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[quote=ShadowNet]I've been thinking about adding a whole chapter about spell vamp (path of the sparkling spell vampire) but I'll probably do it after I come back from my vacation.[/quote]

[quote=Siveo]Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 77 with this one Spell & Grammar check completed: I did it but English is not my foreign language so ... Guide For (champion): Shen Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: First guide I've made, looking for some comments on how I play with him. What I'd like you to focus on: Uhm, everything? [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/dont-mess-with-the-shen-98615]My Shen Build[/url][/quote]

[quote=Rudmed][quote=Siveo] Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 77 with this one Spell & Grammar check completed: I did it but English is not my foreign language so ... Guide For (champion): Shen Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: First guide I've made, looking for some comments on how I play with him. What I'd like you to focus on: Uhm, everything? [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/dont-mess-with-the-shen-98615]My Shen Build[/url] [/quote] I've taken a look at, and here my criticsm. Hey I'm just checking out your guide, and offering some constructive criticism. 1. Ryali's on [[Shen]].....Ryali's on [[Shen]]. Why? You say to chase escaping enemies, but chances are if they are escaping they have low health. Meaning they are out of the fight. Also Shen has only 1 damaging skill, and that is about the only good skill for it. So no, just not find a better item. 2. Pros/cons and all the pre-game stuff that you set up need to go before, your in-game stuff. 3. Center your pictures, or use columns. If you have not viewed jhoijhoi's how to make guides then you need to. It will help you clear up things, and make it more organized. 4. Double check for minor spelling, grammar issues. 5. Go more in-depth to use your skills. For example instead of mindlessly of [[shadow dash]] into a team, save it for the one causing the most trouble. Or use vorpal blade to mark your foes. You just need more. This can be found on your guide as well for quick reference.[/quote]

[quote=Searz]Rylai is a great optional item on Shen. HP and AP increases his threat level while also increasing his shield values (both ult and Feint). The slow is just an added bonus.[/quote]

[quote=Siveo][quote=Searz] Rylai is a great optional item on Shen. HP and AP increases his threat level while also increasing his shield values (both ult and Feint). The slow is just an added bonus. [/quote] When I read it, I had the same comment! It's not only the AP that increases [[Vorpal Blade]] but also the passive, and the 2 shields! For the other points, I'm working on it! Give me some time and it will look better! Thanks for the review![/quote]

[quote=Xiron][quote=NicknameMy] I answered on your guide. Maybe you can use it to improve your guide. [/quote] Okay. I edited (?) my Guide. U may read it again :P Tahnkz alot.[/quote]

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[/list][/indent] -------------- [center]Nighthawk has opened his own [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/forum/build-and-guide-discussion/reviews-rus-will-read-your-guide-6949]Review Thread Here[/url]. Go ahead and check it out ^^[/center] ------------------------------------------ [center][color=#008000][b]Reviewable Guides[/b][/color][/center] [quote=Searz] Summoner Level: [color=#ff0080][b]HURR[/b][/color] Post Count: 4000-5000 or so. Spell & Grammar check completed: I don't misspell. >:3 Guide For (champion): None. Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I basically want to hear your opinion on the guide and what I could improve. because I'm currently (almost) lost on what I could change. What I'd like you to focus on: That^. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/rune-tips-what-secondary-and-primary-means-and-more-24255 [/quote] [quote=Rudmed] Summoner Level:30 Post Count (at time of request): 36 Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For (champion): Tanks Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Final check to ensure it is kind to the eyes, and nourshing to the mind. What I'd like you to focus on: anything Guide Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/comprehensive-how-to-tank-guide-81094?page=1]Tanks....okay[/url] [/quote] [quote=VoiD] Summoner Level:30 Post Count (at time of request):500 ish Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For (champion):Brand Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:It's brand free week so i want people to not suck. What I'd like you to focus on:anything really Guide Link:http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/brand-how-to-kill-maokai-in-2-seconds-111206 [/quote] [quote=ShadowNet] Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 213 Spell & Grammar check completed: Yes Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Polished the guide after criticism. What I'd like you to focus on: Again anything you find wrong. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/carry-me-morde-108278 [/quote] [quote=NicknameMy] Summoner Level: 30 (ELO: 1147...) Post Count (at time of request): 349(with this one) Spell & Grammar check completed: YEN(Well, i am german^^. No gurantee for no mistakes, but i readed the guide very often.) Guide For (champion): [color=green][[Master Yi]][/color] Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: This guide got downvoted very hard and i want to know, why... What I'd like you to focus on: All^^. Only a complete guide is a complete guide. If you find something wrong, you could tell me so i can correct. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/quot-final-quot-yi-king-of-jungle-104375 [/quote] [quote=Xiron] Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 233 Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For (champion): Wukong Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I wanna get my Guide more know AND improve it. What I'd like you to focus on: Everything. Just read it. [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-u-no-steal-bananas-108211]Guide Link[/url] [/quote][/quote]

[quote=Nighthawk]3 guides, sorely tempted to implement that myself.[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/rune-tips-what-secondary-and-primary-means-and-more-24255?page=46#lastcomment]Searz's Rune Guide[/url] [color=#ff0000]Verdict:[/color] A very helpful, and useful guide about Rune Purchasing. I honestly wish I had seen this guide before I had went ahead and bought a full page of Attack Speed Runes when I hit level 20. [color=#008000]Possible Improvements:[/color] I find the guide is a bit dry to read, and a tad non-aesthetically pleasing. This is most likely due to the lack of images to break up the text. Some coding, like Indents, would go really nicely with your ranking system, and the guide could do with some more colour. Using the new embedding system would be great too, to emphasis those generic "Caster, tank, dps" rune selections. Just think about how you could make your guide more fun to read. Constructive Criticism: 1) In your Primary Runes section, you have "Marks: Penetration" - should probably say "Armor Penetration" 2) With regards to your ranking, perhaps consider a different ranking style. What has "S" got to do with being great? I know in each section you've placed them in order, but maybe an easier way of looking at it, like: [quote=searz]Marks A+: ArP, MrP A: AS, CrC, AD B: MR, Armor C: AP/lvl, MP5, CrD, AD/lvl, AP Fail:Rank: HP, HP/lvl, Mana/lvl, Mana, CDR, MR/lvl[/quote] Basically I was confused with the S and F. Does S stand for high achievement, or something? And in Australia we have no "F" for fail, we have "E". So yeah. Small thing lol. 3) The only other thing I can think of is listing all the runes in terms of the wikicode, so people can hover their mouses over them and SEE why they are placed in each category.[/quote]

[quote=Nighthawk][quote=jhoijhoi] I honestly wish I had seen this guide before I had went ahead and bought a full page of Attack Speed Runes when I hit level 20. [/quote] loooool <3[/quote]