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Creator: jhoijhoi June 29, 2011 5:44pm
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Kirluu's Alistar Guide
Verdict: An extremely in-depth and well presented/laid-out guide that keeps your attention almost all the way through-out. The author clearly knows what they are talking about in terms of Alistar Playstyle.
Possible Improvements: The guide lacks general aesthetics amongst its walls of text, deterring the reader from deciphering the wealth of knowledge the author has compiled. The situational items section could be expanded upon - for instance, I know it is quite common for Alistar to buy Heart of Gold or philosopher's stone early on, especially if they are slotted into the "support" role bottom. The centred text grated on my nerves, but that's just personal preference. Loved the guide, +1.

Constructive Criticism:

1) I feel as if Exhaust would be better suited on Alistar. While you do have Flash to close gaps, Exhaust is always useful for slowing down an enemy, and I can't count the many times I have been screwed over by an exhaust as an AD/AP carry.

2) Unique guide layout ^^

3) Improved Ignite is possibly the worst improvement mastery :/

4) Why not use the BBCode for the masteries?

5) When using columns, add space between them. I detail how to do this in my guide about making a guide.

6) No mention of Exhaust at all? :/

7) BBCode for ability sequence.

8) Not a fan of excessive amount of centred text. Your guide also lacks colour/coding amongst those walls of text.

9) Most of your tips and tricks could be located in a "Ability Explanation" section, which you don't have for some reason.
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I'm busy with university, but I thought I'd update this to show I haven't forgot about anyone (though if I missed your request, just request again!).


!!! University > Reviewing !!!



>>> I will review however many guides I feel like Per Day <<<




ATTENTION: Due to a huge influx of requests, I have now implemented some requirements. This is so I don't end up reviewing a guide who's author doesn't care, or reviewing a guide that is really bad, or reviewing a guide that has not clicked on the link above. If you want me to spend over half an hour reading your guide and writing a reply, you can very well return the favour!

REQUIREMENTS:
- Author must have +100 Posts
- Guide must have been run through a spell and grammar check
- Author must be over Summoner Level 25
- Author must comment on my Ashe guide with their opinion.


If you are LUCKY, your guide will be reviewed by other members, such as: Searz, da_Neo, Rudmed, Bloofyre, Bryun, and Nighthawk. They drop in from time to time to help with my workload. <3

* I will be completely honest in my opinion
* I will not downvote or upvote until I have received a response from my review, and I see you have dropped your opinion of my Ashe guide in the comment section
* I will review your request as soon as physically and mentally possible

* At the completion of my Review, I will post my verdict of your guide here, along with my review (verdicts are featured in the below post)

You must use this format below for submitting a guide for review, otherwise I'll ignore your request. People who just drop their links here will be completely ignored.

Summoner Level:
Post Count (at time of request):
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES/NO
Guide For (champion):
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:
What I'd like you to focus on:
Guide Link:

What do I expect in return? Read/vote on my >> Complete & Comprehensive Compiled Catalogue of Ashe Knowledge <<, +rep me, and a simple thank you would be lovely ^^

OTHER RULES/NOTES:
- Please only submit one guide per request.
- Please do not request a review on a champion who has not been released. I would also prefer to read only guides published on MobaFire.
- If you are rude to me in your response to my review, I will consider not featuring you in the below post.
- If I read your guide. And you have not read the links I have supplied in this post. I will literally asplode. And you will be charged with my death.


Common Things I Repeat In Most Of My Reviews


  • ONE BUILD. Show me one build, the one you use 90% of the time, in your cheat sheet. NO NEED, EVER, to display more than one cheat sheet. All alternative items can be explained in your Situational/Alternative Items section.
  • Good Hands IS ****ING BETTER THAN PERSEVERANCE. Jesus Christ.
  • Colour is good. Too much colour is bad. Find the correct balance.
  • Paragraphical space. Walls of text = bad. Sparse text = bad. Find the correct balance.




Reviewable Guides

Summoner lvl: 30
Post count: 251
Spelling and grammar: I believe so O.o
Guide for: lee sin
Why? I'm pretty new(kind of), so I still want more advice and maybe things i can improve on(I know there's lots)
What to focus on: anything you see fit. Perhaps I should go more in depth....hmm
Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/listen-to-their-heartbeat-a-jungle-lee-sin-build-116481

Keels wrote:

Summoner level: 30
Post count: 555
Spell/ Grammar Check complete? Always. Yes.
Guide for: Singed
Why I'd like this to be reviewed: Jhoi , your making a guide guide was a huge influence. I listened last time to your criticisms of my Renekton build, and I think it paid off. Plus duff's kinda been trawling my builds a bit, and I'd like a second opinion. No offense to him, I've been listening, but a second opinion would be nice.
What I'd like you to focus on: Do I need some more humor? I worked pretty hard to make it look nice, and I'd like to see what you think of it. Is the strategy described sound? Anything you can think of. Unless this is a bad time. I looked to blow people away on this guide.
Guide link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/singed-his-chemical-romance-ap-hp-99768

Quoted:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): a bit over 100 last time I check'd.
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES, but I am 14yrs old, studied English for around 8yrs. I'm not perfect.
Guide For (champion): Kennen
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to improve it :)
What I'd like you to focus on: I don't know, about everything.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/kennen-the-off-tank-ninja-102793

Khazem wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count: 101
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For: Nasus
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to have a more experienced Mobafire users opinion, as this is my first guide. I've also recently completely remade it so I'd like some fresh opinions on that.
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything I can improve on, anything I forgot to add or could add, anything I could do to make it look better.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/nasus-whys-this-tank-hitting-me-for-half-my-health-107987

Xiron wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count: 309
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For: Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: You gave me the advise to archive my old wukong guide and create a new one. Then you'd read it again. Did it. Also i want to get my guide known.
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you can find.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-u-no-steal-bananas-new-123062

PsiGuard wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count: 606
Spelling and Grammar check: In soviet russia, poster spellchecks YOUR guides! I did JUST publish it though, so let me know if you notice anything amiss, including any formatting errors or random text (I had some placeholder text in each section so it would save).
Guide for: Malphite
Why I'd like this to be reviewed: I've appreciated your reviews in the past and have usually changed one thing or another to improve my guide as a result. I'll be sure to thank you in my guide this time. ;)
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything that comes to mind. Any new and brilliant ideas for new additions would be nice, as it's a very conventional guide at the moment without anything super-unique. Also you've suggested columns on my viable items section in my Noct guide. If I do adopt that format, I will change both, but for now they're just listed vertically.
Guide Link: Rocking Solo Top With Malphite


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 6412
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Caitlyn
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: New guide and I would appreciate the attention as well as a point out on any obvious flaws.
What I'd like you to focus on: Guide aesthetics and ways to improve it, especially the video section - is it necessary?
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/caitlyn-yordle-killing-101-122238


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 101 as of this post I believe
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Firefox grabs spelling errors with underlines as I type so the only ones that might have been missed are ones that my eyes couldn't pick out. Bad vision messes me up sometimes :(
Guide For (champion): Sona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm always looking for feedback on the guide itself. I take pride in this guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: Format and content mostly. General advice will be appreciated of course.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sona-super-support-revamped-for-support-overhaul-77657


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 2535
Spell & Grammar check completed: Spelling-yes, grammar-mostly
Guide For (champion): Kayle
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to see some constructive criticism, I have some sheep vote and "Tank Kayle is for noobs" kind of comments, but nothing particularly helpful lately.
What I'd like you to focus on: Whatever you feel needs commenting on
Guide Link: Kayle, Paladin of the League

ShadowNet wrote:

Summoner Level:30
Post Count (at time of request):274
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: To make it perfect. 3rd time I'm submitting, feels like going to a doctor.
What I'd like you to focus on: Everything, by everything I mean everything. Make 30 points instead of 10 so I would submit less. :d
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/carry-me-morde-108278

NicknameMy wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request):564
Spell & Grammar check completed: Not really, i cannot do it^^. Google Translate sucks...
Guide For (champion): Master Yi
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Re-Review, I changed many things around. It is now more a general Yi guide with the focus at "Final" Yi.
What I'd like you to focus on: The changed things.
Guide Link: "Final" Yi, King of Jungle

ZioSerpe wrote:
Summoner Level:30
Post Count:103
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For: Poppy
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: having some major gaming opinion on my unique build
What I'd like you to focus on: gameplay, guide form
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/harder-better-faster-stronger-115842

Ssyrak wrote:
Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request - counting this post): 86
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES (I'm German so please don't expect perfect English. But I did my best)
Guide For (champion): Leona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I put a lot work in my guide. I wanted to give players a well written and in-depth guide to Leona as she is a real powerful and funny champ to play. A review would help improving it.
What I'd like you to focus on: When reading my guide you should focus on anything that is important for yourself as I want a honest opinion.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/daughter-of-amun-ra-an-indepth-guide-to-leona-101449?page=1

Blydden wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 223 (224 including this one?)
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Ezreal
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to know if I've written my guide correctly this time. I really do.
What I'd like you to focus on: My format. I believe that the information is all correct this time especially, as I have examined my numbers myself and theorycrafted on this champion, Ezreal, more than two hundred times. I just want it to be an interesting read, as well as informative.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/how-to-master-prodigious-spellcraft-104051

I know some of these are out of order, when I open things in a new tab they tend to go everywhere, so sorry about that.

I'm also sorry about keeping you all waiting, it's just that university is actually hard this semester, requiring me to attend classes (I know, I'm amazing), do assignments earlier, and I'm going to have to study HARD for this ******ed Problem Solving in-class Exam for algebra and calculus =.=

I'll try to get reviewing soon. I don't promise that I'll be finished with the list tonight, or tomorrow, or on the weekend. But I will try and make my way through it. If my review is too rushed for you, please don't hesitate to come back with a new request :)

Sincerely,
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VKZ95's Mordekaiser Guide
Verdit: A VERY in-depth Mordekaiser guide that not only gives you a good build for the Twisted Treeline, but explains alternative items well. EDIT: A terrific guide! There are only a few changes that could made to this guide, but it certainly is the best Twisted Treeline guide I have ever read.
Possible Improvements: The author needs to spend some time making the guide aesthetically pleasing. Have a look around at the other guides in this thread and see if you can implement some changes to make it nicer to read. I struggled to read your guide because I grew bored too fast. While you have a lot of good information, I feel as if people are just going to skip everything in your guide due to it not grabbing the reader's attention. Visual changes are not hard to make, pop into my guide about writing a guide and have a look at the various ways in which you can enrich a bland guide :) EDIT:Wow, I literally have no feedback. The guide is great, I can't remember what it looked like before, but this is one of the best guides I have read. Very simple, to the point and just... is great. I really enjoyed just *reading* this guide, cruising through all the text, not finding anything to pick on.

The one thing I did notice, however, was that you didn't center large icons/images/videos. It looks much better when things like that are centred on the page. Other than that, fantastic guide, immediate +1. Sorry I didn't have much feedback :/
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Siveo's Shen Guide
Verdict: I really enjoyed reading this in-depth and well-written Shen guide. The author has spent a lot of time perfecting this guide and gathering relevant resources (videos) to enrich the guides content, and I applaud him for his effort.
Possible Improvements: The last few chapters of the guide fell flat in terms of presentation and aesthetic pleasantness. I believe the author could put in a bit more time to the sections mentioned in the review, and flesh these sections out. The guide is definitely a good fall-back for old and new Shen players alike.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Summoner Spells = Good. Runes = Good. Ability Sequence = Good. Items = Good.

2) Great use of my template! Looks fantastic! In your Summoner Spells section, I'd suggest an extra enter space after "For example: Will you use Ghost to flee/catch up or Exhaust?", as the text is too close to the column headings.

3) You could merge your Tips and Tricks section into the Abilities section (the way I've shown in my Guide about Making a Guide), but you don't have to ^^

4) I'd suggest Ninja Tabi in your situational items section. You have plenty of magic resist with Force of Nature and you spec dodge chance in the Defense tree, so why not boost your dodge chance with Ninja Tabi?

5) I feel as if "Taking/Supportive role", "Laning phase" and "Map awareness" are sections that can be merged into one to conserve space. Unless you add some colour/images/formatting into each section to make them longer and more appealing to read, I'd suggest merging the chapters and just allocating appropriate headings.

6) Center your videos.
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theBMB's Item Guide
Verdict: A valuable addition to the General Guides of MobaFire, containing information of items that many people would find useful.
Possible Improvements: Another section that reveals which item turns into what would be really cool to see. I think that the guide is one that every new player should read. The author has clearly spent a lot of time on this guide, and I'm surprised it hasn't received more attention. +1

Constructive Criticism:

1) In the 3rd chapter of your guide, your columns are too close to the normal text. I'd suggest an extra enter space before and after the column formatting. The blue headings are also eye breaking (3 colours in such short space), maybe a darker colour would look nicer.

2) I'd suggest the bbcode "float" for the "shoes" section.

3) Love your Unique Items section. It's the best presented and the information in it is the best written. Maybe you should update the rest of your guide :P In terms of paragraphs, you may like to have a new enter space for each line, ie:

aousdbaosubdajsbdowuowjelajsdh
[enter]
asodijaspiclcjnasodiajskdjapis

You should mention that selling an item that has just used it's unique passive/active (say you just died and used Guardian Angel, and it's on cooldown) and buying a new one, the cooldown is reset. Don't know if that's relevant or not ^^
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Oh very interesting, I never thought about doing that with GA, not sure how gold efficient that would be. Probably a smart idea in super late game when you've completed your build anyway. Most of the other passive/actives with a cooldown have a low enough cooldown to not justify rebuying the item.

Quick question, what exactly does the float tag do?
edit: trying to use float, but
does nothing
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It's in my guide about making a guide. http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/making-a-guide-101506#chapter16

The GA comment was referring to buying it again late game, yeah, if you have a lot of gold ^^
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o man, that float tag is sexy, I'm gonna update my whole item list to use it, i'll let you know when it's finished.
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So first off all: Thanks a lot for the review! I hope you like reading my first guide ever.

So here it comes: My criticism on your criticism ;)

jhoijhoi wrote:

Constructive Criticism:

1) Summoner Spells = Good. Runes = Good. Ability Sequence = Good. Items = Good.

2) Great use of my template! Looks fantastic! In your Summoner Spells section, I'd suggest an extra enter space after "For example: Will you use Ghost to flee/catch up or Exhaust?", as the text is too close to the column headings.

3) You could merge your Tips and Tricks section into the Abilities section (the way I've shown in my Guide about Making a Guide), but you don't have to ^^

4) I'd suggest Ninja Tabi in your situational items section. You have plenty of magic resist with Force of Nature and you spec dodge chance in the Defense tree, so why not boost your dodge chance with Ninja Tabi?

5) I feel as if "Taking/Supportive role", "Laning phase" and "Map awareness" are sections that can be merged into one to conserve space. Unless you add some colour/images/formatting into each section to make them longer and more appealing to read, I'd suggest merging the chapters and just allocating appropriate headings.

6) Center your videos.


1) Uhm ... Thanks :D

2) Added an enter.

3) Hmmm ... I thought about it but I prefer to leave it like it is now. There will be people that just want to look at tips & tricks for the champion. Making it easier for them to look just at 1 chapter without other info in it!
I've categorized every tip/trick with titles (every ability has a title) so it's still easy to see what tip/trick is for what ability.

This point of criticism made me merge my abilities and skill sequence chapters since it's about the same thing: Abilities.

I hope you like these changes/idea's

4) I suggested already Ninja Tabi but not with the optionals, it was listed in my core where I explained my choice for the Mercury's Treads. But I've relocated them and gave them some more explenation.

5) I merged them, rewrote them and tried to make it a bit more attractive.

6) Done, I hope you like the video's ;)

So I hope I could impress you a little with my guide. As you can see, I try to put a lot off work in it and keep it up to date. Now I only need to get more views and votes :D

I hope the attention in this thread will make my guide a little bit more popular.
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I rec'd theBMB's guide before I saw he asked for a rec =.= I should take my rec away now :( I hate it when people ask me for recs :( :( :( Now it looks like he asked for a rec and I gave it to him :( Not happy :/

And Siveo: I'll have a look at your guide again.

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