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PsiGuard's Malphite Solo Top & Jungle Guide
Verdict: Possibly one of the best guides I have ever seen on MobaFire. Contains a nice mix of coding, formatting and thick paragraphs to appease even the most nitpicky person. Absolutely love this guide :D
Possible Improvements: Comparatively, your Situational Items section is really bulky and uninteresting. Maybe try some new formatting here, to make it more appealing to read.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Pree sure I've already done this guide, but I'll go over it again, it's probably been long enough :P

2) Situational Items section could look a little nicer. Why not try putting in some columns?

ie:


Boots of Swiftness
spa These underrated boots are great replacements for Greater Quintessence of Swiftness if you don't have them. Mobility is one of Malphite's strengths and should be exploited. If the enemy team has little CC for you to worry about, you could even pick these up in addition to Greater Quintessence of Swiftness and Force of Nature for a total of 443 move speed, as opposed to the regular 417 move speed you'll get from the main build (credit to Temzilla for the math). spa
Boots of Swiftness

The "spa" would be invisible against the black guide panel.

3) How about ordering your Situational Items alphabetically, or in categories? (boots, damage, survivability etc)

4) Pree sure I should rec this guide :P




Previous review:

1) Mediation is better for Malphite's early game than Greed. I know you say your Philosopher's stone should take care of mana, but if Malphite is bottom lane and not solo top, he may not have a chance against that AD carry to get enough gold to recall and Teleport back to lane with a Philo Stone at the 5-7 minute mark :/

2) Then again, my above complaint is easily countered by, "But I'm getting 2 gold/10s, shouldn't Greed accompany it for even more gold earned?" So yeah, I guess it's up to personal preference.

3) I would run 0/9/21 on Malphite, purely for the reduction of Flash and Teleport. Malphite can easily keep a wave of creeps at bay (and champions) by standing near a dying tower and Ground Slam + Brutal Strikes to kill the wave. Malphite's ult is also game changing. Land it well, and enough times, and you're going to PWN the enemy team. His ult is truely and Unstoppable Force. If you do decide to run 0/9/21, you won't need the Movespeed Quints, due to Quickness . Seeing as you don't spec dodge anyway in runes/boots, it doesn't seem worth it to spec the defense tree. You'd grab Quints of Fortitude or Armor for teh lulz. Another reason why I don't see the point in Quints of Swiftness is because of Seismic Shard.

4) "Not an actual tanky DPS, so offensive items don't synergize very well."
lol, Malphite is actually the best tanky DPS in the entire game ^^ A steriod that gives you 40% attack damage for 6 seconds. That's astonishing. Build him like a melee dps, ie, Trinity, Youmuu's, IE, BloodThirster etc, and his damage is through the roof. Not expecting this in your guide though, lol. It's more of an interesting thing to note :)


"Doesn't have a strong escape mechanism." His ult is a complete escape ;) Seismic Shard + Ground Slam + Brutal Strikes should make you virtually unkillable, unchasable and very much alive. If not, just Unstoppable Force over a wall. Worried it won't be up for the next teamfight? Don't, you've spec'd in the Utility Tree ;)

5) Going back to tree spec'ing. Strength of Spirit is pretty bad I believe, especially on Malphite seeing as his mana pool is really tiny. Maybe you could spec 9/0/21. 3 of Malph's abilities deal magic damage, and if you're jungling, the magic pen of Archaic Knowledge will speed things up. Not to mention extra cooldowns from Sorcery ;)

6) Alternative seals would be good - like, more visible demonstrations of those alternatives.

7) With the questions within your guide, you could have them set out like in my Vayne guide ^^
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!!! University > Reviewing !!!



>>> I will review however many guides I feel like Per Day <<<




ATTENTION: Due to a huge influx of requests, I have now implemented some requirements. This is so I don't end up reviewing a guide who's author doesn't care, or reviewing a guide that is really bad, or reviewing a guide that has not clicked on the link above. If you want me to spend over half an hour reading your guide and writing a reply, you can very well return the favour!

REQUIREMENTS:
- Author must have +100 Posts
- Guide must have been run through a spell and grammar check
- Author must be over Summoner Level 25
- Author must comment on my Ashe guide with their opinion.


If you are LUCKY, your guide will be reviewed by other members, such as: Searz, PsiGuard, da_Neo, Rudmed, Bloofyre, and Bryun. They drop in from time to time to help with my workload. <3

* I will be completely honest in my opinion
* I will not downvote or upvote until I have received a response from my review, and I see you have dropped your opinion of my Ashe guide in the comment section
* I will review your request as soon as physically and mentally possible

* At the completion of my Review, I will post my verdict of your guide here, along with my review (verdicts are featured in the below post)

You must use this format below for submitting a guide for review, otherwise I'll ignore your request. People who just drop their links here will be completely ignored.

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What do I expect in return? Read/vote on my >> Complete & Comprehensive Compiled Catalogue of Ashe Knowledge <<, +rep me, and a simple thank you would be lovely ^^

OTHER RULES/NOTES:
- Please only submit one guide per request.
- Please do not request a review on a champion who has not been released. I would also prefer to read only guides published on MobaFire.
- If you are rude to me in your response to my review, I will consider not featuring you in the below post.
- If I read your guide. And you have not read the links I have supplied in this post. I will literally asplode. And you will be charged with my death.


Common Things I Repeat In Most Of My Reviews


  • ONE BUILD. Show me one build, the one you use 90% of the time, in your cheat sheet. NO NEED, EVER, to display more than one cheat sheet. All alternative items can be explained in your Situational/Alternative Items section.
  • Good Hands IS ****ING BETTER THAN PERSEVERANCE. Jesus Christ.
  • Colour is good. Too much colour is bad. Find the correct balance.
  • Paragraphical space. Walls of text = bad. Sparse text = bad. Find the correct balance.




Reviewable Guides

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 6412
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Guide For (champion): Caitlyn
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: New guide and I would appreciate the attention as well as a point out on any obvious flaws.
What I'd like you to focus on: Guide aesthetics and ways to improve it, especially the video section - is it necessary?
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/caitlyn-yordle-killing-101-122238


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 101 as of this post I believe
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Firefox grabs spelling errors with underlines as I type so the only ones that might have been missed are ones that my eyes couldn't pick out. Bad vision messes me up sometimes :(
Guide For (champion): Sona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm always looking for feedback on the guide itself. I take pride in this guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: Format and content mostly. General advice will be appreciated of course.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sona-super-support-revamped-for-support-overhaul-77657


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 2535
Spell & Grammar check completed: Spelling-yes, grammar-mostly
Guide For (champion): Kayle
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to see some constructive criticism, I have some sheep vote and "Tank Kayle is for noobs" kind of comments, but nothing particularly helpful lately.
What I'd like you to focus on: Whatever you feel needs commenting on
Guide Link: Kayle, Paladin of the League

ShadowNet wrote:

Summoner Level:30
Post Count (at time of request):274
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: To make it perfect. 3rd time I'm submitting, feels like going to a doctor.
What I'd like you to focus on: Everything, by everything I mean everything. Make 30 points instead of 10 so I would submit less. :d
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/carry-me-morde-108278

NicknameMy wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request):564
Spell & Grammar check completed: Not really, i cannot do it^^. Google Translate sucks...
Guide For (champion): Master Yi
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Re-Review, I changed many things around. It is now more a general Yi guide with the focus at "Final" Yi.
What I'd like you to focus on: The changed things.
Guide Link: "Final" Yi, King of Jungle

ZioSerpe wrote:
Summoner Level:30
Post Count:103
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Guide For: Poppy
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: having some major gaming opinion on my unique build
What I'd like you to focus on: gameplay, guide form
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/harder-better-faster-stronger-115842

Ssyrak wrote:
Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request - counting this post): 86
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES (I'm German so please don't expect perfect English. But I did my best)
Guide For (champion): Leona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I put a lot work in my guide. I wanted to give players a well written and in-depth guide to Leona as she is a real powerful and funny champ to play. A review would help improving it.
What I'd like you to focus on: When reading my guide you should focus on anything that is important for yourself as I want a honest opinion.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/daughter-of-amun-ra-an-indepth-guide-to-leona-101449?page=1

Blydden wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 223 (224 including this one?)
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Guide For (champion): Ezreal
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to know if I've written my guide correctly this time. I really do.
What I'd like you to focus on: My format. I believe that the information is all correct this time especially, as I have examined my numbers myself and theorycrafted on this champion, Ezreal, more than two hundred times. I just want it to be an interesting read, as well as informative.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/how-to-master-prodigious-spellcraft-104051

Lugignaf wrote:

Summoner Level: Lugignaf
Post Count (at time of request): 3831
Spell & Grammar check completed: Eyup
Guide For (champion): Nasus
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's my third Nasus guide and currently riding the lines of 5th/6th highest rated. It is also my first guide to get over 20 votes and I just want to be drawing as much attention to it as I can.
What I'd like you to focus on: Alternate item choices and explanations. I'm not a person who explains stuff IRL too well and, I know some of that has transferred into my guide
Guide Link: NASUS ES NUMERO UNO!

Trojan995 wrote:

Summoner level: 30
Post count at request: 2338
Spell/Grammar check: Yeah
Guide for: Twisted Fate
Why I'd like this to be reviewed: I didn't have my last guide reviewed because it got a lot of exposure so I didn't worry too much about it, but this one has gotten so few votes. I didn't work very hard on it when it first came out but I switched around the build a lot and I rewrote the description to be more detailed, so now I've put a lot more effort into it and I'd like to see what touch-ups I can do to make it perfect.
guide link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/twisted-fate-card-games-119009

Symphunny wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 238
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Cho'Gath
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I am looking for further possible improvements as well as tips to organization.
What I'd like you to focus on: jungle section, i need help in really improving it
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/junglin-cho-holy-shyt-dont-eat-me-revising-soon-63383

Quoted:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 295
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Guide For (champion): Renekton
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Just created it. Would like some feedback.
What I'd like you to focus on: Everything! Format, layout, build, etc!
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/fednekton-interior-crocodile-alligator-125283

I know some of these are out of order, when I open things in a new tab they tend to go everywhere, so sorry about that.

I'm also sorry about keeping you all waiting, it's just that university is actually hard this semester, requiring me to attend classes (I know, I'm amazing), do assignments earlier, and I'm going to have to study HARD for algebra and calculus =.=

I'll try to get reviewing soon. I don't promise that I'll be finished with the list tonight, or tomorrow, or on the weekend. But I will try and make my way through it. If my review is too rushed for you, please don't hesitate to come back with a new request :)

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I worked some things out since your last review of my build and added a ranked game section :D
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Jebus McAzn's Caitlyn Guide
Verdict: A very in-depth and detailed Caitlyn guide. Everything you could possibly want to know about Caitlyn and more. Great guide.
Possible Improvements: This guide isn't for someone who can't stand walls of text, or can't sit still for a long amount of time. The amount of information in this guide is phenomenal, it is fantastic. However, the huge walls of text are also a down point of the guide, as it needs a lot more colour and images to make it readable in one sitting.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Your guide lacks a lot of colour. Bold does not cut it. In your Pros/Cons section, you could colour each hyphen to make each point more distinguished.

2) "By spamming your Q, you're only pushing the lane and probably laning" - landing.

3) Skill explanation section looks a bit bland. How about putting in a repeated image of the skill before the skill in order to separate them more distinctly? ie:

or a large icon of the same thing centred before the skill?

You just need something to separate each skill, even if you coloured the titles differently. It's just really wall of texty.

4) Easier way of doing those columns in Rune Explanations:
Greater Mark of Desolation
Greater Mark of Desolation
spa I run full armor pen marks to increase my damage against squishy characters and all characters in general. Armor penetration is a no-brainer on most AD carries. Never take any other Mark on her.

looks neater. "spa" will be invisible in the actual guide.

5) Videos section is fine ^^
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Confehdehrehtheh's Sona Guide
Verdict: An absolutely fantastic Sona guide, that is in-depth and covers all item possibilities (yes, I've bought Stark's on her before!). I definitely recommend reading this guide.
Possible Improvements: I have only one: an AP build. The author states that they often buy RoA in a normal game - why not base the guide off this? While Sona is a support, due to the sustain changes, she's not really the spammy healer she used to be, and her damage has been increased - why not capitalise on this and build AP? Archangels and RoA? ^^

Constructive Criticism:

1) <3 Sona. Just wondering if this has been updated after the sustain nerf...

2) Items: I'm not too sure about them. Mainly Eleisa's in particular. Especially when you are making Sona an AP powerhouse with runes, it seems odd you're sticking with the support items. I'd suggest grabbing Rod of Ages or AA even, due to Sona's spamming and because you are runing her to be an AP support. Early philsopher's stone is fine, but you could also run Doran's Ring to boost your AP.

3) Great guide for Support Sona, but I'd like to see an AP Sona, with RoA as core. Just my opinion +1

I'm EXTREMELY sorry about the short review, but your guide is literally perfect.
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oh damn jhoijhoi, so hard working x]

keep it up!


Special thanks to Brynollf, -FanArt-, Xiaowiriamu (x3), Spooon, reppinFTC and jhoijhoi for making the awesome sigs :P
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jhoijhoi wrote:

6) In your summoner spells section, have Cleanse and Exhaust in the same column formatting as Flash and Ignite. This will make it look neater.


Thanks for the review and the feedback, I replied to it in the comments in the guide. I have a question about this point though. The spells were actually in the same column format, I tried messing with it a bit but couldn't get it right. I tried a new format (one from your guide to make a guide) and it still looks rather messy :/ Any way I can fix this?
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jhoijhoi wrote:

Xiron's Wukong Guide
Verdict: Incredible Wukong guide. Everything you could possibly want to know about this champion is listed here in an easy to read and aesthetically pleasing format!
Possible Improvements: Chapter organisation is a bit messy, and the Situational Items chapter is weird, but the rest of the guide is fantastic. Immediate +1.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Good summoners, good runes, good masteries. Pros/Cons looks great ;)

2) Summoner Spells section looks really awkward. I'd suggest removing them from column formatting and try using the "float" coding, or having a separate column for each summoner spell (like the item section in my Morgana guide).

3) No need for listing useless summoner spells.

4) Skill sequence should go under your skill explanation.

5) Not sure why you have so many line separators in your Situational Items section.

6) Awesome guide. Deserves to be at the top.


Thank you! Oh my god. I'm so happy to read this.
Thanks to Arcana3!

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Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 126
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES (I'm sure some slipped past me).
Guide For (champion): Talon
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm a novice guide writer and know it needs some improvement.
What I'd like you to focus on: I'm not worried about format so much as I am worried about content.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/talon-assassin-extraordinaire-129230
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hey jhoijhoi , did ya already see my re=submit at page 86?
Just thought i would remind ya cuz i don't see myself on the current list o.o
Thanks to Plickz and Alexanpt for the awesome Sigs!
And check out my build on skarner

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