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Guide For (champion): Shaco
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I feel that I have found a new perspective for Shaco in the current meta, wherein squishy assassin-dps is not always the right call.
What I'd like you to focus on: Please focus on the viability of this guide in higher elo/ranked/competitive play. Any additional comments with regard to sections missing, etc. would also be appreciated.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/shaco-unstoppable-jungle-tanky-dps-102477

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Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: i think i might have forgot something, or failed at writing it AGAIN!
What I'd like you to focus on: the guide itself
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-the-tanky-dps-106043

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Guide For (champion): Orianna, The Lady Of Clockwork
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: To improve both the guide and the number of viewers it might get. I'm looking to improve not just my own Orianna play, but everyone else's play aswell.
What I'd like you to focus on: Focus on every tiny aspect of the guide you can find, I'd love to hear everything, but mainly the item build and reasoning behind it.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/orianna-an-in-depth-ap-caster-guide-106382

k, now that I'm caught up, request away! Also, thanks to those who have started to comment and vote on my Ashe guide :) MUCH APPRECIATED!!!
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lol your welcome
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Repeat customer because I was impressed by the initial review. :D

Guide For: Udyr.
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's kind of new and after the Lanedyr nerfs, this is really the only way to work him now.
What I'd like you to focus on: The content. Formatting and humor. I know my information is correct and it's what I stand by myself. Unless someone provides compelling evidence that I'm way, way wrong, it will not change much.
Guide Link: *Le Derp*
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jhoijhoi wrote:

Aharan's Corki Guide
Verdict: A bare-bones Corki guide that tries too hard to cater for too many different builds, thus it doesn't focus on any build with enough depth. Edit: A solid Corki guide that covers two main builds, and the playstyle for both.
Possible Improvements: The organisation needs to be tidied up, as does the coding and formatting. The guide is screaming for colour. Some sections just seemed like waffle and didn't seem necessary. The guide/build isn't bad, but it isn't great (though admittedly it is better than some of the Pro guides out there). It seems like the author could try a little bit harder with his guide to make it 100x better :) Edit: The guide has certainly improved since I last saw it, proving the author is dedicated to making his guide better. It is now comprehensive and well-written. The only improvements I can think of are adding screenshots of the build working, and videos of gameplay.

Constructive Criticism:

1) You don't need to list every item in a build for the final item. ie: Phage > Sheen > Zeal. The most you should have to list is: Phage > Sheen. Even then, I would have thought Sheen more important on Corki.

2) I think it's risky starting with such low health and no Doran's to back you up (even despite the fact you spec in the defence tree).

3) The date FAILS me.

4) This is what I mean about adding strategic colour.



5) Use the new embedding system. If you don't know what I mean, have a look at my guide about writing a guide.

6) In your Runes section, it'd be nice if you explained all the different runes you've chosen. Glyphs of Focus aren't bad either.

7) You could combine your Masteries and Runes section, as your Masteries section is pretty short. Also, embed.

8) At the end of your skills section there's a lot of random space. Also, at the end you could put your Skill Sequence.

9) Embed each item build into your item build sections.


1. Actually, if you look at the cheat sheet, AND the AD/Trinity Force section, I have sheen before Zeal, and Zeal isn't mentioned in the section, mostly because Trinity Force is something like 1500 gold at the time, making much effecient to just buy it after your Sheen+Phage.

2. Eh...., I suppose a Doran's Blade would be semi-acceptable for the Trinity Force build, but I can't stand it on mah Manamune build. I want that thing built ASAP.

3. Specify?

4. I'll go back and see what I can add color to without making it look like barf. I have some issues with the coding and lists, but, It's do-able.

5. I know exactly what the new embedding system is, I'll get around to switching the items to that, because I hate typing out [[item=Manamune size=32] all the freaking time.

6. I'm cheap :D. I don't play enough to actually get those, so I'm basing it off of my runes. But, I can toss in that as a side note. More detail is nice, so I'll add it in.

7. Changed.

8. Changed.

9. I will need to look that up in your fantastic guide on making a guide.
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Oh god, thanks for that little post of what you have yet to review, was having a bit of trouble figuring out what to spend my time on :P

A wild NIGHTHAWK appeared! Wild NIGHTHAWK used Review Guide!
Shaco

Tol Eressea's Shaco Guide

Verdict: A great guide with some excellent formatting and a relatively new outlook on playing Shaco. Extremely pleasing to the eye with tons of knowledge packed in.
Possible Improvements: Runes imo could be better, item order should be fixed a bit, items themselves are good. Summoner spells imo again could be better. Some screenshots would greatly help.


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Repeat customer because I was impressed by the initial review. :D

Guide For: Udyr.
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's kind of new and after the Lanedyr nerfs, this is really the only way to work him now.
What I'd like you to focus on: The content. Formatting and humor. I know my information is correct and it's what I stand by myself. Unless someone provides compelling evidence that I'm way, way wrong, it will not change much.
Guide Link: *Le Derp*


EDIT: Must be annoying pressing ok for all those 'you are advertizing mobafire builds?' warnings.


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Tol Eressea's Shaco Guide

Verdict: Nighthawk: A great guide with some excellent formatting and a relatively new outlook on playing Shaco. Extremely pleasing to the eye with tons of knowledge packed in. jhoijhoi:
Possible Improvements: Nighthawk: Runes imo could be better, item order should be fixed a bit, items themselves are good. Summoner spells imo again could be better. Some screenshots would greatly help. jhoijhoi:

- Mind if it's like that? That way I can tag my own review at the end.
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Nighthawk wrote:

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EDIT: Must be annoying pressing ok for all those 'you are advertizing mobafire builds?' warnings.

It is quite annoying, yes.
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Sure, as long as you change that goddawful color to a nice yellow


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A wild NIGHTHAWK appeared! Wild NIGHTHAWK used Review Guide!
Udyr

Lugignaf's Udyr Guide

Verdict: Nighthawk:Great guide with some great formatting. Short but sweet. Pretty good explanation of items etc as well. jhoijhoi:
Possible Improvements: Nighthawkimo needs a tad bit more explanation of items, (I get x item because it grants me y bonuses.) could use some alternative routes and a video in that section, items seem a bit helter skelter. You mention YoYo's but not more DPS items, doesn't really seem to emphasize enough that you should pack a bit of damage as well as tankiness and that bloodrazor and triforce are your two damage items you should be building 99% of gamesjhoijhoi:


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