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Creator: jhoijhoi June 29, 2011 5:44pm
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ZioSerpe wrote:

Spell & Grammar check completed: YES

NO
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PsiGuard wrote:


NO


rep+, I lol'd


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NO

WTF?!

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I peeked at it. There were like 5 errors in the first paragraph, and a bunch more farther along. You're missing a bunch of punctuation, and some of the errors are just blatant misspellings. "Seriusly," "Caryy," I mean, come on. Run it through a spellcheck or something.
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PsiGuard wrote:

I peeked at it. There were like 5 errors in the first paragraph, and a bunch more farther along. You're missing a bunch of punctuation, and some of the errors are just blatant misspellings. "Seriusly," "Caryy," I mean, come on. Run it through a spellcheck or something.


You're right! My first language isn't English and even I see it!

Btw ... 10 times using the word 'confident' in 2 sentences just made me want to downvote and close your guide immediately! On top off that you are too certain that you made the best and perfect guide off all! Lose that attitude because it WILL cost you a lot of downvotes!
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The confident part was ment to be a joke xD i actually lol'ed at it xd
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PsiGuard wrote:

I peeked at it. There were like 5 errors in the first paragraph, and a bunch more farther along. You're missing a bunch of punctuation, and some of the errors are just blatant misspellings. "Seriusly," "Caryy," I mean, come on. Run it through a spellcheck or something.

That's strange considering I used a site to spellcheck every paragraph, I'll check it again.
Edit: yeah... I suck at using spellcheckerDOTnet apparently (****ing new Firefox with no google toolbar), now I understood how it works and solved all mistakes, thx for making me notice

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My Garen guide hit the top spot recently and its continuing to climb at a steady pace. I have the recent Garen ftp week and price drop to thank for that. But I have no doubt that some of your advice helped it get there, so thanks again :)
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Blakhart's Vayne Guide
Verdict: A well-thought out Vayne build, however, the guide itself is a little muddled and not as fine-tuned as one would expect.
Possible Improvements: I suggest utilising some of the templates in my guide about making a guide to boost the aesthetic levels of your guide, and perhaps also re-reading over your work and seeing if your tone of voice is appropriate towards teaching people about Vayne. A little humour is perfectly fine, but if you don't take yourself seriously, why would anyone else? ^^ Overall, a decent effort towards guide making, covers most of the things people would want to know about Vayne. Not happy about maxing Silver Bolts first though.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Aha, a Vayne guide! And it's Blakhart, that mid Twisted Fate against my midRaka where I got a triple kill. I shall be kind, I promise haha :P

2) Seals of Strength D: They're so weak D: You'd be better off with Seals of Armour, seeing as your guide has no armour until Guardian Angel. Glyphs of Alacrity are also weak compared to Seals of Alacrity, so... maybe Glyphs of Warding, or Focus? All runes on Vayne are pretty good, regardless.

3) :/ Why would you max Silver Bolts first? Even with Glyphs of Alacrity, you're not likely to get 3 hits off in the first few levels of the game.

4) Don't see the need for philosopher's stone when you buy a Sheen straight after. If you had mana regen runes, you wouldn't need the PS, and the Sheen should give you enough base mana anyway to be fine. Plus, building PS is delaying your Sheen + Zerk's.

5) As you don't grab much amour pen, I'd suggest Sunder over Alacrity or Sorcery.

6) Not hitting level 6 at the same time as your enemy bot lane is going to hurt.

7) You might want to shove your Updates towards the end of your guide, so that people aren't delayed in reading what they want to read.

8) You seem to have some coding errors. In your introduction, the Vayne icon is just randomly at the end of the text. Adding in two enter lines would fix that. Also, I can see you haven't centred any of your large icons. I detail how to do that in my guide about making a guide, if you read it.

9) No need to have a Jungling section. It's a waste of space, atm. Unless you're going to actually include a jungle section, there's no point saying, "Yeah, don't jungle" devoted to a whole section.

10) Did you read my guide about making a guide? Because one of the main reasons why I almost despise reviewing now is because people won't take the time to read the things I ask them to read. If you had read it, you would have noticed this chapter about Section Organisation. Why explain skill order, skill abilities etc after the game play section? =.=

11) It's better to use the wiki code in paragraphs, and the icon code when making icons. Your paragraphs look ugly and blocky due to the icon coding.

12) I wouldn't get Frozen Heart on Vayne.

13) I wouldn't get Cloak and Dagger on anyone. Absolutely worthless item.
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Dear Jhoijhoi,

(Yes I write quite casually.)

Warning 1: I may or may not seem horribly pretentious/obnoxious in this text.

Warning 2: Long read. Just skip to the green line if you aren't interested in the whole backstory.

It was more than 3 months ago you review How To Master Prodigious Arcana, was it not?

Interesting story. I started work on editing my guide but I quickly realized something. It was inconsistent. I wanted my Ezreal guide to not just come from my head, but from my heart. I just typed whatever I felt like typing, and it was not smart of me. My guide may have been full of information, but it was disproportional... unattractive...& boring. I lost my motivation quickly, and stopped trying to make my guide better.

So, I started completely from scratch, this time talking about my love of Ezreal with my heart, not my head. With colour and FONT and things to make my calculations interesting to read.

It was an interesting experience, indeed...writing a guide in and of itself may be easy, but writing a good one is hard.

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My old guide, How To Master Prodigious Arcana, has been archived. I'm curious though if you would review my new guide for Ezreal, which has the same play-style and basic principles behind it...How To Master Prodigious Spellcraft.

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 223 (224 including this one?)
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Ezreal
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to know if I've written my guide correctly this time. I really do.
What I'd like you to focus on: My format. I believe that the information is all correct this time especially, as I have examined my numbers myself and theorycrafted on this champion, Ezreal, more than two hundred times. I just want it to be an interesting read, as well as informative.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/how-to-master-prodigious-spellcraft-104051

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