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Guide For (champion): Sona
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Back for another! And I'm not quite as sure about this one.
What I'd like you to focus on: The feeling of the second half (on gameplay, warding, clairvoyance. All of that stuff). It doesn't look clean to me for some reason.
Guide Link: This one!

ChefoSLR wrote:

Champion Guide for: Leona, revamped
Reasons why I want you to review it: I think I did a really god job of following your advice from your last review. I haven't missed a thing and have added a lot more content, as well as changing some to better fit the build.
Things I want you to focus on: Primarily the changes, I hope everything's perfect now.
Link: Leona, Bloodstained Light (Updated)

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Guide For (champion): Orianna
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I put in a great deal explaining how to play AP Orianna correctly including Early, Mid and Late Game. The different way your ball can be used. I've also outlined all the possible items that you could use and when you should be getting them (including core starting build).
What I'd like you to focus on: The guide and the skill order. I have explained a lot here about all her different factors.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/play-with-my-balls-complete-detailed-ap-orianna-guide-106580

XxStarkxX wrote:

Guide For (champion):
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: Its my first guide.
What I'd like you to focus on: My Runes, I'm weak at runes, would appreciate the help
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/minor-support-ad-beast-kayle-107270

lithybaer wrote:

Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: This is my first guide, and I'd like it very much if someone helped me out and gave me some pointers.
What I'd like you to focus on: Your opinion on if my guide is clear and concise, as well as your opinions on the guide itself regarding accuracy of concepts.
Guide Link: Wukong the Burst King

VKZ95 wrote:

Guide for: Mordekaiser
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I want to know what experienced players think of my guide
What I'd like you to focus on: items (what could be changed)
Guide Link: Mordekaiser

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Guide For : Nocturne
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I'd like some feedback from pros.
What I'd like you to focus on: Build order, format of the guide, what i should add, etc. Pretty much just anything I can change in it.
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/fedturne-that-dark-thing-in-the-jungle-107889

Ikaax wrote:

Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I will love to get your opinion on it
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you can see on it :)
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-on-the-cloud-107787

kin333x wrote:

Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: just want it re reviewed, I changed a bunch of things since the last time.
What I'd like you to focus on: i checked for grammatical errors but i think i might have missed some i changed it quite a bit (reorganized the whole guide and re wrote a bunch too).
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-the-tanky-dps-106043

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Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: i'd like to know what i could add to make it better :)
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think can be added or changed.
Guide Link:http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-that-funky-monkey-detailed-guide-106047

I'll get to reviewing soon! On another note, Nighthawk has opened his own Review Thread Here. Go ahead and check it out ^^
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Tol Eressea's Jungle Shaco Guide

1) I know Shaco is very good at getting away, but I'm always wary of guides that don't have Flash as a summoner spell.

2) :/ You have no resistances before you buy Warmog's Armor. I'd suggest buying Banshee's Veil before it, so you have some magic resist to go with the minuscule amount of armour from Wriggle's Lantern. Always buy resistances before health, or resistances with health before straight up health. Read Here.


1) Not needed. Still good tho, ofc.

2) That's not always how you should build. Warmog gets stronger as time passes. But you'll generally want about 100 in both resistances before getting a bulk HP item.
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Guide For (champion): Kennen

Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: It haven't got any votes for a while. I would like you to look at it :) And all publicity is good publicity.

What I'd like you to focus on: Item build. And general build "look" and "writing style".

Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/kennen-the-off-tank-ninja-102793?page=1
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jhoijhoi wrote:

Lugignaf's Jungle Udyr Guide
Verdict: A short, and to the point jungle Udyr guide.
Possible Improvements: The guide may be a bit short. It's very succinct, which is great, but the author doesn't really explain Udyr's role in a teamfight, or what he is meant to do and how to do it. Bear Stance > Tiger Stance > Bear Stance doesn't tell me anything. The jungling section could include a routed map, which would be nice, or a video of the route. The author needs to work on some formatting errors and making his guide a tad prettier. Otherwise, a good guide.

Constructive Criticism:

1) Flash + Stun > Ghost + Bear Stance
I'm not quite sure what you mean by this. You mean "GTFO power" or speed?

2) o.O Not even one level of Phoenix Stance?
It's difficult to set up a concrete skill order because most of Udyr's skill choices are dependent on how the game is going.
3) Centring your large icons would give a nice effect. Also, it may just be me, but that fluro text + the more fluro text under it is making my eyes bleed. I literally can't read it or look at it too long.
Fluro text? What's that? I'm assuming by "center your large icon" you mean in the skill section, right? I don't see any other large icons otherwise.

4) Why wouldn't Phoenix stance pop Banshee's?
I think it actually does but only under the "third attack" proc. It's worth it to pre-charge your flame blast but not worth it to try to use it in fights very effectively unless you have to. I will add clarification.

5) You say you get a level of Phoenix at level 6, but your skilling order says otherwise.
Again, I sometimes get it at level six but it depends on how well ganks and tower pushes are going. Look at 2 for my full analyses

6) Your Items section is a bit lacklustre. It needs larger icons and colour. But that's only my opinion, some people may think it's neat and orderly :)
It probably does need more color.

7) Half of your Jungling section is in list format by accident. An image of the route would be nice.
The list is not by accident. I will get video soon. I just haven't gotten around to it yet, lol.

8) Use the powers MobaFire gives you:


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I think I got a little lazy that day and didn't want to use icons. I'll add them in today.

9) Why is the order of your chapters so weird?
I do not think they are weirdly ordered. Pre-game planning.(masteries/skill explanations) In-game planning (jungle route, items to get.) But you are right. I still need to add a teamfight section.

Note: One level of Perseverance is okay. Consecutive levels after that only give 1% so the effects are so minimal you may as well put the point elsewhere.
IMO, that second point is better than improved ghost because it gives him a slightly safer jungle but, I will try it the other way around.

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Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: I will love to get your opinion on it
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you can see on it :)
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-on-the-cloud-107787
Check out my Guides: Wukong
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I'm not sure if its ok to ask for re reviews but anyway.

Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: just want it re reviewed, I changed a bunch of things since the last time.
What I'd like you to focus on: i checked for grammatical errors but i think i might have missed some i changed it quite a bit (reorganized the whole guide and re wrote a bunch too).
Guide Link: http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-the-tanky-dps-106043


Oh by the way thanks for reviewing it before
Thanks to jhoijhoi MoonEdge For the sigs!
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Guide For (champion): Wukong
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: i'd like to know what i could add to make it better :)
What I'd like you to focus on: Anything you think can be added or changed.
Guide Link:http://www.mobafire.com/league-of-legends/build/wukong-that-funky-monkey-detailed-guide-106047

Thanks in advance
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jhoijhoi wrote:

Tol Eressea's Jungle Shaco Guide
Verdict: Absolutely one of the most interesting and well presented guides I have ever read. The build itself is certainly a different take on the normally glass cannon Shaco builds I see, and the reasoning behind the item choices is coherent and mathematically backed. A wonderful guide to read and learn from.


Wow. This seems like very high praise, and I really, really appreciate you taking the time to read it all the way through. Just some quick responses to some of your criticism:

Quoted:
1) I know Shaco is very good at getting away, but I'm always wary of guides that don't have Flash as a summoner spell.


I tried to deal with this in the summoner spells portion of the guide. Are you referring to the fact that it isn't listed as one of the two summoner spells at the top? Given that its a competitive/high elo geared guide, I can definitely swap exhaust for flash on that one.

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2) :/ You have no resistances before you buy Warmog's Armor. I'd suggest buying Banshee's Veil before it, so you have some magic resist to go with the minuscule amount of armour from Wriggle's Lantern. Always buy resistances before health, or resistances with health before straight up health. Read Here.


Indeed! I've actually run this math already so here goes: The average level I'm likely to get + + is going to be around 10-12. The next buy is the crucial choice ( vs ).

At level 11 choosing...
Giant's Belt gets me:
HP: 1805
Physical Damage HP: 3006
Magic Damage HP: 2600
Effective HP: 2803


vs

Negatron Cloak:
HP: 1379
Physical Damage HP: 2291
Magic Damage HP: 2644
Effective HP: 2468


This is a very important stage of the game, and unless you do something fast, Shaco's damage will be too low for it. Taking the time to finish an entire banshee's veil will just take too long, and you'll lose damage momentum. Building Merc Treads is viable here, but generally only to combat high CC teams. The extra HP makes you sustainable at THIS stage (I totally agree with the resist + hp over just hp argument).

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3) Err, you have Merc Treads bought after 3 large items...


Again, I tried to make it clear (perhaps I could do better) that item buying is going to depend on what they have, not what the guide says. I laid out the options, but you aren't always going to finish triforce before merc treads - players need to learn to make that decision on the fly.

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4) You may like to add some colour into your guide :)


Very fair. I've been meaning to do it, but it's a bit time consuming. Full time job and all... :D

Quoted:
5) Another con, "Squishy early game"


Added.

Quoted:
6) Flash as opposed to - it's easier, I promise ^^


Oh wow. That just changed my life right there.

Quoted:
7) Center all videos :)


Done!

Quoted:
8) You can use the new embedding system. (masteries), (items), (abilities) - just replace ( ) with [ ]


Definitely going to give this a try.

Quoted:
9) I think you need to add in some extra spaces in your item breakdown section. It all seems so clumped together. The headings and items could be centred and that'd look nice too.


I tried this out at one point but couldn't make it work. I'll give it another go.

Quoted:
10) When using separator lines:

enter
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enter
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to ensure flow and so the lines don't touch text.


Legit. I'll get to this soon I think.

Do I need to fix everything 100% to get a vote up? ;)
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I thought it was double brackets to embed? O.o
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Guide For: Tristana
Why I'd like this to be Reviewed: First build. Bit nervous as to how my quality fares.
What I'd like you to focus on: Is my guide too wordy? Are the pictures explanatory and aid the words, or do they confuse?
Guide Link: Tristana: A Lameo's In-Depth Guide

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