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Creator: jhoijhoi June 29, 2011 5:44pm
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I'm busy with university, but I thought I'd update this to show I haven't forgot about anyone (though if I missed your request, just request again!).


!!! University > Reviewing !!!



>>> I will review however many guides I feel like Per Day <<<




ATTENTION: Due to a huge influx of requests, I have now implemented some requirements. This is so I don't end up reviewing a guide who's author doesn't care, or reviewing a guide that is really bad, or reviewing a guide that has not clicked on the link above. If you want me to spend over half an hour reading your guide and writing a reply, you can very well return the favour!

REQUIREMENTS:
- Author must have +100 Posts
- Guide must have been run through a spell and grammar check
- Author must be over Summoner Level 25
- Author must comment on my Ashe guide with their opinion.


If you are LUCKY, your guide will be reviewed by other members, such as: Searz, da_Neo, Rudmed, Bloofyre, Bryun, and Nighthawk. They drop in from time to time to help with my workload. <3

* I will be completely honest in my opinion
* I will not downvote or upvote until I have received a response from my review, and I see you have dropped your opinion of my Ashe guide in the comment section
* I will review your request as soon as physically and mentally possible

* At the completion of my Review, I will post my verdict of your guide here, along with my review (verdicts are featured in the below post)

You must use this format below for submitting a guide for review, otherwise I'll ignore your request. People who just drop their links here will be completely ignored.

Summoner Level:
Post Count (at time of request):
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES/NO
Guide For (champion):
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:
What I'd like you to focus on:
Guide Link:

What do I expect in return? Read/vote on my >> Complete & Comprehensive Compiled Catalogue of Ashe Knowledge <<, +rep me, and a simple thank you would be lovely ^^

OTHER RULES/NOTES:
- Please only submit one guide per request.
- Please do not request a review on a champion who has not been released. I would also prefer to read only guides published on MobaFire.
- If you are rude to me in your response to my review, I will consider not featuring you in the below post.
- If I read your guide. And you have not read the links I have supplied in this post. I will literally asplode. And you will be charged with my death.


Common Things I Repeat In Most Of My Reviews


  • ONE BUILD. Show me one build, the one you use 90% of the time, in your cheat sheet. NO NEED, EVER, to display more than one cheat sheet. All alternative items can be explained in your Situational/Alternative Items section.
  • Good Hands IS ****ING BETTER THAN PERSEVERANCE. Jesus Christ.
  • Colour is good. Too much colour is bad. Find the correct balance.
  • Paragraphical space. Walls of text = bad. Sparse text = bad. Find the correct balance.




Reviewable Guides

Summoner lvl: 30
Post count: 251
Spelling and grammar: I believe so O.o
Guide for: lee sin
Why? I'm pretty new(kind of), so I still want more advice and maybe things i can improve on(I know there's lots)
What to focus on: anything you see fit. Perhaps I should go more in depth....hmm
Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/listen-to-their-heartbeat-a-jungle-lee-sin-build-116481

Keels wrote:

Summoner level: 30
Post count: 555
Spell/ Grammar Check complete? Always. Yes.
Guide for: Singed
Why I'd like this to be reviewed: Jhoi , your making a guide guide was a huge influence. I listened last time to your criticisms of my Renekton build, and I think it paid off. Plus duff's kinda been trawling my builds a bit, and I'd like a second opinion. No offense to him, I've been listening, but a second opinion would be nice.
What I'd like you to focus on: Do I need some more humor? I worked pretty hard to make it look nice, and I'd like to see what you think of it. Is the strategy described sound? Anything you can think of. Unless this is a bad time. I looked to blow people away on this guide.
Guide link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/singed-his-chemical-romance-ap-hp-99768

Quoted:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): a bit over 100 last time I check'd.
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES, but I am 14yrs old, studied English for around 8yrs. I'm not perfect.
Guide For (champion): Kennen
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to improve it :)
What I'd like you to focus on: I don't know, about everything.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/kennen-the-off-tank-ninja-102793

Khazem wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count: 101
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For: Nasus
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to have a more experienced Mobafire users opinion, as this is my first guide. I've also recently completely remade it so I'd like some fresh opinions on that.
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything I can improve on, anything I forgot to add or could add, anything I could do to make it look better.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/nasus-whys-this-tank-hitting-me-for-half-my-health-107987

Xiron wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count: 309
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For: Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: You gave me the advise to archive my old wukong guide and create a new one. Then you'd read it again. Did it. Also i want to get my guide known.
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you can find.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-u-no-steal-bananas-new-123062

PsiGuard wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count: 606
Spelling and Grammar check: In soviet russia, poster spellchecks YOUR guides! I did JUST publish it though, so let me know if you notice anything amiss, including any formatting errors or random text (I had some placeholder text in each section so it would save).
Guide for: Malphite
Why I'd like this to be reviewed: I've appreciated your reviews in the past and have usually changed one thing or another to improve my guide as a result. I'll be sure to thank you in my guide this time. ;)
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything that comes to mind. Any new and brilliant ideas for new additions would be nice, as it's a very conventional guide at the moment without anything super-unique. Also you've suggested columns on my viable items section in my Noct guide. If I do adopt that format, I will change both, but for now they're just listed vertically.
Guide Link: Rocking Solo Top With Malphite


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 6412
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Caitlyn
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: New guide and I would appreciate the attention as well as a point out on any obvious flaws.
What I'd like you to focus on: Guide aesthetics and ways to improve it, especially the video section - is it necessary?
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/caitlyn-yordle-killing-101-122238


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 101 as of this post I believe
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Firefox grabs spelling errors with underlines as I type so the only ones that might have been missed are ones that my eyes couldn't pick out. Bad vision messes me up sometimes :(
Guide For (champion): Sona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm always looking for feedback on the guide itself. I take pride in this guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: Format and content mostly. General advice will be appreciated of course.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sona-super-support-revamped-for-support-overhaul-77657


Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 2535
Spell & Grammar check completed: Spelling-yes, grammar-mostly
Guide For (champion): Kayle
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to see some constructive criticism, I have some sheep vote and "Tank Kayle is for noobs" kind of comments, but nothing particularly helpful lately.
What I'd like you to focus on: Whatever you feel needs commenting on
Guide Link: Kayle, Paladin of the League

ShadowNet wrote:

Summoner Level:30
Post Count (at time of request):274
Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes
Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: To make it perfect. 3rd time I'm submitting, feels like going to a doctor.
What I'd like you to focus on: Everything, by everything I mean everything. Make 30 points instead of 10 so I would submit less. :d
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/carry-me-morde-108278

NicknameMy wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request):564
Spell & Grammar check completed: Not really, i cannot do it^^. Google Translate sucks...
Guide For (champion): Master Yi
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Re-Review, I changed many things around. It is now more a general Yi guide with the focus at "Final" Yi.
What I'd like you to focus on: The changed things.
Guide Link: "Final" Yi, King of Jungle

ZioSerpe wrote:
Summoner Level:30
Post Count:103
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For: Poppy
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: having some major gaming opinion on my unique build
What I'd like you to focus on: gameplay, guide form
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/harder-better-faster-stronger-115842

Ssyrak wrote:
Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request - counting this post): 86
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES (I'm German so please don't expect perfect English. But I did my best)
Guide For (champion): Leona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I put a lot work in my guide. I wanted to give players a well written and in-depth guide to Leona as she is a real powerful and funny champ to play. A review would help improving it.
What I'd like you to focus on: When reading my guide you should focus on anything that is important for yourself as I want a honest opinion.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/daughter-of-amun-ra-an-indepth-guide-to-leona-101449?page=1

Blydden wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 223 (224 including this one?)
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Ezreal
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to know if I've written my guide correctly this time. I really do.
What I'd like you to focus on: My format. I believe that the information is all correct this time especially, as I have examined my numbers myself and theorycrafted on this champion, Ezreal, more than two hundred times. I just want it to be an interesting read, as well as informative.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/how-to-master-prodigious-spellcraft-104051

Lugignaf wrote:

Summoner Level: Lugignaf
Post Count (at time of request): 3831
Spell & Grammar check completed: Eyup
Guide For (champion): Nasus
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It's my third Nasus guide and currently riding the lines of 5th/6th highest rated. It is also my first guide to get over 20 votes and I just want to be drawing as much attention to it as I can.
What I'd like you to focus on: Alternate item choices and explanations. I'm not a person who explains stuff IRL too well and, I know some of that has transferred into my guide
Guide Link: NASUS ES NUMERO UNO!

Trojan995 wrote:

Summoner level: 30
Post count at request: 2338
Spell/Grammar check: Yeah
Guide for: Twisted Fate
Why I'd like this to be reviewed: I didn't have my last guide reviewed because it got a lot of exposure so I didn't worry too much about it, but this one has gotten so few votes. I didn't work very hard on it when it first came out but I switched around the build a lot and I rewrote the description to be more detailed, so now I've put a lot more effort into it and I'd like to see what touch-ups I can do to make it perfect.
guide link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/twisted-fate-card-games-119009

Symphunny wrote:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 238
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Cho'Gath
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I am looking for further possible improvements as well as tips to organization.
What I'd like you to focus on: jungle section, i need help in really improving it
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/junglin-cho-holy-shyt-dont-eat-me-revising-soon-63383

Quoted:

Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 295
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES
Guide For (champion): Renekton
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Just created it. Would like some feedback.
What I'd like you to focus on: Everything! Format, layout, build, etc!
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/fednekton-interior-crocodile-alligator-125283

I know some of these are out of order, when I open things in a new tab they tend to go everywhere, so sorry about that.

I'm also sorry about keeping you all waiting, it's just that university is actually hard this semester, requiring me to attend classes (I know, I'm amazing), do assignments earlier, and I'm going to have to study HARD for this ******ed Problem Solving in-class Exam for algebra and calculus =.=

I'll try to get reviewing soon. I don't promise that I'll be finished with the list tonight, or tomorrow, or on the weekend. But I will try and make my way through it. If my review is too rushed for you, please don't hesitate to come back with a new request :)

Sincerely,
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JakofAllSpaydes Lee Sin Jungle Guide
Verdict: A good short guide about items useful on Lee Sin.
Possible Improvements: Guide needs to focus more on the gameplay aspect, and cleaning up the aesthetics. Replace all the images with real wiki code. Good guide so far, though :)

Constructive Criticism:

1) Why not level E first?

2) You could display your runes in a neater/more comprehensive way.

3) BBCode for Masteries.

4) Try this formatting for large icons + text:
spa stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here. stuff about boots of speed here.

The "spa" will be invisible when you colour it black.

5) Wait. You don't know how to make the above coding and all the images are actually images? o.O Did you not read my guide about making a guide? =.=

6) I would not list useless items (Ionian Boots of Lucidity, Boots of Swiftness etc)

7) Center your videos.

8) Remove your warding section. It's not necessary. If you keep it, at least tidy up the URL.

9) You don't have much gameplay stuff...
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GOOD LUCK WITH UNIVERSITY JHOI! <3
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I archived my old Kayle guide and made some pretty significant changes.

You can find the new one here
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Keels' Singed Guide
Verdict: An in-depth Singed guide that seemed to cover the basics of playing him. Guide aesthetics were pretty good in some parts, but subpar in others.
Possible Improvements: Guide lacks a proper structure in terms of chapter organisation, and many of the chapters don't seem to flow because of the different ways of conveying information displayed. Author needs to work a little on making the guide prettier - extra enter spaces after and before headings would be a great start.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Not sure about starting with a Sapphire Crystal. While you'd have the mana to use your abilities, you won't have the mana regeneration... Try a Doran's Ring? Or at least list it as an alternative.

2) All your images are broken.

3) Center all your images.

4) Thanks for the credit <3

5) Facts about Singed can be moved into the introduction, and they can be displayed in a much nicer format that that, for example, list format.

6) Terms used could also be moved into the introduction.

7) Singed as compared to other tanks can be moved into the Pros/Cons section.

8) Pros/Cons section looks weird D:

9) Too much centered text throughout your guide makes it look ugly.

10) Not sure why there is a lot of space in your runes section. When using column formatting, always go:

enter
enter
columns
enter
enter

to allow for better flow between parts.

11) Runes could also be set up a bit better.

12) Items should be after all the pre-game stuff.

13) Summoner Spells should be right up the top.

14) Playstyle/Farming should be before 3v3's and 5v5's.

15) The "some nice things that people have said about my guide" could probably be removed. Just change it to a hall of fame.

16) Awh god. That summary :P <3
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Whated's Kennen Guide
Verdict: This is more of a Build than a Guide. However, the items, runes and masteries all suit an off-tank Kennen well, so the author has succeeded in that regard :)
Possible Improvements: Guide needs an update (rating is only Fresh), and it needs a bit of an aesthetic rehaul. The items chapter needs the most work, as it is the most awkward to look at. Additional chapters detailing Kennen gameplay and Kennen's abilities would be fantastic.

Constructive Criticism:

1) This is only "Fresh". Shows me you haven't updated it in a while.

2) No need to list all the Elixirs.

3) I'd suggest Zhonya's Hourglass instead of Sunfire Aegis.

4) 9/21 seems an odd choice for a caster, even though he doesn't have mana you can still spec decently in the Utility tree.

5) Put the Lore at the bottom, or delete it.

6) BBCode for masteries.

7) No need to have items on separate lines. ie:




vs



8) Center all large icons and all images.

9) No need to repeat those images again and again?

10) Summoner Spells before Items.

11) No ability explanations?

12) No gameplay chapter?
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jhoijhoi wrote:

1) Not sure about starting with a Sapphire Crystal. While you'd have the mana to use your abilities, you won't have the mana regeneration... Try a Doran's Ring? Or at least list it as an alternative.

I disagree. Singed isn't terribly mana hungry at any point in the game if you can manage your poison well. Sapphire Crystal + 2 pots gives you quite a bit of health regen (with Strength of Spirit and 2 pots) and allows you to build a fast Catalyst the Protector on your first trip back. The mana will also boost your health a bit thanks to Empowered Bulwark.
You could always list alternatives, but I think sapph+pots is the best personally. Some people choose to go with Boots 3pots and Doran's Shield.
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jhoijhoi wrote:

4) 9/21 seems an odd choice for a caster, even though he doesn't have mana you can still spec decently in the Utility tree.

It's fairly common. I've always gone with utility, but a lot of people argue that there are too many filler masteries in the utility tree to warrant going all the way to the bottom (you can't get Meditation and stuff like that, and Intelligence isn't as useful). The defensive tree has its own benefits, but you'll be missing out on Awareness and Presence of the Master mostly. I think listing both options would be prudent.
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Khazem's Nasus Guide
Verdict: An absolutely fantastic Nasus guide. One of the better ones I have seen on MobaFire. No one will ever replace Hyfe in my heart, but this is a really good effort!
Possible Improvement: The chapter organisation is a bit off, and some screenshots of success with this build would be good, even some videos scattered here and there for us kinaesthetic learners :) Otherwise, great guide. I can't upvote is, as my housemate, Patch, already has.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Teleport, yes, Ghost? Not sure. Perhaps Exhaust would be beneficial. Don't tell me Nasus has an in-built Exhaust, I know that. It's for the double effect, one after the other. Makes up for Nasus not having a gap closer.

2) Try Quints of Swiftness. Much easier to last hit with Siphoning Strike.

3) I'd level Wither up over Spirit Fire, but not if I'm solo top.

4) Center all images.

5) Great guide aesthetics!

6) In your summoner spells section, have Cleanse and Exhaust in the same column formatting as Flash and Ignite. This will make it look neater.

7) Large icons inside paragraphical text looks bad (cloth armour and pots).

8) Center large icons.

9) Very nice use of the float tool.

10) Skill explanation (and skill sequence) before items.

11) "When to pick Nasus" after Pros/cons.

12) PROPS FOR GETTING A COMMENT FROM HYFE. HI FIVE MAN, HI FIVE.
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Xiron's Wukong Guide
Verdict: Incredible Wukong guide. Everything you could possibly want to know about this champion is listed here in an easy to read and aesthetically pleasing format!
Possible Improvements: Chapter organisation is a bit messy, and the Situational Items chapter is weird, but the rest of the guide is fantastic. Immediate +1.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Good summoners, good runes, good masteries. Pros/Cons looks great ;)

2) Summoner Spells section looks really awkward. I'd suggest removing them from column formatting and try using the "float" coding, or having a separate column for each summoner spell (like the item section in my Morgana guide).

3) No need for listing useless summoner spells.

4) Skill sequence should go under your skill explanation.

5) Not sure why you have so many line separators in your Situational Items section.

6) Awesome guide. Deserves to be at the top.

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