Here is my re-submit , I did everything i could to fix my grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes.
Summoner Level: 29
Post Count (at time of request): 243
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES, I fixed almost everything i think(read my own guide 10 times or so xD).
Guide For (champion): skarner,the crystal vanguard
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to improve overal
What I'd like you to focus on: Well i would like you to focus on the build expenses and how the build is written. Is it boring/fun/easy etc.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sirspankalots-way-of-spanking-with-skarner-jungle-112315
Btw thanks for your previous vote , im like no.4 of top skarner guides now:D.
Summoner Level: 29
Post Count (at time of request): 243
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES, I fixed almost everything i think(read my own guide 10 times or so xD).
Guide For (champion): skarner,the crystal vanguard
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to improve overal
What I'd like you to focus on: Well i would like you to focus on the build expenses and how the build is written. Is it boring/fun/easy etc.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sirspankalots-way-of-spanking-with-skarner-jungle-112315
Btw thanks for your previous vote , im like no.4 of top skarner guides now:D.
Thanks to Plickz and Alexanpt for the awesome Sigs!
Check out my guide on Skarner, The Crystal Vanguard(press the sig)!
Kirluu wrote:
Why isn't my request on the review list ? o.o I believe it's at page 81.. :S
Mine is at page 80 ... And I've requested already before that but that request went a little lost :D
Well yea, I can wait! I'm a very patient man/boy (@jhoijhoi: I'm also 19, you decide ;) )
Thanks for the review. Heres what I did and didnt change.
Constructive Criticism:
1) While it's true many people buy multiple Doran's, I would not suggest actually displaying that in your guide. Keep it short and neat. Mention getting extra Doran's in the text itself, but not visually in the Purchase Order.
Many people, myself included, will just look at a build and not read the guide itself, so this isn't a change I would like to make.
2) Woooooah. Courage should be gotten way earlier. That extra magic resist and armour...
Ive gotten many a kill buy putting one point into Decisive Strike and 2 into Judgment at lvl 3. That second point into Judgment early is very powerful. Courage was buffed recently to where you get max resistances with only one point in it, so maxing it last is the best choice.
3) I feel as if you should grab Phage before Infinity Edge for the increased slow, so you KNOW the enemy is going no where when you spin to win.
This isn't true. Phage only gives you a 25% slow chance. Technically it should proc 1 every 4 attacks, but it never works out that way. Whats really important for Garen mid game, is for it to proc on Decisive Strike. That hardly ever happens with Phage. I wouldn't slow down Infinity Edge for something that may or may not work.
4) Atma's but hardly any health items. Sure Garen is naturally tanky, but maybe an extra health item in their would be beneficial. Banshee's?
I don't understand why people think like this. Ive seen pros build Atmas with nothing but a Trinity Force. With Frozen Mallet you get 57 AD. Thats almost as much AD as Bloodthirster. But your also getting armor and crit chance. And you get all that for only 2355 gold... How is that not worth it?
5) Expanded Mind is very important for hitting level 6 before/at the same time as enemies.
Im guessing you were talking about Awareness? It doesnt make sense on Garen. Thats a support champion mastery. If your playing correctly you should be topping the charts in CS and kills so theres no reason for Awareness. Its useless late game and requires you to spec into stuff that Garen doesnt need.
6) Your intro is a little long, but it is well written. However, it is a HUGE wall of text. Add colour, formatting, anything. You need to break it up with visually pleasing relief. You don't want to bore your reader before they even get to the guide itself. Even wiki coding Garen would be fantastic.
Added wiki coding.
7) Don't include champion Lore. If you really want to do it, put it at the very end. Don't delay what the reader wants to read.
I actually expanded that section lol. But I moved it to the bottom of the guide as you suggested.
8) List alternative runes. List alternative masteries. Combine the two sections, as both are too small to be separate sections. Try using the bbcode for runes and masteries. I detail how to do so in my guide about making a guide.
I combined the two sections. Didn't add alternatives because I don't use any.
9) Center those skill icons. Also, too much colour. Highlight the important parts in colour, leave the rest in white. Or at least find softer versions of blue and green. And by softer, for the love of god, I don't mean fluro.
When I was making my guide I made 2 draft versions. One without the green/blue color break and one with. I couldnt stand to look at the version without. I hate reading white text. Wiki coding and fancy formats dont change that and its the reason I dont read most guides. Thats a change Im not gonna make. The dark green and blue were the most pleasing to the eye. My eyes anyway.
Instead of centering the icons I formatted every section with icons the same way I had my Preferred Lane Partners section. Should of done that to begin with.
10) Don't list useless summoner spells. Again, center those icons. Again, too much colour.
11) Your Off-Tank Garen section is pretty much not needed. Just include the different items you don't detail elsewhere into the items section.
If Im gonna have it in the guide I feel the need for it to have its own section.
12) For your laning champion section, try using float coding. Detailed in my guide about writing a guide.
13) Put Solo Top under Laning partners. Put Teamfighting after Early Game and before Mid game.
14) So much walls of text. Please use wikicoding. Please use colour sparingly. Please add images. Do your best to entertain the reader.
I used wiki coding where ever white text was used. Also added some images to each section. The color stays. If Im so fond of it, there has to be others that agree with the choice.
Thanks again for the review.
Constructive Criticism:
1) While it's true many people buy multiple Doran's, I would not suggest actually displaying that in your guide. Keep it short and neat. Mention getting extra Doran's in the text itself, but not visually in the Purchase Order.
Many people, myself included, will just look at a build and not read the guide itself, so this isn't a change I would like to make.
2) Woooooah. Courage should be gotten way earlier. That extra magic resist and armour...
Ive gotten many a kill buy putting one point into Decisive Strike and 2 into Judgment at lvl 3. That second point into Judgment early is very powerful. Courage was buffed recently to where you get max resistances with only one point in it, so maxing it last is the best choice.
3) I feel as if you should grab Phage before Infinity Edge for the increased slow, so you KNOW the enemy is going no where when you spin to win.
This isn't true. Phage only gives you a 25% slow chance. Technically it should proc 1 every 4 attacks, but it never works out that way. Whats really important for Garen mid game, is for it to proc on Decisive Strike. That hardly ever happens with Phage. I wouldn't slow down Infinity Edge for something that may or may not work.
4) Atma's but hardly any health items. Sure Garen is naturally tanky, but maybe an extra health item in their would be beneficial. Banshee's?
I don't understand why people think like this. Ive seen pros build Atmas with nothing but a Trinity Force. With Frozen Mallet you get 57 AD. Thats almost as much AD as Bloodthirster. But your also getting armor and crit chance. And you get all that for only 2355 gold... How is that not worth it?
5) Expanded Mind is very important for hitting level 6 before/at the same time as enemies.
Im guessing you were talking about Awareness? It doesnt make sense on Garen. Thats a support champion mastery. If your playing correctly you should be topping the charts in CS and kills so theres no reason for Awareness. Its useless late game and requires you to spec into stuff that Garen doesnt need.
6) Your intro is a little long, but it is well written. However, it is a HUGE wall of text. Add colour, formatting, anything. You need to break it up with visually pleasing relief. You don't want to bore your reader before they even get to the guide itself. Even wiki coding Garen would be fantastic.
Added wiki coding.
7) Don't include champion Lore. If you really want to do it, put it at the very end. Don't delay what the reader wants to read.
I actually expanded that section lol. But I moved it to the bottom of the guide as you suggested.
8) List alternative runes. List alternative masteries. Combine the two sections, as both are too small to be separate sections. Try using the bbcode for runes and masteries. I detail how to do so in my guide about making a guide.
I combined the two sections. Didn't add alternatives because I don't use any.
9) Center those skill icons. Also, too much colour. Highlight the important parts in colour, leave the rest in white. Or at least find softer versions of blue and green. And by softer, for the love of god, I don't mean fluro.
When I was making my guide I made 2 draft versions. One without the green/blue color break and one with. I couldnt stand to look at the version without. I hate reading white text. Wiki coding and fancy formats dont change that and its the reason I dont read most guides. Thats a change Im not gonna make. The dark green and blue were the most pleasing to the eye. My eyes anyway.
Instead of centering the icons I formatted every section with icons the same way I had my Preferred Lane Partners section. Should of done that to begin with.
10) Don't list useless summoner spells. Again, center those icons. Again, too much colour.
11) Your Off-Tank Garen section is pretty much not needed. Just include the different items you don't detail elsewhere into the items section.
If Im gonna have it in the guide I feel the need for it to have its own section.
12) For your laning champion section, try using float coding. Detailed in my guide about writing a guide.
13) Put Solo Top under Laning partners. Put Teamfighting after Early Game and before Mid game.
14) So much walls of text. Please use wikicoding. Please use colour sparingly. Please add images. Do your best to entertain the reader.
I used wiki coding where ever white text was used. Also added some images to each section. The color stays. If Im so fond of it, there has to be others that agree with the choice.
Thanks again for the review.
Confehdehrehtheh
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Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 101 as of this post I believe
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Firefox grabs spelling errors with underlines as I type so the only ones that might have been missed are ones that my eyes couldn't pick out. Bad vision messes me up sometimes :(
Guide For (champion): Sona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm always looking for feedback on the guide itself. I take pride in this guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: Format and content mostly. General advice will be appreciated of course.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sona-super-support-revamped-for-support-overhaul-77657
Post Count (at time of request): 101 as of this post I believe
Spell & Grammar check completed: YES Firefox grabs spelling errors with underlines as I type so the only ones that might have been missed are ones that my eyes couldn't pick out. Bad vision messes me up sometimes :(
Guide For (champion): Sona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'm always looking for feedback on the guide itself. I take pride in this guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: Format and content mostly. General advice will be appreciated of course.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/sona-super-support-revamped-for-support-overhaul-77657
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Aura-Support/CDR Sona|Jungle Yorick
Summoner Level: 30
Post Count (at time of request): 2535
Spell & Grammar check completed: Spelling-yes, grammar-mostly
Guide For (champion): Kayle
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to see some constructive criticism, I have some sheep vote and "Tank Kayle is for noobs" kind of comments, but nothing particularly helpful lately.
What I'd like you to focus on: Whatever you feel needs commenting on
Guide Link: Kayle, Paladin of the League
Post Count (at time of request): 2535
Spell & Grammar check completed: Spelling-yes, grammar-mostly
Guide For (champion): Kayle
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I would like to see some constructive criticism, I have some sheep vote and "Tank Kayle is for noobs" kind of comments, but nothing particularly helpful lately.
What I'd like you to focus on: Whatever you feel needs commenting on
Guide Link: Kayle, Paladin of the League
Oh man, my week long NYC trip really made me fall behind.... Im going to go and make my build really in depth and etc when I get home. Promise. I get back in 3 days though :(. Already bored.
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Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
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What I'd like you to focus on: Everything, by everything I mean everything. Make 30 points instead of 10 so I would submit less. :d
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Guide For (champion): Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: To make it perfect. 3rd time I'm submitting, feels like going to a doctor.
What I'd like you to focus on: Everything, by everything I mean everything. Make 30 points instead of 10 so I would submit less. :d
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/carry-me-morde-108278
I'll probably add/change more stuff till my turn comes.
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Guide For (champion): Master Yi
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Re-Review, I changed many things around. It is now more a general Yi guide with the focus at "Final" Yi.
What I'd like you to focus on: The changed things.
Guide Link: "Final" Yi, King of Jungle
Post Count (at time of request):564
Spell & Grammar check completed: Not really, i cannot do it^^. Google Translate sucks...
Guide For (champion):
Master YiWhy I'd like this to be Reviewed: Re-Review, I changed many things around. It is now more a general Yi guide with the focus at "Final" Yi.
What I'd like you to focus on: The changed things.
Guide Link: "Final" Yi, King of Jungle
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