jhoijhoi's review & discussion service

[quote=jhoijhoi][columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- GrandmasterD [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/grandmistressds-viktor-with-utmost-efficiency-287307]SR APC Viktor[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- [color=#008000]4.5/6[/color] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 05/08/13 [/columns] [spoiler=GrandmasterD's APC Viktor Guide Review] As per your request for a review [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/forum/build-and-guide-discussion/will-review-for-food-i-will-read-your-guide-6053]here[/url] :) [b]CHEAT SHEET[/b] ----------------------- + Obviously I'm not a Viktor player, but to me, it sounds like common sense to grab your slow(+maybe stun) at level 3 to help ganks, or to prevent ganks. [b]GUIDE[/b] -------------------- + "rated mid-lane player at the Europe-West server" > "on the" + Iceborn? o.o + Don't like the copy paste skill set. It's pretty useless. + Don't like the copy paste of the augments. Why not just put your explanations in their place? Or at least summarise the stats in an easy to read manner, so readers at a glance can figure out which item would suit their playstyle more. + I really like your professional manner of writing, I feel as if I'm reading something that has been peer-referenced for publishing. + "exploited to deny your enemy as much as possible" - deny them what? Remember, you're writing this guide for new players. Try to add that little bit extra to explain what you mean. You do this a lot through the guide, such as mentioning trading. What is a trade? One piece of advice that really improved my gameplay was, "Scratch damage adds up". + Awkward wording, "to not open directly with Gravity Field so you can anticipate better on their movement." + I think your Strategy and Tricks section should be moved before the Gameplay section, or mixed in, as it seems like you discuss aspects of gameplay, finish, and then come back to gameplay. + I feel like your synergy/counter sections should be at the beginning or your guide. People mainly read MobaFire guides in the loading screen, or in champion select. If the enemy team has an Ahri and someone wants to play Viktor, they'll want to know that they really should pick someone else (thanks guide!). + "GrandmistressD," > random comma. [b]READABILITY (2.5/3)[/b] ---------------------- + I enjoyed reading this; there were few errors, and those errors were mainly syntax, wherein sentences were worded weirdly. Aesthetically, your guide is fine. I dislike the formatting, mainly because of the huge empty space on the left. Perhaps if you cut the guide off around skilling order and the rest of the guide flowed normally? Dunno. [b]CONTENT (2/3)[/b] ----------------------- + Skill section and augment section made me sad. If you wrote them in your own words, explained the ability/item, it'd make your guide far more in-depth. Some of your item choices aren't explained in enough detail; for instance, Zhonya's seems to be a core item, but nothing is explained about it beyond the fact that it synergies with an ability of his. Like, why else is it core? I think you can go into more detail about item choices and why they are important; you spend more words describing unimportant items! Some video gameplay, or images of how his abilities can be effectively used (such as the chokepoints you described) would be a great asset to your guide. [b]VIABILITY (Not Applicable)[/b] ------------------------ + I have no idea about Viktor at all, and I don't think it's fair if I try to grade this via viability. Based off the cheat sheet alone, you seem to have listed AP and survivability items, which is great for the reader. You could go into more detail regarding your notes (optional). [b]TOTAL = 4.5/6[/b] ------------------------ + I'm not sure if I learnt how to play Viktor by reading your guide. You mention roaming and ganking, but never mention how or when (like when to leave the lane, or how to get there). You mention the different augments and I don't think you really get across which augment is the strongest and why (this could be just your writing style, which is very passive). I know this review is pretty useless :/ I really don't know Viktor well enough to comment on the build/runes/masteries etc. So all I'm left with is readability and content D: <3 jhoi [/spoiler][/quote]

[quote=nanoobit]name: noobnait guide: [url = http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/king-khazix-341529] King Kha'zox[/url] Read Guide: Yes Spell Check: Yes[/quote]

[quote=pepsiM4A1]Guide For: Me. Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Because I am willing to either add or perfectionize the actual information. What I'd like you to focus on: Everything. Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/out-of-elo-hell-series-top-lane-jayce-341800[/quote]

[quote=YeaISupport]Name: YeaISupport. My Summoner IGN: iPlay4Heal (if you want to know) Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/zyra-support-from-the-mother-nature-342974]Here![/url] One does not simply make a guide without reading Jhoijhoi's [[Karthus]] guide. Spell check: Yes ma'am. Would love:[List] [*]Your feedback about my items. Lots of them being expensive and unique, but some of those items, I did test (Liandry, Zhonya, Rylai) and also were recommended by people like Astrolia and Xpecial, and some of the items are from Burning Bush [[Zyra]] variant :) [*]How can I improve my general BBCode? This is still my second guide, so I need a lot of (advanced) helps! [*]Since my aspiration is being a teacher, I would love how I can improve this guide's teach-ability! [/List] In return: [List][*][icon=Total Biscuit of Rejuvenation size=25] [*]Maybe a poem. [*]+Rep. Just asking, I can +Rep you multiple times right? XD[/quote]

[quote=Bioalchemist]Name: Bioalchemist Link: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/in-depth-ahri-guide-hit-charm-keep-calm-331330]here[/url] Have i read your guide? yes the author clearly did (i have also). Have you run your guide through a spell check? YES. i edited the guide from top to bottom. Why do i want you to review it? its a great guide but got pushed aside because the author is not a native english speaker so i am working with the author to get it some love. thanks jhoi :)[/quote]

[quote=DoomGlad]Name: DoomGlad Link: In My Signature Did you read my Guide to Making a Guide just now? Of course Have you run your guide through a spell check? Yes[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi][columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- DoomGlad [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/s4-ad-carry-vayne-364451]SR ADC Vayne[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- [color=#008000]7/10[/color] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 01/01/14 [/columns] [spoiler=DoomGlad's ADC Vayne Guide Review] Starting the year off with a bang! As per your request for a review [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/forum/build-and-guide-discussion/will-review-for-food-i-will-read-your-guide-6053]here[/url] :) [b]CHEAT SHEET[/b] ----------------------- + I personally never start with Doran's Blade any more. I've found it's more effective to buy Long Sword. 10 ad and 3 pots, vs 80hp, 8ad, a pot and 3 whole hp a hit. The only advantage of Doran's is the flat HP, which is one auto from the enemy ADC - but with Long Sword, you have THREE potions, AND if you have cookies, you have instant health back. Long Sword is far more gold efficient. + You don't mention upgrading your trinket. + I prefer utility, but defense is obviously good too. [b]GUIDE[/b] -------------------- + You tend to either repeat yourself a lot, or poorly word sentences. I'd read the guide out loud and see if you can pick up the odd phrases. + Well, you're certainly catering to the current crowd. People are more happy to read two sentences guides, than ones that try to go in-depth. + Your pros/cons chapter is missing a column. + Reading some of your previous comments, I'm surprised you changed your guide from maxing Tumble to maxing Silver Bolts. Bowed from pressure? Just remember, if you personally max Tumble, there's nothing wrong with that ^^ + "only form of hard cc on an ad carry" > incorrect + So which is Vayne's signature move? Tumble, or Final Hour? + Your Phantom Dancer explanation doesn't really reflect why you'd get it on Vayne. + Need to add enter spaces between the last few items. + Unfortunately, I feel that your simplised version of the gameplay section are detrimental. For instance, you mention last hitting, but you don't mention what it is. It's sort of funny. You pretty much have everything else there, BUT what last hitting really is. + Again, with zoning. [b]READABILITY (2.5/3)[/b] ---------------------- + Your guide is easy to read. There is plenty of good formatting techniques displayed from my Guide Making Guide, which you have put to good use. Most of the formatting is pleasing to the eye, but I'd recommend using columns, as opposed to float text; you'd get rid of all of that text overhang. [b]CONTENT (1.5/3)[/b] ----------------------- + I feel that your content is lacking. You cover the bare bones of every aspect; this was your goal however, as stated in the beginning of the guide. Some people really like short guides - unfortunately, I'm not one of them. That's just my opinion. You also lose points here for trying to keep things simple, but failing to explain things fully. And whilst most marksman gameplay sections will be similar, I can't help but draw parellels to my own Vayne guide, especially with your topic headings and style of organisation. This doesn't affect your score, just thought I'd mention it. [b]VIABILITY (3/4)[/b] ------------------------ + Your cheat sheet is perfectly viable; there are only certain things that come down to personal preference/play style, which is the Doran's start, and the 9 in defense. Everything else is how I'd play Vayne myself :) However, I never give full marks here, as there is always room for improvement within the viability of the guide content. [b]TOTAL = 7/10[/b] ------------------------ + All in all, your Vayne guide is exactly as you explained it; simple. That's not a bad thing. As stated earlier, a lot of people prefer guides with minimal explanations, and less coding, the way your guide is currently. You are catering to a large market of upvoters, so don't try and change anything just to please the small niche of people who prefer more information. Your guide was simple and easy to read. The coding was used appropriately, but could be edited with some finesse. In terms of graphical appeal, have you thought about looking for some artwork to supplement your guide? The graphic forum is always up for a challenge. Good luck to you and your guide! And I hope this review was helpful. - jhoi [/spoiler][/quote]

[quote=DoomGlad][quote=jhoijhoi] [columns] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]NAME[/b][/color] -------------------------------- DoomGlad [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]CHAMPION[/b][/color] -------------------------------- [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/s4-ad-carry-vayne-364451]SR ADC Vayne[/url] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#0080ff][b]RATING[/b][/color] ------------------------------- [color=#008000]7/10[/color] [nextcol width=30] [nextcol width=100][color=#ff8000][b]DATE[/b][/color] --------------------------- 01/01/14 [/columns] [spoiler=DoomGlad's ADC Vayne Guide Review] Starting the year off with a bang! As per your request for a review [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/forum/build-and-guide-discussion/will-review-for-food-i-will-read-your-guide-6053]here[/url] :) [b]CHEAT SHEET[/b] ----------------------- + I personally never start with Doran's Blade any more. I've found it's more effective to buy Long Sword. 10 ad and 3 pots, vs 80hp, 8ad, a pot and 3 whole hp a hit. The only advantage of Doran's is the flat HP, which is one auto from the enemy ADC - but with Long Sword, you have THREE potions, AND if you have cookies, you have instant health back. Long Sword is far more gold efficient. + You don't mention upgrading your trinket. + I prefer utility, but defense is obviously good too. [b]GUIDE[/b] -------------------- + You tend to either repeat yourself a lot, or poorly word sentences. I'd read the guide out loud and see if you can pick up the odd phrases. + Well, you're certainly catering to the current crowd. People are more happy to read two sentences guides, than ones that try to go in-depth. + Your pros/cons chapter is missing a column. + Reading some of your previous comments, I'm surprised you changed your guide from maxing Tumble to maxing Silver Bolts. Bowed from pressure? Just remember, if you personally max Tumble, there's nothing wrong with that ^^ + "only form of hard cc on an ad carry" > incorrect + So which is Vayne's signature move? Tumble, or Final Hour? + Your Phantom Dancer explanation doesn't really reflect why you'd get it on Vayne. + Need to add enter spaces between the last few items. + Unfortunately, I feel that your simplised version of the gameplay section are detrimental. For instance, you mention last hitting, but you don't mention what it is. It's sort of funny. You pretty much have everything else there, BUT what last hitting really is. + Again, with zoning. [b]READABILITY (2.5/3)[/b] ---------------------- + Your guide is easy to read. There is plenty of good formatting techniques displayed from my Guide Making Guide, which you have put to good use. Most of the formatting is pleasing to the eye, but I'd recommend using columns, as opposed to float text; you'd get rid of all of that text overhang. [b]CONTENT (1.5/3)[/b] ----------------------- + I feel that your content is lacking. You cover the bare bones of every aspect; this was your goal however, as stated in the beginning of the guide. Some people really like short guides - unfortunately, I'm not one of them. That's just my opinion. You also lose points here for trying to keep things simple, but failing to explain things fully. And whilst most marksman gameplay sections will be similar, I can't help but draw parellels to my own Vayne guide, especially with your topic headings and style of organisation. This doesn't affect your score, just thought I'd mention it. [b]VIABILITY (3/4)[/b] ------------------------ + Your cheat sheet is perfectly viable; there are only certain things that come down to personal preference/play style, which is the Doran's start, and the 9 in defense. Everything else is how I'd play Vayne myself :) However, I never give full marks here, as there is always room for improvement within the viability of the guide content. [b]TOTAL = 7/10[/b] ------------------------ + All in all, your Vayne guide is exactly as you explained it; simple. That's not a bad thing. As stated earlier, a lot of people prefer guides with minimal explanations, and less coding, the way your guide is currently. You are catering to a large market of upvoters, so don't try and change anything just to please the small niche of people who prefer more information. Your guide was simple and easy to read. The coding was used appropriately, but could be edited with some finesse. In terms of graphical appeal, have you thought about looking for some artwork to supplement your guide? The graphic forum is always up for a challenge. Good luck to you and your guide! And I hope this review was helpful. - jhoi [/spoiler] [/quote] Lol I just got shut down from the god. GG my dream xD. Sorry my guide wasn't up to your standards ;( On some side notes, what graphic visuals would you want and what do you mean by wrong columns in pros and cons section? (I suck at columns).[/quote]

[quote=IPodPulse]Name: IPodPulse Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/xlthunderzlxs-terrifying-tryndamere-preseason-update-306965 I did read your guide on how to make a guide, also your guide on BBcode. I have run a spellcheck on my guide, and I'm sure I got at least all the spelling correct.[/quote]

[quote=buttercup]Name: Buttercup Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/nami-the-tenacious-tidecaller-3-364478 Did you read my Guide to Making a Guide just now? Yes C: Have you run your guide through a spell check? Yes.[/quote]