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Creator: jhoijhoi June 29, 2011 5:44pm
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I'm still sad I haven't made this list. :(
Thanks to Jovy for the sig!
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Summoner Level: Lugignaf
Post Count (at time of request): 3831
Spell & Grammar check completed: Eyup
Guide For (champion): Nasus
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's my third Nasus guide and currently riding the lines of 5th/6th highest rated. It is also my first guide to get over 20 votes and I just want to be drawing as much attention to it as I can.
What I'd like you to focus on: Alternate item choices and explanations. I'm not a person who explains stuff IRL too well and, I know some of that has transferred into my guide
Guide Link: NASUS ES NUMERO UNO!


Side note: If you could, please refer people who need grammar checks to me. It may or may not lighten your workload. It'll probably make it easier though.
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jhoijhoi wrote:

Kirluu's Alistar Guide
Verdict: An extremely in-depth and well presented/laid-out guide that keeps your attention almost all the way through-out. The author clearly knows what they are talking about in terms of Alistar Playstyle.
Possible Improvements: The guide lacks general aesthetics amongst its walls of text, deterring the reader from deciphering the wealth of knowledge the author has compiled. The situational items section could be expanded upon - for instance, I know it is quite common for Alistar to buy Heart of Gold or philosopher's stone early on, especially if they are slotted into the "support" role bottom. The centred text grated on my nerves, but that's just personal preference. Loved the guide, +1.

Constructive Criticism:

1) I feel as if Exhaust would be better suited on Alistar. While you do have Flash to close gaps, Exhaust is always useful for slowing down an enemy, and I can't count the many times I have been screwed over by an exhaust as an AD/AP carry.

2) Unique guide layout ^^

3) Improved Ignite is possibly the worst improvement mastery :/

4) Why not use the BBCode for the masteries?

5) When using columns, add space between them. I detail how to do this in my guide about making a guide.

6) No mention of Exhaust at all? :/

7) BBCode for ability sequence.

8) Not a fan of excessive amount of centred text. Your guide also lacks colour/coding amongst those walls of text.

9) Most of your tips and tricks could be located in a "Ability Explanation" section, which you don't have for some reason.

Thanks a lot for the review. Awesome constructive critisizm. I'm going to have to look into it some time. About the BBCode, I haven't really updated my guide on that part yet, but it will be coming, hopefully soon, when I get myself together to do it :)

Thanks a lot, again :)
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PsiGuard wrote:

I'm still sad I haven't made this list. :(


Same here but still, I'm very very happy with the recommandation.
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Just wanted you to know I finally got my 100 posts.
My build also got a huge update including a brand new layout and 2 additional sections.


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 101
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES (I'm German so please don't expect perfect English. But I did my best)
Guide For (champion): Leona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I put a lot work in my guide. I wanted to give players a well written and in-depth guide to Leona as she is a real powerful and funny champ to play. A review would help improving it.
What I'd like you to focus on: When reading my guide you should focus on anything that is important for yourself as I want a honest opinion.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/daughter-of-amun-ra-an-indepth-guide-to-leona-101449?page=1
Please notice: If you just commented my post or updated your guide please let me know - by writing an PN - to get new feedback / a new vote. I can't have an eye on all the guides I'm commenting.
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Psi: I haven't updated that list in ages :)

gabpin: yup saw your request, and as theBMB said, I'm just a little busy.

Lug: Definitely, your proof-reading service is a great resource ^^

Kirluu: You're welcome ^^

Ssyrak: You were on the list anyway, considering the conversation we shared on my Ashe guide was enough proof you are intelligent lol :P

Assignments to do, exams to study for, will review sooner or later ^^
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Don't worry. I'm studying as well. So I completely understand your situation. :P
But are there no summer holidays in Australia? Just wondering. I got vacation from July to October.
Please notice: If you just commented my post or updated your guide please let me know - by writing an PN - to get new feedback / a new vote. I can't have an eye on all the guides I'm commenting.
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hey Jhoi, I updated the formatting in the items lists, but I'm still having trouble getting the text to not wrap underneath the item icons. I was thinking of using the column formatting, but i'm not sure, what do you think?
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Me again ^_^
My apologies for not posting in the specific format but I'm not necessarily looking for a new review. Was actually wondering if you'd just suuuuper-briefly skim down my Twitch guide again to comment on aesthetics. I went back to it the other day and decided I didn't like the look so I did a **** load of reformatting and as much condensing as I could right up until the "how to use" sections. I'd wait until those were done to ask such a silly request but I don't know when I'm going to have the motivation to tackle those monsters. >_<
Credit goes to JEFFY40HANDS for this godly imposing Viktor
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Hallo, just wanna say that, I may not have 100+ post but i´ve read a lot of guides to have an idea of how should and shouldnt make mine. really think its complete and easy to read but i need some opinions.

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