9) Kewl.

10) Yea, it's a habit of mine I can't stop using "your."

11) Will do.

12) Thanks. =]

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