jhoijhoi's review & discussion service

[quote=PsiGuard]He must be looking at the views on his guide -_-[/quote]

[quote=Bloofyre]Well, I figure I should start contributing around here, Jhoi has quite the line going in here, the least I can do is help. [quote=Xiron] Summoner Level: 30 Post Count (at time of request): 233 Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For (champion): Wukong Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I wanna get my Guide more know AND improve it. What I'd like you to focus on: Everything. Just read it. [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-u-no-steal-bananas-108211]Guide Link[/url] [/quote] Right off the bat, I notice that your skill points aren't possible. 7 in decoy just isn't gonna happen. Not sure what your skill sequence would look like so I wont comment on that until you get that sorted out. Also, just right off the bat, I don't see the focus of the guide, and maybe that is just from the quick view, as I don't see much resists, so you aren't going tanky DPS Wukong, and no attack speed. Who knows, maybe as I read on, I will see the focus and your reasoning behind it. Aesthetically, the updates section may want to be moved to the bottom. Not a big deal, but it typically is a skipped over section by readers so putting it towards the end is best for the people who do care (reviewers, yourself, someone genuinely interested in your guide). Also, I don't know if having the lore/story is adding anything to the guide other than taking up space. For the skills section, you have the tooltips, and you also have a brief description of them as well. I personally think this is kind of neat. But I can see some thinking of it as redundant. Also, giving a use to the skill, or saying the skill sequence could be useful. SPELLCHECK! Wukong utilizes his cleverness to trick his foes. He becomes stealthed for 1.5 seconds and leaves an uncontrollable decoy behind that will deal Magic Damage to enemies near it after 1.5 seconds. Your best friend if you like harassing your enemy. Jump in using Nimbus Strike and get away with this little thing. Also it gives u some nice surviving [color=red]abilitys[/color]. If you get caught alone, use it to reach a bush for example. should be spelled abilities. Masteries, overall, not bad, I wouldn't recommend 15/0/15 and you have the [[archmage's savvy]] not [[deadliness]] in that picture. Also, getting [[archaic knowledge]] is not necessary as only his decoy does magic damage. For [[exhaust]] go 3 in [[deadliness]] 1 in [[improved exhaust]] Runes section, you wrote attack spee I think you mean attack speed. I would steer away from AD yellows and blues, as they are just bad. also, you don't have any attack speed in your build, so crit chance is a bit silly in my eyes. armor blues are bad. Summoner spells that note is a bit small. I cant read it unless I copy paste it into my search bar. Your columns are weird looking. I'm guessing your coding has something like 5 column brackets in that section. use only one so it is aligned nicely. (or just remove it, because it is really ugly looking) GRAMMER! better dont use, not correct. Better not use. Is what it should say. For smite, you say jungeling. Re word that to, This is not a Jungle guide. Jungling looks like a weird word and you spelled it wrong, so stick to that. Skill sequence looks fine, now translate that into the quick view. Situation items has a coding error, [[frozen mallet] should be [[frozen mallet]] The tip is really nice. Liked it. Why not, you said Decay, not [[decoy]]. Also, try linking whenever you say something that has a tooltip, it adds depth to your guide and makes it less of a chore to read. Overall, a solid guide, could use some color.[/quote]

[quote=theBMB]Summoner Level:30 Post Count (at time of request):like 700 I think Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Guide For: items Why I'd like this to be Reviewed:Need feedback and exposure What I'd like you to focus on:Formatting Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/in-depth-item-guide-97205 thanks Jhoi (and/or whoever else reads this)[/quote]

[quote=jhoijhoi]Wow Bloo, thanks for the help :) Hopefully he'll update his guide with your feedback before I go and review it. Guys. I have a math exam soon. August 24 - MAB126 Exam August 26 - CLB446 Assignment August 26 - EDB007 Assignment September 5 - KWB109 Assignment As I finish the assignments/get them half done, I'll strike them off the list. Once they are gone, I can guarantee I'll be reviewing the list again. University > MobaFire :/[/quote]

[quote=Bloofyre]ahh no worries ;) I may be able to hit up a few more if/when I have time. It's the least I can do seeing how many you got lined up. It's a lot of work. between all of these, writing/editing any guides of your own, real life stuff (school/work), and then finding time to play. jeez. You can count on seeing me around a bit more from time to time.[/quote]

[quote=Siveo][quote=Bloofyre] ahh no worries ;) I may be able to hit up a few more if/when I have time. It's the least I can do seeing how many you got lined up. It's a lot of work. between all of these, writing/editing any guides of your own, real life stuff (school/work), and then finding time to play. jeez. You can count on seeing me around a bit more from time to time. [/quote] Don't forget her signature shop ;) Well yea, good luck on those exams! I'm happy I passed for all my exams so I don't have to do them again![/quote]

[quote=VKZ95]congratulations jhoijhoi, you now have 2 sticky topics[/quote]

[quote=Xiron]Good luck for your exams.[/quote]

[quote=Keels]Guide I'd like reviewed: [url=http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/singed-his-chemical-romance-ap-hp-99768?]My singed Guide.[/url] Why? Jhoi , your making a guide guide was a huge influence. I listened last time to your criticisms of my Renekton build, and I think it paid off. Plus duff's kinda been trawling my builds a bit, and I'd like a second opinion. No offense to him, I've been listening, but a second opinion would be nice. What I'd like you to focus on? Do I need some more humor? I worked pretty hard to make it look nice, and I'd like to see what you think of it. Is the strategy described sound? Anything you can think of. Unless this is a bad time. I looked to blow people away on this guide. Anytime you could get around to it, but anytime bloo could get around to it I guess. I like how he misspelled grammar in all caps down there, too lol just something I noticed. I realized only after writing the first part that I wouldn't be talking to jhoi.[/quote]

[quote=JakofAllSpaydes]Guide for Lee Sin: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/listen-to-their-heartbeat-a-jungle-lee-sin-build-116481 and if you have time - xin zhao - http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/chargin-targe-trinity-zhao-116883 Why? Well... I'm still kinda new. And I would like some advice and opinions and criticism. What I'd like you to focus on... Anything you see fit.[/quote]